After Winning the Heroines’ Hearts, I Vanished Before Their Eyes!

It's okay, but the downside is that there are too many supporting roles. The author is advised to be more detailed.

I'm giving it four stars for now, it's not enough. Let me give a brief evaluation. The first eight chapters gave me a sense of immersion and allowed me to understand cause and effect. From the ninth chapter, the male protagonist appeared and his logical thinking was clear. But the previous time travel was a little flawed for me, but the title of the book is to return to Blue Star, and then the female protagonists will follow the male protagonist. (I have a question for the author here. Do you want to write back to Blue Star at the end to end it, or do you want the main story to be on Blue Star?) I hope the author will update more [Top post][Top post][Top post] Adding a comment, I hope the author can write more detailed and delicate emotional lines that are not written later (purely my personal thoughts). For those who are not well-read, you can take a look [learned]

After reading this book so far, I can only say that it is unsatisfactory. I personally think that the relationship between the male and female protagonists can be handled better. The past life chapter has a big problem, and in my opinion, this problem comes from the author's eagerness for quick success and quick success in shaping the relationship between the male and female protagonists and the heroine herself. It is extremely bad that the male protagonist does not appear in the entire past life chapter. If the male protagonist is allowed to enter in advance and every time the remnant soul guides painful memories, the male protagonist will appear to break this depression. The pain of memories gradually increases, and the male protagonist's understanding of the female protagonist gradually deepens, and every time the pain is broken, the relationship between the male and female protagonists deepens. Then after the heroine woke up, the heroine's goodwill came naturally. Why is it said that it is a bit quick and easy? The heroine's past life does not need to be told in one go. It is divided into multiple important small scene narratives. Each different memory appears at the key emotional node of the male and female protagonists. Especially if the female protagonist has practiced the ruthless way, it can completely become an obstacle for the male protagonist to conquer the female protagonist, trigger the core contradiction of the crisis of trust (for example), conflict, and then resolve it, and then deepen the relationship. Although the way the plot is handled is slightly lacking, the author is still trying hard to make the characters in the book more three-dimensional, which is worthy of praise. I hope the author can perform better [Learned]

A masterpiece, Laolao. The subject matter chosen is a bit old-fashioned, but the things written are very novel. It can be clearly seen that the author has put a lot of thought into character creation and plot design, and did not choose those routine writing methods. Many villains are also set up with great thought. They are not just pure bad guys, but a confrontation that inevitably occurs under the conflict of interests of multiple parties. Some conflicts also show that the author is thoughtful about the theme of the story. The author does a good job of describing the struggle of human nature and the flash of thoughts in the conflict, such as the part where the protagonist breaks through the Nascent Soul and the part where Su Da tries to reconcile the conflict. I think this is good. The logic of online writing does not have to be particularly strict, but it will always be better if it can make people think. The creation of the protagonist is what I particularly want to praise. The author does not let the protagonist become the mouthpiece of the theme of the work. The protagonist is not always great and invincible. The design of "defeating" the protagonist at the right time makes the protagonist more vivid and makes people want to read more. Finally, the plot will give you big surprises from time to time. This is a very interesting "anti-routine" design. In this way, even if the protagonist has a system, it can increase the suspense of the story and will not make other characters become the protagonist's cushion. This is brilliant. The writing style is acceptable, there are no major mistakes, and it reads smoothly. To summarize, this book: Plot design: ram Character creation: ram Writing style: Top notch Recommendation index: five stars (manual dog head) I hope the author can live a good life "Previous Life" is a bit too long, but overall it's okay. There are a lot of additions to the shaping of other supporting characters. It's quite enjoyable to watch it. But what to say? It's just a bit too long, and I'm not talking about it. I'm a semi-reader, so I may not feel that serious, but I'm afraid that those who follow it will be scared to death because of the long content 🤦 But it's quite complicated to say it. After all, some things can't be written if they're not long enough, so I suggest the author finish updating the previous life in one day 😏 (No). In short, I hope the author can find a rhythm that suits him I'm not a big reader, so I won't judge myself. Pursuing this book now feels like playing The End on January 22). Anyway, it's to my liking, so I'll try my best to support it.)

In the first chapter, everything seems to have been cleared up, and then a big villain parachuted in to make everything happen. The protagonist died in order to protect the heroine. This villain may be the mother of the little fox demon, or it may be something else. I'll give it four stars first and wait and see, and then I'll die. If I can clear my name, I'll give it seven stars.

Give a five-star lesbian rating, and then talk about your feelings. The plot is right there, and you can roughly guess it by looking at the name. The male protagonist is credited very quickly, and the female protagonist is also foreshadowed. There are some chapters in the middle that I skipped directly. Maybe I don't like emotional dramas, but the writing is good. Come on, author, I hope you don't become a eunuch 👍👍👍

I have watched almost half of it now, and I still feel quite good about it. This kind of group portrait is interesting to watch when there are many strong people who are not weaker than the protagonist, checking and balancing each other, instead of the protagonist crushing everyone alone. Keep up the good work The heroine's previous life is a bit too much. Also, how many female protagonists are there in this book? The introduction says there is one, but the title of the book and the "Shura Field" mentioned by the author in the comment section make it sound like there are multiple female protagonists.

Compared with similar works, there are many supporting characters and villains in the small world. They are not just tools for the protagonist to show off, but also describe a lot of the protagonist's psychological activities. The immersion is relatively strong, but there are also a lot of foreshadowing and pit digging. If the characters and pits can be coordinated well, it will be very interesting.

The little foxes written by the author are quite cute, but they all turned into corpses 🙂 The part in the mid-term in the ancestral land of the demon clan weakened the protagonist a little too much. The story is generally good, but the feeling of being led by the nose is really not good, and this part is too long. If you want to promote, you should suppress it first, which will directly suppress the readers to death😭.

It's good, good, not stupid, and the male protagonist improves his level very quickly. I still like to watch the emotional development of the male and female protagonists. I feel that the plot descriptions of other supporting characters are a bit long, and the past life chapter is too long. I wrote nearly 60 chapters, but I just skipped them. , Because there is no male protagonist π_π, in short, the better it is to get to the back, I want to see the change in the heroine's attitude towards the male protagonist after she wakes up˙ᗜ˙[smile][smile][smile]❤️❤️❤️👍👍👍 Finally, the author, please come on! 👍❤️