Ming Ke: That Girl with Brown Hair

The problem is the same as the excellent point. The protagonist is very fulfilling and vivid, but it is too real. The male protagonist does not know the plot background. The only advantage is that the eyes are easy to use and the brain is smart. But like the incompetent husband, he wants to do his own special things, but the description of the girl when he was a child is very unclear, and then jumps to daily life... The overall feeling is that there is something I want to write but I can't understand it. I have been pursuing it since I met her when I was a child. It's very uncomfortable to watch a person who has been so persistent for ten years and doesn't know how to adapt in this framework where everyone is intrigued by each other. The male protagonist is a high-ranking and low-achieving person. He has a high force value but can't beat his childhood playmates. He doesn't turn around even after being caught. I basically didn't do anything at the dock. I was very busy, but when I saw the results, I just ran around. (°ー°) Why did I also add plots from other worlds? If I reposted half of the world of Conan, and then reposted it, the look and feel would be much different. Suggestions: 1. Increase the description of Xiao Ai and the male protagonist when she was a child. You can add a little more plot or dialogue. 2. The male protagonist's grandfather should be a bit helpful, either in terms of background or in participating in the plot. 3. The male protagonist's force value cannot be high or low. He must take action in the events he participates in and cannot run around. 4. Increase Xiao Ai's scenes, inner activities, and sensationalism will make people feel that the foundation is unstable. Come on! I wish your novels will get better and better! (This is just my experience in reading and writing. The author's writing style is much better than mine. I would never be able to write it.)

How can I put it, the content is quite good, but the author likes to add other dramas, and it feels a bit like a variety show. The male protagonist is a loser, and then there is another one I recommend. Because your name does not include a variety show, there are many readers who have not read it. Personally, I find it a bit awkward. I came to watch Conan, not a variety show. If it is a personal product, it is recommended not to add too many

The author's writing is really good. It's rare to see this type of Conan fanfic, and the rhythm is almost perfect. Come on, keep an eye on you! [Praise]

It's great. The protagonist's cheerful personality is rare in online novels. The eldest brother's temperament is really the best in any type of work.

It's very beautiful. I saw the figure of Brother Purgatory through the protagonist.