The Eighth Tavern

It is a very thoughtful and personal book, but I personally have some small suggestions. The narrative can be more organized. If there are many characters, the plot can be spread out slowly. There is no need to write about the less important characters in one stroke. There is no need to label the characters. The characters can slowly appear and write out memory points. The first impression when they appear can be written more comprehensively. The description of the environment that has little to do with the plot and the lengthy language without character color can be omitted. There is a little transition between the plots, and if you want to add some lyrics, you don't need to be so blunt. Some twists and turns can be used to foreshadow the story to advance the story and create a mini-climax. The written language can be less, and using the perspective of the protagonist to experience it makes the whole story more popular and shortens the distance between the reader and the characters. Finally, I would like to share my personal understanding: no matter whether online articles or traditional books use too many gorgeous words, it will be very difficult when it comes to actually giving out memory points like a verse before a chorus.

It's very good-looking, but there are still some shortcomings. The overall rhythm of the story is too fast. The environment and main characters can be properly described. Other than that, it's okay. I look forward to what this work will look like in the future.

It's very interesting, but the description of the characters is not good enough. It's a bit too fast. You can slow down the pace appropriately.

It looks so good. I have to try that violet fizz.

It's like a friend telling a story, very relaxing and good

It's beautiful and looks a little like everyday life, but it makes people want to stop 😘

Well written, teacher!