A Record of a Mortal's Journey to Immortality: Seeking Immortality

Text can. The map is quite large, with all the necessary software and hardware for skills, treasures, and spiritual pets. The combat descriptions are particularly good and exciting. I can't give it full marks because of one flaw, which is that I can't feel the tense and exciting atmosphere. My standard for market-oriented literary and artistic works is to "continuously break through the pressure." Only by "continuously breaking through the pressure" will readers release adrenaline hormones and pituitary dopamine during emotional relaxation, become mildly addicted, and develop an interest in reading. To achieve "continuous breakthrough of pressure" in fantasy novels about immortality, one must achieve the "four poles", namely extreme violence, extreme insidiousness, extreme reversal, and extreme satisfaction. The violence in this article is actually insufficient, not brutal enough. The fight description is wonderful, so I gave it 80 points. In terms of satisfaction, it is too much. It is almost like pie in the sky. It is too easy to obtain, and it does not achieve extreme satisfaction. The other two aspects are basically zero. Literary and artistic creation in the Internet era requires an open mind and not taking things too seriously. There are very few good works on the Internet that meet these conditions. Most of the works have some ideas, but the trouble is not big enough. Only when the trouble is big will you feel pressure and excitement. If you can't hold it back, you can still run away! Do you feel enlightened after reading my analysis? Remember that the human body's secretion of adrenal hormones and pituitary dopamine is not only a necessary condition for human survival, but also a free stimulant. Literary and artistic creation must firmly grasp this principle. Only by "continuously breaking through the pressure" can we obtain a sense of satisfaction. Technically, we must constantly provide readers with emotional stimulation in four aspects, making them immersed in it and unable to extricate themselves.

Come on, work hard, the pace is a bit fast, and the protagonist cheats a lot.

This article is very well written👍Keep up the hard work and don't write modern words into immortal novels! They have all become gods and have not yet returned to their hometown to worship their parents and leave opportunities for future generations of the family...

Play more as a pig and eat the tiger, more reversals, and learn to lay hooks and ambush.

Good luck with the friendly letter

Some places are incoherent, but the plot is OK

Five-star praise sent

Highly recommended, this book is clearly organized

It's a dream come true

The plot is well described, come on!