Collapse of Iron: Weng Xing's Journey Begins with Jie Hu Xilian

The writing is quite good, and you are quite innovative. There are not many poisonous points here (personal thoughts, no personal attacks: as long as the protagonist is not too obsessed, I can read it)

Lift the blanket of memory and take away the ripples of the past. Abduct the saint of destiny and capture the stray cat. The weaver who teases the holy city, the miracle doctor who carries the morning light. Defeat the chess-playing monarch and capture the fish swimming in the abyss. The maid who embraces life and death, listens to the sighs of the arguer. Caress the necessary pain and wipe away the tears of the burning sun. Embrace your immortal companions and write a new ending.

It's fun, the character creation is okay, but there is a very serious problem, there are too many typos, the plot has been changed a little on the main line, and it generally follows the main line, except that the updated information will make it easier to fight the boss.

All fans have been abducted by the protagonist, and my memory has been eaten by you [smile]

She has sharp eyebrows and starry eyes, and her hair is let down casually without losing her beauty. A pair of thin lips were slightly raised, with a bit of nonchalance, as if the world was just a game to him. So, out of curiosity, Esta walked to Ye Lin's side. Ye Lin smiled bitterly.

I came across it on the recommendation list half a month ago. The introduction was a bit toxic, and I only had 6 points at that time. I didn't dare to read it. Now I found out that it had 8 points, so I came in and read it. It's unexpectedly good-looking. Some parts may be backstabbed. Don't pay too much attention to these details. The author is very serious about writing. It is a single heroine Xi Lian who abducts Mi Mi. There are many shortcomings, but overall it is good. The level is only 4 stars, but I give it full marks for the careful writing.

So far, I feel it's okay, at least it's not too poisonous. Although there are some typos, at least it's still a lot of fun to watch.

Come on, the writing is good. The plot is well written. Come on.

Come on. Very nice.

It's good to watch [Censored] Although it seems to be stabbed in the back by the new plot, it doesn't hurt, after all, different choices have different branches [Working on draft]

When the meteor of the broken watch falls on the book, only the resurrected author can escape from the destined demise. In order to prevent the sun from setting, the author flies into the sky and takes away your book waste. The author will write because of it and fall into the void. But if you want to take it back, you, you, must write to a higher place than the author. This is the logic behind discontinuation after a serialization break. This is the author's pen This is the end of this book Nothing to do with choice Nothing to do with life or death at this moment All the ideals converge into one single ambition! All the beasts in the Brahma world are added to this body Break into the abyss, get off the shelf and draw your sword Stepping forward, this is The inscription of "Breaking Change"! This time, I press the author's life into the pen and look forward to you Surpass all interruptions and delistings!

It is said to be a large version, but in fact it is a continuous companion mission, which is not coherent as a long story. The author wrote some words that are suitable as foreshadowing, such as asking Xiaobai's wish. The book may not be five stars, but it is supportive and supportive.

Very beautiful, the plot is well written

It's very beautiful. I haven't felt this way for a long time. The main character is just like a real MiHoYo character. I hope it's a happy reunion making dumplings. It's just too little at the moment. I finished reading it in one go [Salute] Don't be scared away by the introduction, it's still very interesting.

First of all, I want to say that the author's writing is very good. As of now, the heroine may be Xi Lian. And what I want to say is, author, you shouldn't end it at Ompharos, right? Probably not, author? ! I also want to see the protagonist and the train develop together later! So the author shouldn't end it at Ompharos, right? Probably? [Almost crying]

Just for this paragraph, you need 5 hearts Let those who cherish life sleep in the underworld where Yin and Yang are forever separated. Let him who has exhausted the truth be hasty in proving the way of his search. Let those who are tired of strife die on the battlefield where fate is inevitable. Let those who are crafty and scheming perish because they keep their unswerving promises. Let him who heals diseases be cut into pieces by a thousand cuts. Let those who are loyal and romantic be betrayed by the loss of humanity. Let those who unite all hearts suffer the pain of loneliness and separation. Finally, Let the most sincere and ignorant person bear the burden of everything in the past. Walk alone in the world until the end.

Not bad, not bad. Well, I look forward to the follow-up ray tracing production, but there is a problem, those ray tracing pictures. Can the author post it to everyone so that everyone can be okay? He just wants the protagonist to have multiple lives and not specialize in skills.

The plot is quite good, but there are some typos. This book should be between 8 and 9 out of 10. Also, is Xia Die really not the heroine? [Crying]

It's okay, even if Beng San and Xingtie are from the same family, forget it if you want to draw Beng Er, how could Beng San not exist? (ᗜ ˰ ᗜ) Not bad. The plot line is good

The setting is quite nice and interesting, but the beginning is mostly original after Ompharos. But now I am not optimistic about most of the original Bengtie fanfics, because I haven't seen a good one so far. Most of the originals are either ended suddenly or discontinued. It depends on how the author handles it.

As a Star Iron player, I like it very much. Star Iron 2: Half the Sky is either abstract or cinematic [laughing][laughing][laughing]

Keywords: Innocuous: A small amount of conspiracy theories (a kind of speculation about the plot of Aglaiya) Cilantro (mixed reviews): Suspected harem (many ambiguous plots) Small question: The article itself is somewhat fragmented (in reality, the connection between the narrative layer and the main line is a bit stiff)

It's not bad, but it would be better to change the main character's painting of light cones to strange objects. Bengtie already has the setting of strange objects. Light cones are equivalent to enchanting weapons, relics are equivalent to enhancing one's own equipment, and rare objects are equivalent to props, with various skill effects. Personally, I think it would be better to change the light cone to a strange object.

Just halfway through reading, I realized that the author had already been stabbed in the back. When we came down, we met Mi Mi for the first time. He was not the same as our Demiu brother, Mi Mi. There was a high probability that the first time we met was Xi Lianbian who didn't know where he was [face covering]. When we asked Demuo brother, Demuo said that he didn't know where Xilian went, and then we experienced Demuo's memory that when he had just turned into a goblin, it was the time when he met us for the first time [currently working on the manuscript]

In the plot, Da Xi Lian emphasized several times that he first met him when the Pioneers awakened their memories. The Mi Mi he met at the beginning of Onfalus could only be Xi Lian who was reincarnated. At the end of 3.4, Before the Pioneers entered the Aili Secret Pavilion, they brought ❓❓❓ Mi Mi. The figure said that he was the only one of the 30 million Xi Lian who had waited, and then merged into the Pioneer. Then he entered the Aili Secret Pavilion and directly saw the girl Xi Lian who had grown up in Demuge, so in fact, the Xi Lian who had been reincarnated was already in the Pioneer.

It's good-looking, very entertaining, and it's considered a high-quality product among many fans.

Can the protagonist be promoted to the emissary level in Wengxing? (Currently, the memory is suitable)

For many fans, this is a very good book. I hope it will be a single heroine [sending my heart]

It looks good, it looks good, it looks good, I hope it has a single heroine, after all, baby Xi Lian is so cute.

There is nothing toxic, the character design is not broken, it is funny and heartwarming without any criticism. At present, I don't see any tendency to start a harem, but Xi Lian should be accepted. I hope it won't be like the book "Why Weng Xing Has Two Saviors", which will be directly destroyed by the heroine in the later stage.