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I spent three years writing the story outline to support the precise structure of the first-person narrative: the dual-line narrative (Horcrux decryption & political game) is closely integrated with the chronicle events, and the Horcrux line cleverly connects the original work and gives new interpretations. The overall British writing style is strong, blending Gothic gloom and classical narrative, with the first-person "Blake-style autobiography" throughout. There are undercurrents of emotion in the cold writing style, and a large number of long sentences and psychological monologues enhance the sense of character fragmentation. Images such as ravens and shadows are used throughout the story, creating a depressing and poetic magical world for everyone. Colworth Black is an atypical but ordinary hero - Ravenclaw's wisdom and observation destined his non-warrior genes, and his childhood memories formed his obsession with guardianship. The supporting cast is full of characters: Roselind (cold and fiery as a spy and friend), Sirius (trauma and violence), Cedric (The Immaculate Light), Harry (brave and stubborn), and Hermione (growing up as a female politician) all have memory points, and their emotional lines are full of romantic beauty. No spoilers, everyone is welcome to read and comment [Love] [Love] I used A to assist in commenting. After I posted it, I realized that the writing was not good, so I will add some additional comments. I just want to avoid lightning by myself. It's not a HE cool article, nor a traditional BE. I just want to write about the magical world in my heart. More realistically, war is cruel, but everyone also values ​​a peace-loving life. No one is perfect, everyone has their own highlights and shortcomings, because of course there are many knives in war. The love line is more about exploring relationships, about love, friendship, marriage, how to choose, and how to grow between people. Everyone handles this differently. It will also involve political concepts from different positions, as well as the overall view and the view of sacrifice, and how small people and heroes deal with each other when they are involved in the torrent of the times. For example, the protagonist is always guarding, but personal efforts cannot defeat the entire environment. If you can never achieve the results you want, how should you face it, how should you accept it, and how should you fight it. There are also some post-war traumas and the healing of childhood shadows. No matter what, life is about moving forward. I don't necessarily want to express any point of view, I just want to tell a good story about a person and the people around him.

Cole has a very melancholic feeling like an English gentleman, with delicate emotions, restraint and self-control, and he is also very poignant when his emotions explode. I wish him and Cedric love [shy]. The teacher's writing style is like early winter. The cedar forest, with fine branches and leaves, and the north wind blowing, will bring out the rustling echo. It is very touching. It is restrained but warm like Cole. It is a very, very good feeling [Admiration] Come on, teacher (๑•̀ㅁ•́ฅ)

Very nice! As someone who rarely reads first-person narration, I became addicted after reading two or three chapters. The author's writing style is very good. Cole's childhood and youth experiences were more sad than warm. It is undeniable that Cole endured a lot of life and death along the way, which made me heartbroken. In Cole's relationship with Harry, Remus, and Rose after graduation, although danger may come at any time, their mutual companionship and support made me soft, especially after Sirius was released from prison. During Cole's tenure as a teacher, the sad atmosphere in the early stage really slowed down a lot, making people want to watch it more and more. (By the way, Cole has no control over his appearance and likes good-looking people.) As for the emotional line with Syd, let's guess a redemption direction. The age difference of seven or eight years is not big (can you eat the younger ones?) Finally, it's not enough, it's really not enough [crying] [please update]

The writing is good, it feels like reading a diary. Although there are only fragmentary details described, these details are particularly vivid. The best description is the paranoia and madness of the Black family, such as Walburga's insanity and hysteria, Bellatrix's fanaticism and cruelty, Sirius's rebellion and hatred, Alphard's protection and perseverance. Regulus's self-sacrifice, Narcissa's wholeheartedness and love for her family,,,, the young perspective of the protagonist is full of chaos and conflict. The changes in the Black family reflect the turmoil of the entire wizarding society. When he grows up, he actively participates in the front line against Voldemort, the beautiful Colworth. Well, actually if I could, I would like to read the unfolding description of the protagonist's story, but after reading it, I felt it was too short [Love]

I haven't finished watching it yet, but it is undeniable that this is indeed an excellent work. It's rare to see such a well-written first-person work, and I'm very lucky to have encountered this work. I really like the sense of melancholy and silence that belongs to Ravenclaw and Black in the protagonist, like the patter of rain after a typhoon passes, and the sadness of finally waiting for dawn but losing too much in the dark night. (I don't know why, but it always gives me the illusion that the protagonist will die at the end.) As I watch it, I can't help but miss the short few thousand words of childhood when the protagonist and his father lived in Pinewood Pass. The protagonist is really, as said on the Internet, a person who clings to a time that is too short to be called childhood to heal his whole life. (Although he has not yet finished his life) But it was also that time that created Colworth Black, who is as tough as pine wood today.

A very good article. The author's writing style is very good. The first-person perspective is very unique. The protagonist's growth is really bumpy. Regardless of the concept expressed in the article, it is really interesting. I look forward to the follow-up (#^.^#)

I never thought it was a sadistic novel. I thought they could all survive. I thought the arrival of the protagonist would change something, but he is just an ordinary person, an ordinary person who cannot change anything. He is not a systematic time traveler like other books, just like him As he said, he failed to protect them, Alphard, Cedric, Regulus, Sirius... Etc., But he passed on the spirit of the Black family, and if he did not exist, Sirius would not have fallen in love with Rosier, and Harry would still live in Dursley Home... He doesn't seem to have changed much, but he has changed a lot. The author writes about his mental journey in great detail. We seem to have become Coleworth, experiencing his pain and relief. The writing is very good, the pace is relatively fast, and his childhood experiences are also described in a relatively detailed way. It is short, but it can highlight his character traits, that is, less but more refined. I am very honored to see such a good work on Tomato. I also hope that the author can continue to work hard and produce some sweet extras [smile] (revealing the purpose). I also hope that the author can produce some better works in the future! ! ! [Blow a kiss][Blow a kiss][Blow a kiss](I cried several times while reading [Cry]. This is just a small reflection. If I said something wrong, I apologize here! Thank you! [Send heart][Send heart][Send heart])

It was the first time I read a book that was so touching. The author's understanding and portrayal of the characters are so profound. The growth and transformation of the characters were very natural. I originally thought it was another novel that saves everyone, but the result was unexpected. The story is very real. I thought about it after reading it. I understand that the protagonist will also be confused and frustrated. Flowers blooming in the scars can realize the preciousness of life. I think the departure of important people is the motivation to support Cole to continue... The emotions are also very delicate. All in all, it is a very deep fan 🥺🥺🤲🤲

I really want to say that the writing is really great. The writing style is very mature and profound. Each character is very full and full of cuteness and hatefulness. It really breaks my stereotype of each character, but it also gives each person a future that matches theirs without emphasizing it. He is not a heroic protagonist who wants to save. On the contrary, he is very sad, but he is very strong. It is difficult for me to explain in words. This book is beyond my expectations and every stereotyped guess I have. I praise the author and give everyone in the book a victory in the death of a fisherman.

The writing is really good, the writing style is delicate, and it is consistent with the original work. It is a sad and beautiful book that I dare not read a second time. Every regret is so sad, and the happiness within reach is always beyond grasp, which really vividly depicts the cruelty of war. Seder is an ideal dream. Without war, they will definitely live happily and sweetly for a lifetime. Both of them will understand and tolerate each other. George is a warm glove in reality, caring and amusing to warm each other. Regarding the brotherhood between Sirius and Regulus, the former is the older brother that he can rely on after experiencing a lot of awkward support for each other, while the latter is the older brother that he has admired since childhood and will always live in his memory with a beautiful attitude. Two brothers, two lovers, a guardian, a ward and a best friend. I was really moved after watching it, and I would like to thank my wife again for presenting such a good story, a realistic coming-of-age story full of regrets. I'm looking forward to my wife's next book

Nice! It's a rare first-person perspective. I originally thought that Colworth would be the Black heir with a golden finger, but I didn't expect it to be so cruel [crying][crying]. I was so anxious when I saw the scene where the two of them were deceived by Barty Jr. And Cedric didn't take any protective measures during the Triwizard Tournament. But it's very real. I can only say that everyone doesn't have a golden finger and is powerless in such a war. I can completely feel the protagonist's feeling of losing faith in the battle at Hogwarts. The psychological description is particularly delicate! The post-war scenes are also very well written. Everyone has their own arc. You can completely feel the author's love for the characters in his novel. I look forward to the extra chapters!

The writing is very good, but I'm not sure if it's BE, so I won't read further [crying] Are you really going to die like that? [Crying] So sad woo woo look what you did Ahhhhhhhhh (Contains acrostic poems and haiku)

I have read Chapter 35 so far. The author's writing style is so contagious. It feels strange to read it in the first person for the first time. It is just like reading in the third person. I dropped a few pearls in the beginning, [crying]. It is one of the few stories in HP that I could read deeply. The character design is also very novel. Little Black has his own thoughts and standpoints. The relationship between the characters is also handled very well. The characters are all flesh and blood. Cedric's little thoughts make people's hearts beat. However, I am standing on the wrong side [cover face] and cannot accept the main attack or mutual attack perspective [cover face]. When I can accept it, I will make up for it later. I can only express my love by giving it five stars.

I'm glad I didn't give up on this book because of some embarrassing plots in the first half. This is different from any HP fanfic I've read before. This is a story about self-acceptance, love and protection, finding the glimmer of light in suffering, and regaining after darkness and loss. It is a happy story. We follow Colevos from the beginning to the end of the story, witnessing the pain, struggle, hesitation, and powerlessness in the first half of his life. We watch how he stood up from a desperate situation and relied on the influence of his loved ones, and learned how to live a peaceful life and obtain happiness after the war. This is not a grand and exciting story with a classic protagonist, but an extremely realistic story that is closely related to the life issues of each of us: how to coexist with pain instead of letting them destroy you. The author gently tells us in this book: There is not hope in the darkness. The sincere connection between people can provide us with unexpected powerful power. The dead will exist in another way. Their imprint will be deeply imprinted on the minds of the living, affecting the decisions and actions of the living, bringing pain but also opportunities for transformation. If you feel confused and painful about yourself at this stage, or are haunted by the haze caused by the deceased, I sincerely recommend that you read this book. It may not solve your current dilemma, but it may make you feel a little bit of strength, accumulate some courage to face life, and provide some different perspectives. Next is about some supporting characters. The author's analysis and reshaping allowed me to see another possibility in the original characters; the original supporting character Roselind, (she has great personal charm), she and Colworth went from the friendship of the collision of ideas to the affection of protecting their family, to the final choice to risk their lives to protect; Sirius's love and protection for his family, and his tragic and unexpected exit; Cedric's warm waiting, hot and pure feelings and determination to become stronger, as well as his brave and kind sacrifices, are all things that people cannot let go of. It can be said that Colworth may be relieved, but I am not! Finally, there are some issues that I think need to be improved. They only represent my personal feelings and opinions. I post these out of the desire to share. I'm sorry if this offends me. This book is essentially a very good work! The author's description of the battle scenes is a little weak, especially the protagonist's combat power. I think the confrontation with Barty Jr. And the death of Roselind were worse in the two scenes. The scene of losing the battle with Barty Jr. Made me doubt whether the protagonist is really as good as others say. (After all, he was knocked down in two seconds, and I didn't see a comparison of the protagonist's combat power with others before this) Before Roselind's death, I basically couldn't see the description of the protagonist's fight. It was difficult for people to feel that he contributed in the battle. After her death, the "calm assist" portrayal of the protagonist made me think that he was "Zhuge Liang" (maybe this is also the disadvantage of the first person) I also didn't see the runes that the protagonist is good at playing a big role. I think this is a disconnect between setting and description. If the setbacks he suffered are really to be established, at least it must reflect his status quo of "really trying all means and still being defeated." Being defeated easily will make people think that he is weak. Most readers (including me) don't like weak protagonists. After that, I positioned him in my mind as "a auxiliary player who is better at using brain planning" and then adjusted it for myself. Another point that I can't understand is that Coleworth actually agreed to Rose's dangerous infiltration activities. Even though Rose's personal mission and practical needs were indispensable, Coleworth actually acquiesced so easily... Is this a rip-off of his "determination to protect children and hope" mentioned above? So I think it would be better to add some dialogue and pulling in this section. Regarding the emphasis on his Ravenclaw identity, what I noticed more was his melancholy that matched the academic temperament. The description of his wisdom and erudition was only mentioned in a few words. I think it would be better to add some more specific descriptions and comparisons of events, rather than relying solely on other people's words and one or two simple "discoveries of the protagonist". In short, the lack of characterization makes the protagonist's image unstable for me, but the flaws do not hide the good points. This is still a good book worth reading carefully. Thank you to the author for letting me experience a cruel and gentle story [Sending my heart][Sending my heart]

It's beautiful (๑• . •๑), The writing is very good, and it has a sense of empathy. When the whole text is narrated in the first person, I had a heart attack. It was so uncomfortable and made me feel very sad. Regarding the descriptions and various emotions, they are all just right, even the descriptions of Dobby and Kreacher. We Ravens have been losing and grieving from the beginning. 😭 This book is divided into two readings. The first time I read it was when I was a young Raven. He was a young man who was burdened with a curse, lost relatives, lost his father, brother, James and Lily, and finally Sirius, who had never returned, and was constantly picking up broken emotions. When I read it for the second time, I was already about to lose Said. The final war period was too painful. I watched the people I loved most pass away one after another, including brothers, close friends, and unborn children who carried long-cherished wishes. It was so well written that it made me truly feel the victory of a life-or-death battle. Just like everyone has their own arc, from the protagonist to the supporting character to the house elf, everyone is placed in the most suitable choice for themselves (PS: Draco is actually quite surprised at his growth, and the characters who should have died are still dead here, which is a bit too emo). I can even feel Sirius's feelings for the little raven deepening little by little, from being pitiful to a trustworthy younger brother. Wow, before the end of the text, I actually felt that the entire tone was sad and helpless. It was only later that George and I supported each other, fell in love, and laughed with family and friends, and it gradually became clear. The trauma of childhood, the trauma of war, and the irreversible trauma of loss are finally covered beautifully in the extra story. Including the main text, our raven moves from London to the Malfoy family and the Rosier family little by little, and finally finds a new anchor point for his life through art. Including the subsequent emotional issues with Harry, Cho and Ginny, it was really great. In the end, just as the people who loved him expected, he flew high into the light and lived in peace.

A very nice article, with a rare perspective. The protagonist in the article is not a time traveler or a reborn person, he is just an "ordinary person" in the magical world. This is a very uncommon and very cool article. It seems that everything has changed, but it seems that nothing has changed.

The author's outline should be a sadistic article. Judging from the current development, I will not continue reading. The author's writing style is still very good. If there is a sweet side story with Seid, please kick me [blow kiss]

I really like it. The settings, descriptions, and characterizations all hit my mark. Cole, his soul is turbid but innocent, and his character is tolerant and restrained. A raven should also have a harbor where it can stay.

It is dark, cold, cruel, and desperate, but there is a little bit of light, just like the warm wooden house seen by travelers on a snowy night; the extra makes those painful pasts become distant and blurry, as empty but tangible as the air. It's well written, although I can't understand it and have some doubts.

Ah, a very good article, the writing style is very good, it was such a happy time, and such a sudden attack, I was really caught off guard [crying] [crying] [crying] [crying]

Cedric died like that [crying]

CP is Cedric, written in first person, the writing style is very cinematic, but the background is very depressing. Teachers and students in the same year, and Cedric have been together since he was not 18, emm, please clear the mines on your own.

The writing is great, very good. You must listen carefully, otherwise you won't understand if it's slightly off-topic.

It's very beautiful. It has a very realistic style and fits the background of the time. I feel sorry for Cole. They died like this [crying] It's almost time to go to school. I hope the author will make it faster.

It's a very good book. Although the protagonist is an original character, the overall story does not deviate from the plot track of the original work. The development of the plot is very reasonable. Although the protagonist's personal experience is tortuous and broken, and the tone of the story is realistic, I think this book is not a sadistic novel, but more like a redemption. The author's character creation is very delicate. He captures the personality characteristics of the original characters while incorporating his own understanding, making the love and hate of the characters in the book clear and three-dimensional. Highly recommended! ! !

You are so cruel! Roselind is dead anyway [almost crying], I love her so much. [Cry][cry][cry][cry][cry][cry][cry][cry][cry][cry][cry][cry][cry]

The author's writing style is so good. I think the author wrote an autobiography (no malicious intent). Many of the protagonist's love lives have developed very reasonably. Most people will not have only one partner in their lives. Moreover, the author's introduction is not about Shuang Jie! ! The only thing is that I still don't know who is up and who is down. I don't have the ability to understand (I don't want to think it is the main attack, but I can accept it if I do). I automatically understand the mutual attack. I am really curious about what the position is. I always feel that I am on the wrong side.

Very beautiful, very beautiful, very beautiful. I give the drama god four stars ( The writing style is very good, smooth and eloquent, not flashy, and accurately describes the kind of depressing and glimmering environment at all times. The concept is also very good, beyond criticism. It's not as good as the famous novel, but it can be considered a top-notch fanfic, even better than the original in some aspects. Highly recommended.

Well, it looks good like this.

Although I burst into tears, the ending was so happy. It felt like it was yesterday that the three first graders came to Grimmauld Place for Christmas. The beginning of the story was the smell of Alphard's hut, and the end of the story was tranquility and the smell of home. I finished reading it before going to bed last night. I had a dream that night. In the dream, I was from Cole's perspective. Everyone I knew from his perspective had moved away. Later, I met the idiot Lockhart that peacock in the forest () The following contains spoilers . . When I first read the article, I had a very relaxed mood. After seeing Cole change several nests in the first ten chapters, I even felt like complaining. I actually didn't like Roselind very much when she appeared on the show. When she was in the Department of Mysteries, I was thinking that if Sirius had to die, then you should keep Rose. Rose, child, Sirius, no matter how bad it is, leave one for me. After seeing none of them, I really dropped the mouse. Department of Mysteries At first, when Cole was in Alphard's cabin, I thought it would be his happiness. When I was with Cedric, I thought they would be happy like this. Cole has been lost in the past, but fortunately everyone can live peacefully in the end. I'm even a little bit dissatisfied with Cole and Lockhart's evil CP. You idiot Lockhart, you kid. A stupid Lockhart is a good Lockhart ()