A top-tier corporate wage slave had been worked to the bone, and just as he caught his breath, a freak accident “rammed” him into a female-oriented fantasy novel.
He opened his eyes to find himself in the worst situation from the start: the female lead’s wicked older brother, unrelated to her by blood, who was destined to be chopped into mincemeat in the original story.
To save his own skin, he immediately set about making amends, replacing every point in his “sabotage my little sister” skill tree with “spoil my little sister.” His sister needed resources? He’d grind dungeons all night. She was in danger? He’d rush to the front. He had only one goal: cling to the female lead’s coattails and make it safely to the end.
But as the story went on, things started to go off the rails. He gave his sister resources, and she gazed at him with sparkling eyes; he took a hit for her, and she clung to him with tears in her eyes.
Why are you looking at me? Look at the male lead, for goodness’ sake!
Shen Yanqing took a deep breath and spoke slowly, with a calm tone of voice: "After I died unexpectedly in another world, I opened my eyes again and came to this book world, replacing 'Shen Yanqing'. And you, Shen Qinghe, are the protagonist in this book."
The left brain attacks the right brain, and the sharp point replaces thinking🤔
The development of the relationship between the male and female protagonists is in line with people's hearts. The shortcoming is that there are too few relationship transitions. The plot is in line with the name, mainly surrounding the male protagonist and his sister. This is not a gimmick. The introduction does not specify a single female protagonist. It seems that it is a single female protagonist at present. I hope it will still be a single female protagonist.
Overall, there aren't too many problems, but I feel like a few more events could be written about the relationship with the heroine. In the cave, you can first have physical contact to "transfer the skills", and then add the kissing incident later. The writing here is a bit rushed. The reader basically doesn't feel anything before kissing and confessing, and it is very blunt. Not to mention the heroine, if I see someone kissing me in front of my enemy's face, I will feel a little uncomfortable and accept it too quickly. And I don't know whether to talk about it or not. It feels like a science student writing a novel. I feel that many things that can be written in detail have been brushed off in one stroke, which is very dull. As for the episode about Yang Qingfeng's obsession, it could be written as a separate chapter in other books. However, I personally think this episode is a good story, but it lacks a lot of emotional description. And isn't the worldview pushed a little too hastily? What kind of combat power does the protagonist have, and now he comes into contact with people outside the world? I thought I would have to tangle with the Demonic Cult for a while before involving the royal family, and then I would talk about outsiders 🤦
The introduction does not match the content. I suggest you change it, okay? It's too crooked, and it's more subdued. Don't blame me for being ruthless. Usually when I see this kind of title and introduction, the deviation is too large, and novels that are more subdued will give negative reviews. I'm almost becoming a bad reviewer [awkward laugh] [awkward laugh] I don't want to either, aren't there any excellent works? Does anyone recommend it?
This book is not very well written and has several shortcomings. Although the protagonist has just traveled through time and knows the plot, it takes a process to practice daily things that cannot be understood in an instant. Also, our heroine's brother suddenly treats her well. I only have a little suspicion. This is very abnormal. The plot is not very good, too fast, one place instantly goes to another place, there is no writing in between, and the words are too casual, important information is directly told to strangers, you should find someone more reliable, and don't be afraid of the first battle. It's unreasonable that I don't feel scared or nervous. I can only say that this book is not very well written.
Stop at chapter 21. How can I put it... The plot is too rigid, it looks like it has only a skeleton and no flesh and blood.
It's a great book. No matter what other reasons you use, you must confess that you are a character in the book. I have read this book and know the plot development later. The protagonist created by the author is so sincere, he is simply the light of humanity and a role model for our generation.
If you don't think about logical issues, this book is pretty good.
There are still shortcomings, but overall the flaws are not concealed. It can be seen that they are working hard on writing, and the new author should encourage him. There are no big problems with the writing, and there are no bad jokes or coined words (I really don't like the empty words about an island country popping up in novels about cultivating immortals. If you use this in urban campus novels, it's okay). The points worth debating are, firstly, the confession of the relationship between the two is a bit blunt. It can be seen that the author arranged a life-and-death situation, and the male and female protagonists who advance and retreat together confess to each other. This design is good, but it is still too early to put it in the entire work. From the beginning of the male protagonist's change to the incident of taking the flame fruit, they only met two or three times. This is a bit unreasonable logically. For a person who has abused him for a long time to suddenly change, it is unlikely to let down his guard so quickly in the short term. It is better to put this confession later; The second is that after the confession, the heroine calmly and naturally accepted that she and the world she exists in are a book, which is a bit awkward. It would be easier for the heroine to explain it in terms of "the way of heaven" or "reincarnation", which would make it easier for the heroine to understand. The sect in which the male and female protagonists live in this work is relatively pure, simple from top to bottom, and their hearts are in one place. Therefore, it is quite understandable that the male protagonist is relatively simple in dealing with people and does not have any crooked intentions. The author can refine the setting. The world here is rich in spiritual energy and resources, so the relationship between immortal cultivators is relatively harmonious. It is not the end of the Dharma era when the path to immortality is cut off and spiritual energy is insufficient.