Honkai: Star Rail: Playing Cerydra's Teammate, Hysilens

The plot is very good, not too OOC, and the writing obviously gets better later on. Note: The sentences about the description of the heart in the early stage are indeed a bit... Obtrusive... It may be a bit embarrassing if you read too much, but there will be no more later, so if you are interested in this book, you must persist until the second volume 🤦 I have never written an article on Tomato, but based on my experience on other platforms, it should still be possible to modify it when published? If you can hope that the author will take time to polish the front part (it is easy to lose readers), forget it, but it is recommended to note the improvement of the writing style later. Also, please update quickly (whipping 🤭)

The content of the previous life in the prologue is better than many novels of this type and exceeds expectations. The long and difficult sentence at the beginning shows that the author is indeed a newcomer, and there are some strange things in the main text. Putting aside the issue of combat power, which is the most important issue, the author has pointed out all the foreshadowings more than once, but the protagonist has not been able to guard against any of them, and basically cannot get on the table at all. The impression is that the protagonist sees this person having problems many times but pulls her out without warning. The protagonist feels that she is in danger but never reacts... All the crises that are described and prompted many times exceed the protagonist's reaction. Secondly, in the character description, we can see the complete character arc of Hessein in the two worlds, and we can also see Kerudra's mental journey. However, the protagonist has no change and no strong desire to simply follow the development of the situation and make the next step. There is no soul resonance between her and Kelu except for the ghost upper body. Her background without Kelu is just an empty shell with the habit of Kelu. However, as a newcomer, this book is definitely qualified and can arouse emotions very well. The two things that can be changed now are to add the prefix of which chapter it is before the title of each chapter, and the second is to look at the broken sentences in other books and divide them into paragraphs (use your mobile phone to check it for yourself📖), so as to reduce the long and difficult sentences in one paragraph and one paragraph. Finally, just think more about what readers can see and feel from their perspective and write content that everyone likes the most. It's good-looking, so go for it!

The writing is very good, but the combat power is a bit too harsh. As a demigod powered by nothingness, Heiseyin should be the strongest among the 12 demigods or second only to the ten thousand enemy Bai E. There is also Aglaiya. Although there is not much performance in the plot, it is just a question of whether she wants to or not. As long as she wants to, she can kill the Senate. Even without the combat power, the Golden Thread's defensive ability is very strong and can block the attack of the Titan of Dispute. To defend against the Black Tide, the entire Ohema is covered with the Golden Thread. Aglaiya can know every move. The World Wide Web also relies on the Golden Thread to transmit data. Saifei is also a demigod. It took a few minutes to use the speed power to exhaust himself. How can he escape the black evil behind this physical strength?

It's pretty good, but the combat power seems a little wrong.

It's okay, but it's a bit frustrating to see the combat power. It's like a weakened version of the golden descendant from a parallel world that was changed for the plot.

Awesome, highly recommended

Not bad, keep up the good work!

The writing is very good, the logic is rigorous, the plot is reasonable, and it is very interesting.

Full of faintness!!! I'm already dizzy from the engraved sea fairy!!

I can only sum it up in one word: "Awesome"