A Happy Life in The Tale of Rose

The male protagonist is a bit awkward One paragraph is too long, please divide it into more paragraphs The characters of Huang Yimei and her father are well created. I hope you can continue to write well. Good luck to the author.

The ability of a modern person to accept things after re-living is almost zero. You wrote about a person who was reborn and went to Tsinghua University from an orphanage. Looks awkward

It feels like there are too many detailed descriptions, and it doesn't feel like I'm reading a novel, but like I'm reading prose. The important thing in novels is plot. It feels like it has been changed from a female novel to a male novel, the writing is too delicate.

It's embarrassing to write, it's embarrassing to watch, that's it!

If there is too much inner drama, it becomes pretentious

This book should be written by a practicing author. There are too many psychological descriptions of the characters, the plot of the story is advanced too slowly, and the reading is too slow and unsmooth.

The paragraphs are too long and it is inconvenient to read. The protagonist has a twisted personality, is not confident and a bit cowardly. Huang Yimei looks good, but she doesn't dare to get close because she is afraid of being involved in some plot vortex. When the heroine approaches other men, the protagonist puts his head in his crotch. He doesn't even dare to fart. He stumbles even when talking to the heroine. The protagonist has no blood at all.

Too much textual exaggeration, too many dazzling skills will only cause boredom, and the description of the protagonist does not fit the setting of the article.

It's too boring, there are too many inner dramas, and the protagonist has a little low self-esteem.

Whether it's time travel or rebirth. Re-recognize myself in a strange and familiar environment, and find out who I am, who I am, where I came from and where I am going! It also highlights the illusion and reality of Huang Yimei (invincible charm)!