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The front is good, but the key is how to shape the name Mr. Qian into a scholar who uses money and fame to lure the protagonist to switch to the school? Is it appropriate?

Well written, I suggest removing 80% of the commas.

The writing is so exciting that I wouldn't even dare to do it in my dreams, hahahaha, but the writing is quite enjoyable, so I will stop scientific research today hahahaha

Good, good, good, good, good

It's a good book, but I studied liberal arts in college, and science students don't know much about the professional knowledge. But that doesn't stop me from thinking this book is well written.