After Dressing up as a Beautiful Girl, I Was Surrounded by Them

My suggestion is that when greatly increasing the favorability of an important feeling, you can appropriately add a memory or her experience, so that it will not appear that the protagonist's emotional progress is too fast and there will be a buffer. For example, the plot of Sivya is not a foreshadowing of her being ostracized. No one thinks highly of her and thinks she is ineffective, leading to a lack of confidence. However, she is still very capable. The protagonist said, "Senior Sivya is our important partner. They are a bunch of trash. Just wait to die. It is best not to meet us in the maze." Before that, add a memory or the action of Sivya becoming nervous and timid to enrich the character. By the way, you can also be a water character number. The protagonist grows too fast, or I can't feel the protagonist's growth. I only feel the protagonist's combat power has improved, but almost all of it is improved by the system. There is relatively little inner growth. According to the introduction, the core should be the emotional dispute between the protagonist and other girls. Also, I currently feel that the system guides the protagonist's actions, and then the protagonist takes action, just like a puppet. The system is just a tool, not the core, and can be weakened appropriately. I'm sorry if this offends you. These are just my suggestions. You don't have to follow mine. After all, you are the author and the story is written by you. Come on, author, I hope you can write wonderful novels. I quite like your novels.

The book is a good book, but I think not many people read it because the plot is very slow. There is no audience here for slow-burning books. Also, there is nothing exciting about it, and the plot is relatively bland. Of course, this is what slow-burning books are like [eating melon]

When I read the title and introduction, I felt that this book was very ordinary, but after reading it for a while, I realized that this book has its own very novel world view, and the combat and characterization are also very good, but there are occasional flaws. All in all, this is a very good book

I like you, author. But I personally think that this book could add more emotional scenes. I am currently reading chapter 55, but the life-and-death relationship of the therapeutic nanny in the early stage (sorry, I really can't remember the name and I am too lazy to read it) is not shown. In addition to letting people know that she is very smart, she even communicates with the protagonist and her own past. Not as much as the dagger brother of the slave-catching team in the first chapter. When writing items, the author can view memories and design more small items to enrich the world view and supplement the character's past at the end of the chapter. For example, at the end of the chapter, write [Glasses for Healing the Wet Nurse] [The Double Swords the Shadow Man Holds] [Moss in the Land of Moss] and so on. The protagonist does not necessarily have to have seen these. You can refer to the writing method of collapsing iron light cone. This is not a criticism, I just hope that the author can give it a try. If you are offended, please ignore me. I hope the author can persevere. In addition, I rarely write long reviews. Please forgive me for my poor writing. The above.

Nice! Recommend. The story and rhythm are very good. It's a pity that the main plot drives the protagonist, and there are no points to complain about or exciting points in the plot.

Okay, very nice

I think the author can write about the appearance of the protagonist in the first few chapters.

It's not bad. I can watch it. There's nothing bad about it.

Very beautiful and very interesting

Good, good, good, good

It's beautiful, author, don't stop.

It looks great, why is no one there?

The story is pretty good

Overall it looks okay

(⍥(⍥(⍥(⍥(⍥;;) Stunned is very beautiful

Very pretty

The story is quite attractive, but the front part is not handled well.

This book is very good, why is there no one here?

It's okay…Has the author seen Sword of the Dawn?

Why do excellent works always go unnoticed? It's a pity. It's a good book, but maybe it's because the title doesn't match the content. The emotional drama is really too slow. Some people read the title and want to read it, but they abandon the book when they can't see what they want to read.

It's very beautiful, but I don't understand how few people see it?

It's pretty good, why are there so few people watching it?

Come on, author, keep at it, it's great.

It's beautiful, please don't mess up the author [blowing kiss]

Give the author a five-star encouragement, the writing is very good👍🏻

It looks good. I love watching it. Come and watch it. Take a look.

Come on more. It still looks good. It feels like a long story.

The plot and combat are both very well written, but a little lacking.

It looks good. The character settings are very full and the world view is grand. Please give me more.

It was surprisingly well written, maybe a bit passive in the first few chapters, but the subsequent plot was pretty good. The emotional scenes are also just right and hit the mark.