When the Real Daughter Falls in Love with the Fake Daughter

The rhetoric in the first few chapters is gorgeous but unrealistic, and it feels like showing off. However, it is reduced a lot in the later chapters, so the perception is much improved. There are conflicts and contradictions in the plot structure. I don't know if the plot sequence has been adjusted or deleted, which has caused the changes in the characters' personalities to be very uneven or even abrupt, and the coherence is poor. The character creation is relatively lacking, and the psychological description of the two protagonists is one-sided. The shaping of nursery rhymes is largely focused on communication with the system. Xu Si is lacking, almost all the psychological descriptions are inconsistent, so that suddenly expressing his love for nursery rhymes is very inconsistent. The description after Chapter 40 is too lyrical and tends to deviate from the narrative. Continuing in this way may be detrimental to subsequent descriptions. I hope the author can face up to these small problems, and then continue to work hard to move forward.

Already finished, progressing quickly, most of the sugar + micro knife, the interaction between the two heroines is sweet, I made my aunt laugh most of the time while reading Chapter 50, it is worth reading (this article has electric shocks, readers who can't stand the system's electric shocks should consider this)

It's a classic story about dressing up as a villain heroine and then following the plot to explore the heroine's story. As the author, this is considered to be the second novel (I'll tell you in a low voice that I read it from Cinderella. It's so good that I want to read the author's other works). In fact, it's very well written, hahaha, because I found several similar novels on Tomato, but I couldn't read it at all. It can be said that the plot is not purely sweet and sweet. In fact, in the middle of this book, when I wrote about Bian Yue and then about Hang Tian, ​​I thought I was going to start another if line (bushi). If it could be written as np, it would have a different charm. Hahaha, I was stunned. I read the previous low-scoring comments about the plot and characters. As for the character, I don't think it's bad. It's just that the heroine switching back and forth between a villain and a loyal dog is quite interesting. Maybe she has some attributes...? The plot may be unreasonable in some places, but the author can be said to have just started writing. As long as it is not written with AI assistance, the degree of completion is already very high. His terrifying writing talent... I envy him hahaha. If you like sweets, I would like to praise the kidnapping plot and the subsequent seduction plot. The wife is so sweet, hahaha. Some people commented that the bug of kissing at the concert is not afraid of being discovered. As a CP brain, I think the plot is extremely sweet hahaha. The cool and possessive heroine who declares her sovereignty is really good. I hope the author can maintain his original intention and his love for writing. In fact, you don't need to ask the readers what they want to read. Of course, if you ask, I just want to see NPC, I want to see the IF line, I want to see the one where their identities are swapped, or the ancient one. In short, I want to see them all hahahaha Finally, I give you a five-star review. As a pass-through article about the heroine who comes with the time-travel system, the score is too low, at least an eight-point level. Hmm. (I look forward to the author replying to me. I believe that the lovely and kind author will definitely read my comments, right [shy])

The writing is online, the plot is online, there are many twists and turns, and the characters are really, really great. Highly recommended, I read it in one sitting. As a sweet article lover (who has never read BE and abuse articles), I really think it is very, very good-looking, very sweet, with a little bit of sourness in it, and almost no abuse. The discomfort is super short, and the misunderstanding is solved immediately. I haven't seen such a good article in a long time. It's so strong. The plot is also very good, and the twist at the end is quite big. Why is the author so smart? All the pitfalls have been fixed. The characters are all full-bodied and three-dimensional. I thought some people would have a bad ending. I was completely overthinking and it was just a sweet story. At the same time, as a long-time lover of yandere literature, this book is quite paranoid and very respectful. I can feel that A Si really loves love [I almost cried] Finally, I hope A Si and Tong Yao will be happy forever in another world.

This is the author's first Lily novel, thank you for your support! First of all, it is not a traditional book-wearing, and there will be a huge reversal in the later stage. Xu Si's personality change is a small foreshadowing. She was born to love Tong Yao. "Although my setting is to hate you, I can't help but fall in love with you." She will regard Tong Yao as "a nail in her bones and a meal on her plate." If students are struck by lightning, they can run away because the heroine will be electrocuted twice. Thank you for your support. Although the ending may be unexpected, it is guaranteed to be he! The author does not write be! ! ! Since this is my first emotional novel, I hope you can forgive me for any shortcomings in my writing skills!

I really like the setting of the tsundere and the dark puppy. Hey, the author's writing is so touching. Woohoo.

At 02:16, it's tied. I have to catch the bus at six o'clock. . The author is very thoughtful, but the reversal was caught off guard. In the early stage, except for the author's left and right brains occasionally fighting each other, it can be seen, and there is nothing too poisonous. You can still have a happy ending without a guide, because I am a shrimp Why did the old version swallow my records?

Hahaha, it's good-looking. Although some of the plots are unreasonable, but as a novel, I enjoyed reading it anyway, and the author also enjoyed writing it. It's all famous scenes, hahahaha. So when will the two heroines officially get together? Even though they pull each other off, it's still very interesting [Chigua]

I finally saw the subject I've been wanting to see for a long time…! It's so good to read. The author must keep writing——

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The writing is great, 🈶 such a shocking twist, I didn't realize it at all!

The plot is compact and the content is richer than I expected. The foreshadowing is all the way to the end. I stayed up all night and finished it at six in the morning. Keep up the good work, author! ! [Adoration][Adoration][Admiration]

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The ending was pretty good, but there was no heart-to-heart plot [Thinking], but I had already made a secret promise [I understand]

I feel okay

Good-looking, good-looking-.-Come on

Life is like a play, it all depends on acting~

It's quite interesting so far, I'm looking forward to the next article [Eating Melon]

It's really beautiful, but there are so few people [blowing kisses]

It's so beautiful, I love it and hate it at the same time

It's beautiful, it's so beautiful [Blow kiss] [Blow kiss] [Adore] [Adore] [Adore] It's a pity it's not over yet [Thinking]

It's so delicate. I really like little sister Tong Yao!

[Like] [Like] [Like] The author's description is very good, and he describes the inner struggle of children very well.

The content is quite generous [blowing kiss]

Good looking. Love to see more.

Nice! Really pretty!

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It's beautiful. It's so happy.

Very nice, highly recommended