[Micro Hundred][Not Invincible][No System][Protagonist Terra Aboriginal]
[! Warn! Contains yandere ingredients! ]
The little Sakaz girl who was seriously injured in the ruins was lucky enough to be rescued by Her Majesty Theresia and Kelsey, and given her a new home. However, the destruction of the Tower of Babel caused her to lose her important family members again. When Rhode Island was about to become a new sanctuary, the original resident chose to leave without saying goodbye.
...
Goodbye, Tower of Babel.
I'm going to see the outside world.
Reader comments
It can be seen that the author must have a relatively long-term plan. The foreshadowing of Longmen and the reveal of the protagonist's abilities can be seen that the author at least has an outline for the later plot.
The female protagonist, a native of Terra, has no system. Weibai (for now) has strong Origin Stone skills but can't use them (this can ensure that the combat power will not collapse and can be reasonably strengthened in the later stage). The plot makes sense logically (at least I didn't find anything particularly unreasonable). The rhythm is moderate, the thinking is clear, and it's worth reading [Chigua]
Of course, there are problems. Amiya's OOC is a bit serious. Although Amiya prefers girls, she will never do the kind of thing in Chapter 6 of Volume 2, and it is impossible for Kelsey to not know about Amiya's psychological condition (if this is also foreshadowing, let's talk about it separately).
Shocking and delicious
Let's talk about the conclusion first. This article has strong general applicability and strong countermeasures. It is a super big cup.
The pace is moderate and the emotional descriptions are delicate. The most important thing is that the author updates basically a large chapter of three to four thousand words (more than), which is large and full.
The character portrayal is good. If there were similar memes like "This Land" every day, more people would be attracted to it. After all, it is also a good choice to appropriately increase the interest of the article. Also, what kind of cup is Xue Xiang? If the author has time, he can "create" an operator file and skill module about Snowfall. It feels good to have a curse healer as a template. After all, the protagonist can heal and deal damage.
All in all, I didn't feel any discomfort while reading it. I hope the author can add more chapters.
In the early stages of the novel, the description of Amiya's yandere attributes felt a bit too deliberate, and the protagonist seemed a bit aggrieved in the early stages of Dragon Gate. But the author has also slowly corrected some shortcomings in future writing. It can be seen that the author really wants to write this book well. But this book has a very fatal flaw - it is updated too slowly and is not enough to read.
(Purely personal opinion, please ignore if you don't like it)
Lao Zuo, don't force me, please. Please update more, otherwise the children will starve to death. [Cry][cry][cry]
This book is really good, especially when it describes how Lu Bu fights Sun Wukong for hundreds of rounds for Diao Chan, but Xue Baochai is really too strong. If it weren't for Nuoshou's outer ring hanger + Noxian guillotine, this wave of M4s would have died if hit by A1 strafing. Other than that, I prefer Zhuge Liang's battle with Huaguoshan A sentence said by 108 Monkeys: "Young man, don't show off your arrogance in front of your Brother Liang" shows Zhuge Liang's indignation towards the monkeys who knocked him to death with three sticks. All in all, this book has an interesting plot, clear system, many foreshadowing and immersive fighting scenes, and the character description is very good! This book is very well written. Good, the plot is touching, the ending is unexpected, the content is resonant and thought-provoking, the plot is interesting, the characters are vivid, the system is clear, there are many foreshadowings, the fighting scenes are like being there, the author's depiction of people's hearts is meticulous, especially when describing Calabash Q to save Transformer Q when Sun Wukong The inner excitement and fear are vividly expressed. I am the only one who thinks that Wu Song is right to kill Qiao Feng Q? If Jia Baoyu hadn't stopped Zhang Wuji from Q, how could Yang Guo's hand be cut off by Guan Yu? Zhuge Liang wouldn't have gone to Siguo Cliff to fight a hot battle with Linghu Chong Q, etc. All in all, the plot of this book is interesting
Arknights fan fiction is considered to be an above-average batch. After reading it for so long, I feel really good. Xiao Xuexiang has been growing up, which is really good. Everyone's feelings are well written. There are basically no OOC situations. They are all handled very well. Gravity, please come more hehehe [I learned it] [I learned it] [I learned it]
Boss, please update a few more pictures. I see that there are no big problems until now. Please update, boss [sending my heart]
Very nice author, keep up the good work
Xue Xiang is really cute and has been growing up. The early stage was indeed difficult, but she still has people who love her and people she loves. You can also handle W easily, which is good [laughs]
Right! This is how the world should be! Psychological committee member, I feel so good, oh oh, so good ╰🤓╯ (dancing) Oh oh oh, so good ╰🤓╯ (dancing) oh oh, so good ╰🤓╯ (dancing) oh oh, so good ╰🤓 ╯ (Dance) Oh oh oh, so good ╰🤓╯ (Dance) Oh oh oh, so good ╰🤓╯ (Dance) Oh oh oh, so good ╰🤓╯ (Dance) Oh oh oh, so good ╰🤓╯ ( Dancing) Oh oh oh, so good ╰🤓╯ (Dancing) Oh oh oh, so good ╰🤓╯ (Dancing) Oh oh oh, so good ╰🤓╯ (Dancing) Oh oh oh, so good ╰🤓╯ (Dancing with joy) Dancing) Oh oh oh, so good ╰🤓╯ (Dancing) Oh oh oh, so good ╰🤓╯ (Dancing) Oh oh oh, so good ╰🤓╯ (Dancing) Oh oh oh, so good ╰🤓╯ (Dancing)
It was well written and I read it in one sitting. The writing and plot are very good. It can be seen that the author wanted to write a good and long story.
Not enough to eat! Can I update it once a day? [I'm almost crying][I'm almost crying]
It's well written, but why do you feel so few people read it?
I forgot to comment again...
The plot has some original plot, a lot of logic, normal emotional descriptions, rich character descriptions, normal plot, not mentally retarded, and the update speed is not slow, which is good.
(It feels like what I wrote is like reading comprehension...)
I also wrote novels, but I didn't stick with it. I understand the huge update progress. Although the writing style is a bit immature, I am excited to achieve such writing style for the first time, and also feel sorry that I watched it so late.
So I decided to spend a day reading this book. While reading, I unconsciously put myself into Xue Xiang's situation and felt embarrassed for Xue Xiang. And the big knife is also very attractive. Although I had expected it, my emotions have already been put into it. In the end, I still felt caught off guard when I was knifed.
When I was writing this book, I should have re-edited the plot. The personalities of many characters were well controlled and there were no OOCs (at least I think so)
In the early stage, it is probably because the plot timing was not clearly understood or written well, which led to the mistakes at the beginning, so later on, we have to spend energy and time to rewrite the early mistakes.
In summary, although the writing style is a bit immature, it is generally very comfortable and there are almost no chapters that are difficult to use.
You can start it directly. People like me who often skip the plot but watch important plot points can still guess the ending.
Also, remember to fill in all the holes that need to be filled, and don't just forget about it.
Finally, don't feed the article to AI, nor can you use AI to correct typos, because once you feed the article to AI, AI will directly receive it in the library, and you may be scolded by some irrational book friends.
I wish you good health, happiness every day, and 10 consecutive double golds
The work is very beautiful, but Xue Jiang is so pitiful [crying] When will I be able to live a good life [crying] (Speaking of which, can Shuang Xing be saved? I really like the pairing of Shuang Xing and Xue Jiang)
Howl to see. The author is more eloquent.
For me, this book is the gold of tomatoes. The characters are very three-dimensional and the protagonist's experience on this land is very remarkable.
Oh, family, there is a little Sakaz. She wants to go home with me (picture. Jpg)
It looks good, the plot is well drawn, the characters are well set, and the author is very active
The author can adjust the length of the paragraph. If it is too long, it will affect the perception. [Sparrow Food Masterpiece]
Very good fanfic, Gravity Amiya makes me spin [blowing kiss]
It's very interesting, and the character image is good, but Xue Liang is a bit miserable. I hope she can be happier. In the integrated movement, get along well with Shuang Xing and W, and you must be happy
The pace is moderate and the characters are three-dimensional. It can be seen that the protagonist gradually grows up with the rich experience. I hope it will be updated soon.
It looks good, cheers for the author [sending my heart][sending my heart][sending my heart][sending my heart]
It's beautiful, really, be patient and watch.
It's very interesting, thank you to the author [Send heartfelt thanks]
Good-looking, love to watch, like to watch
Arknights is a rare good book, but the update speed is slow and needs maintenance. I hope the author will work hard. [Praise]
It's very interesting to watch, I really like the protagonist, and the plot is not bad either.
A book about Arknights feels very comfortable as a reader, and the light snowfall is cute😊
It can be seen that the author must have a relatively long-term plan. The foreshadowing of Longmen and the reveal of the protagonist's abilities can be seen that the author at least has an outline for the later plot. The female protagonist, a native of Terra, has no system. Weibai (for now) has strong Origin Stone skills but can't use them (this can ensure that the combat power will not collapse and can be reasonably strengthened in the later stage). The plot makes sense logically (at least I didn't find anything particularly unreasonable). The rhythm is moderate, the thinking is clear, and it's worth reading [Chigua] Of course, there are problems. Amiya's OOC is a bit serious. Although Amiya prefers girls, she will never do the kind of thing in Chapter 6 of Volume 2, and it is impossible for Kelsey to not know about Amiya's psychological condition (if this is also foreshadowing, let's talk about it separately).
Shocking and delicious Let's talk about the conclusion first. This article has strong general applicability and strong countermeasures. It is a super big cup. The pace is moderate and the emotional descriptions are delicate. The most important thing is that the author updates basically a large chapter of three to four thousand words (more than), which is large and full.
The character portrayal is good. If there were similar memes like "This Land" every day, more people would be attracted to it. After all, it is also a good choice to appropriately increase the interest of the article. Also, what kind of cup is Xue Xiang? If the author has time, he can "create" an operator file and skill module about Snowfall. It feels good to have a curse healer as a template. After all, the protagonist can heal and deal damage. All in all, I didn't feel any discomfort while reading it. I hope the author can add more chapters.
In the early stages of the novel, the description of Amiya's yandere attributes felt a bit too deliberate, and the protagonist seemed a bit aggrieved in the early stages of Dragon Gate. But the author has also slowly corrected some shortcomings in future writing. It can be seen that the author really wants to write this book well. But this book has a very fatal flaw - it is updated too slowly and is not enough to read. (Purely personal opinion, please ignore if you don't like it) Lao Zuo, don't force me, please. Please update more, otherwise the children will starve to death. [Cry][cry][cry]
This book is really good, especially when it describes how Lu Bu fights Sun Wukong for hundreds of rounds for Diao Chan, but Xue Baochai is really too strong. If it weren't for Nuoshou's outer ring hanger + Noxian guillotine, this wave of M4s would have died if hit by A1 strafing. Other than that, I prefer Zhuge Liang's battle with Huaguoshan A sentence said by 108 Monkeys: "Young man, don't show off your arrogance in front of your Brother Liang" shows Zhuge Liang's indignation towards the monkeys who knocked him to death with three sticks. All in all, this book has an interesting plot, clear system, many foreshadowing and immersive fighting scenes, and the character description is very good! This book is very well written. Good, the plot is touching, the ending is unexpected, the content is resonant and thought-provoking, the plot is interesting, the characters are vivid, the system is clear, there are many foreshadowings, the fighting scenes are like being there, the author's depiction of people's hearts is meticulous, especially when describing Calabash Q to save Transformer Q when Sun Wukong The inner excitement and fear are vividly expressed. I am the only one who thinks that Wu Song is right to kill Qiao Feng Q? If Jia Baoyu hadn't stopped Zhang Wuji from Q, how could Yang Guo's hand be cut off by Guan Yu? Zhuge Liang wouldn't have gone to Siguo Cliff to fight a hot battle with Linghu Chong Q, etc. All in all, the plot of this book is interesting
Arknights fan fiction is considered to be an above-average batch. After reading it for so long, I feel really good. Xiao Xuexiang has been growing up, which is really good. Everyone's feelings are well written. There are basically no OOC situations. They are all handled very well. Gravity, please come more hehehe [I learned it] [I learned it] [I learned it] Boss, please update a few more pictures. I see that there are no big problems until now. Please update, boss [sending my heart]
Very nice author, keep up the good work
Xue Xiang is really cute and has been growing up. The early stage was indeed difficult, but she still has people who love her and people she loves. You can also handle W easily, which is good [laughs]
Right! This is how the world should be! Psychological committee member, I feel so good, oh oh, so good ╰🤓╯ (dancing) Oh oh oh, so good ╰🤓╯ (dancing) oh oh, so good ╰🤓╯ (dancing) oh oh, so good ╰🤓 ╯ (Dance) Oh oh oh, so good ╰🤓╯ (Dance) Oh oh oh, so good ╰🤓╯ (Dance) Oh oh oh, so good ╰🤓╯ (Dance) Oh oh oh, so good ╰🤓╯ ( Dancing) Oh oh oh, so good ╰🤓╯ (Dancing) Oh oh oh, so good ╰🤓╯ (Dancing) Oh oh oh, so good ╰🤓╯ (Dancing) Oh oh oh, so good ╰🤓╯ (Dancing with joy) Dancing) Oh oh oh, so good ╰🤓╯ (Dancing) Oh oh oh, so good ╰🤓╯ (Dancing) Oh oh oh, so good ╰🤓╯ (Dancing) Oh oh oh, so good ╰🤓╯ (Dancing)
It was well written and I read it in one sitting. The writing and plot are very good. It can be seen that the author wanted to write a good and long story. Not enough to eat! Can I update it once a day? [I'm almost crying][I'm almost crying]
It's well written, but why do you feel so few people read it?
I forgot to comment again... The plot has some original plot, a lot of logic, normal emotional descriptions, rich character descriptions, normal plot, not mentally retarded, and the update speed is not slow, which is good. (It feels like what I wrote is like reading comprehension...)
╭◜◝ ͡ ◜ ͡ ╮ (Very nice) ╰◟◞ ͜ ╭◜◝ ͡ ◜◝ ͡ ◝ ͡ ╮ (More details...) ╰◟◞ ͜ ◟◞ ͜ ◟◞ ╯ __ ᐝ (T^T) / O しーJ
I also wrote novels, but I didn't stick with it. I understand the huge update progress. Although the writing style is a bit immature, I am excited to achieve such writing style for the first time, and also feel sorry that I watched it so late. So I decided to spend a day reading this book. While reading, I unconsciously put myself into Xue Xiang's situation and felt embarrassed for Xue Xiang. And the big knife is also very attractive. Although I had expected it, my emotions have already been put into it. In the end, I still felt caught off guard when I was knifed. When I was writing this book, I should have re-edited the plot. The personalities of many characters were well controlled and there were no OOCs (at least I think so) In the early stage, it is probably because the plot timing was not clearly understood or written well, which led to the mistakes at the beginning, so later on, we have to spend energy and time to rewrite the early mistakes. In summary, although the writing style is a bit immature, it is generally very comfortable and there are almost no chapters that are difficult to use. You can start it directly. People like me who often skip the plot but watch important plot points can still guess the ending. Also, remember to fill in all the holes that need to be filled, and don't just forget about it. Finally, don't feed the article to AI, nor can you use AI to correct typos, because once you feed the article to AI, AI will directly receive it in the library, and you may be scolded by some irrational book friends. I wish you good health, happiness every day, and 10 consecutive double golds
The work is very beautiful, but Xue Jiang is so pitiful [crying] When will I be able to live a good life [crying] (Speaking of which, can Shuang Xing be saved? I really like the pairing of Shuang Xing and Xue Jiang)
Howl to see. The author is more eloquent.
For me, this book is the gold of tomatoes. The characters are very three-dimensional and the protagonist's experience on this land is very remarkable.
Oh, family, there is a little Sakaz. She wants to go home with me (picture. Jpg)
It looks good, the plot is well drawn, the characters are well set, and the author is very active
The author can adjust the length of the paragraph. If it is too long, it will affect the perception. [Sparrow Food Masterpiece]
Very good fanfic, Gravity Amiya makes me spin [blowing kiss]
It's very interesting, and the character image is good, but Xue Liang is a bit miserable. I hope she can be happier. In the integrated movement, get along well with Shuang Xing and W, and you must be happy
The pace is moderate and the characters are three-dimensional. It can be seen that the protagonist gradually grows up with the rich experience. I hope it will be updated soon.
It looks good, cheers for the author [sending my heart][sending my heart][sending my heart][sending my heart]
It's beautiful, really, be patient and watch.
It's very interesting, thank you to the author [Send heartfelt thanks]
Good-looking, love to watch, like to watch
Arknights is a rare good book, but the update speed is slow and needs maintenance. I hope the author will work hard. [Praise]
It's very interesting to watch, I really like the protagonist, and the plot is not bad either.
A book about Arknights feels very comfortable as a reader, and the light snowfall is cute😊