The Witch of Ashes

It can be seen that the author's writing style is very good! The style and story are also good, but one problem is that it doesn't feel realistic. I would like to make some suggestions: ① The pace is too fast, like a short essay. Moreover, the perspective is very spectatorial, and you don't feel like you are in the story, it's like filming a mime. The description of the characters is not enough to support it. A character written in one chapter can be used to shape the character in several chapters. It is recommended to slow down the pace a little, add more psychology and dialogue of the characters, and also mention the past of the characters, it will be much better 😘 ② Then there is no story background in the beginning, which makes the perception very erratic. It goes directly into the story of the heroine. It is not clear at first, so I don't understand what the heroine wants to do, and I feel a little bit later. It would be better to describe the background, for example, what era and system it was under. ③The writing style is good, and it also has the gorgeous flavor of Western fantasy. However, there are too many words, which take up more than half of the book. It will be a bit tiring after reading for a long time. It is recommended to get into the characters and follow the first article together. This is the case at present, author, please work hard [currently working on the manuscript]

It's very interesting to watch. I feel that each character is deeply portrayed and the story develops step by step. I hope that the purpose behind it is not just to kill the person who is hiding and going crazy, but also to rise to another level. Come on, it's well written.

Without any impurities (conceptions of the real world). I like that the main plot starts right at the beginning (´▽`)ノ♪. The story is compact and understandable. You can feel the world in the book while reading it (❁´ω`❁). Finally, I hope that the "author" can successfully describe the world in his heart and reach the end of the story world:.ﾟ٩(๑˘ω˘๑)۶:.｡ Finished with flowers:.ﾟ٩(๑˘ω˘๑)۶:.｡ Good night everyoneﾉ…( ˘ω˘ )ﾉ◎ Good night!

The writing is good, and everyone has a story, but they are all tragedies, nothing has changed, what has happened before will happen again, a short-lived utopia, the exploitation of the old aristocrats comes again, and the dead are all civilians,

No matter from any aspect, this is a very good novel. I am also looking forward to the direction of the plot later. I think it is the most important thing. I am also looking forward to it because I can't see it through. I just hope that the author will not finish the story.

The writing is very good, you can tell it's not AI writing

No one survives this area

This book is quite nice

Very interesting, a classic witch novel

Give the author a little encouragement