Is It Wrong to Want to Become a Magical Girl?

It's a good book, but it's not without its shortcomings. The biggest shortcoming is that there is so little emotional sedimentation that the sudden emotional upgrading becomes very abrupt. For a girl I've known for a few days, and we haven't fought side by side, and it's not a relationship where we have trusted each other's lives, I burst into tears and ran to the source. It's too sudden.

To lure people in and use threats? To intimidate a 16-year-old magical girl and hero, and accidentally reverse psychology... What kind of plot design is this. ???

Please support the miscellaneous fish author, Ernegai. If there is no support from readers, Wadaxi... Please, as long as I can do it, Meow Meow is willing to do anything.

The pace is too fast! The 10 chapters in this book can be compared to at least 30 to 40 chapters in other books (the more watery ones can even have 80 to 90 chapters), and there are also some relatively thin chapters in the text, like running 3000 meters while picking out fish bones. Although there are conflicts and emotional changes, they happen too fast! It is recommended to slow down the pace a bit and give the characters more interactions and precursors to events.

The start of the game was too toxic. You had to fight with your life and then lost your strength and were threatened by corpses. The support provided was useless. In a world where you can die at any time, you are still comatose in an unsafe place.

To be honest, the impression of the first volume is actually quite bad. Is Qingteng a CP? The relationship progress is a bit too fast and pale, which leads to a big break with the action. If possible, I hope to add a few extra chapters with Qingteng and the protagonist in the first volume to enrich it.

Meow meow meow, don't you have anyone else?

Everything else is fine. The beginning is really clever and poisonous, and the follow-up seems to be mediocre and average.

Nozomi Hoshizaki was pretty good before her performance as a newcomer. Why did the pace become so fast after that? Of course, although the pace was fast, the writing was pretty good. I almost thought the finale would be in Chapter 30 [Thoughts]

Weird and weird, not tasty