[One Female Lead + High Martial Arts + Special Abilities + Decisive and Ruthless + Always Gets Revenge + Not Brain-Dead + Expert in the Later Stages]
The male lead, Cao Can, was casually playing on his phone by the roadside on his way home, waiting for the light to turn green. Then he heard a deafening crash. He had just raised his puzzled face when a speeding heavy truck grew larger and larger in his pupils... “Holy crap...” Before he could finish speaking, he had left this world.
“Yan Jin? Another person with the C-rank ability ‘Kindling’ has awakened? Sigh, we’ll have to make preparations ahead of time.” A powerful figure seated on a black-and-gold throne at the very center of a dark hall sighed.
“Kindling... Kindling... I wonder if it can grow stronger this time.” A heavy, authoritative voice came from within a tower as translucent as crystal.
“Hey, hey, hey, don’t... don’t fall asleep, Yan Jin! Didn’t you say you’d take me to see the tallest mountain and the... the longest river?” A girl sobbed uncontrollably. Her long hair was unbound, loosely held in place by a jade hairpin, with a few wisps resting against her neck and making her skin look as pale as moonlight. Most striking were her starry eyes, glistening with tears like pear blossoms in the rain, making anyone want to protect her.
Someone shouted, “Burn the Heavens!” The endless black fog surrounding everyone and the chaotic, horrifying roars abruptly ceased. A young man emerged from a sea of flames. His broad shoulders gave his black trench coat a strikingly upright silhouette, and his jawline was sharp and clean. When the wind lifted his tousled hair, his features appeared keen and clear. A short red sword pendant dangled from his right earlobe, its crimson hue blazing like a fierce fire and glinting in the light. It made the lines of his ear all the sharper and added a touch of defiance.
He was both a brilliant sun and an undying ember.
The structure is quite clear, the content is also very good, and all aspects are good, but some details still need to be changed. Also, the focus should be on the protagonist. Why do other people write so much? After all, this is your first time writing. You should write better and better in the future. The potential is not small. I wish you good luck and success!