Beng Tie: Three March Sevens Asked Me to Be Their Lover

@ To be honest, this book still has a few shortcomings 1. The plot development is not very coherent, or the characters are too abrupt. For example, the protagonist is given a headache and frightened by Chang Yeyue, March Qi and Liuli, and the latter can invite Liuli, who mistakenly thinks it is March Qi, to take a bath together [shocked]. This shows that more work needs to be done on the character's portrayal and psychological transformation. 2. The description of the worldview is too vague and fragmented, and there is no systematic treatment at all. This is a fatal problem. In the first dozen chapters, we can only roughly guess the worldview through a few words. It is also difficult to clearly understand the sentence that the black hair tie handed to the protagonist by Xia Die has the function of identifying people. What does identifying people mean? Does it mean to distinguish the three people in March? But why does the firefly react? Even if the answer is given, it can still only rely on guessing. This will make many people have a partial understanding of the plot content and development of the novel, greatly reducing the readers' interest in reading, and naturally they will not be able to retain readers. [Cover face] All in all, it is normal for a new author to have these problems [laughs], so there is no need to be discouraged. This just proves that you have room for improvement. It is already good to be able to write a fairly complete story in your first attempt. Just practice more. I hope the author can write a work that satisfies me. This is enough [please update] [blowing kiss] I can't do it anymore, I really can't do it anymore. I have reached my limit after reading Chapter 27. I thought that unclear description of the world view would be the main problem, because it was the first problem to be exposed, so I prioritized it as the main problem. Now I find that I was wrong [face covering] The really fatal problem is: the character's behavior is bizarre and confusing, and it doesn't match up with the past, which makes people feel like they just wrote whatever they dreamed about. [Cover face] The most obvious thing is the inhuman thinking of the protagonist. She said that Xia Die is the only one who thinks about her. The next second she meets Liu Ying who betrays her, she still feels heartbroken [shocked]. She also feels that "Sure enough, Liu Ying is the only one who cares about her." Another typical confusing behavior is the aforementioned mistaking Liuli for March Seventh and inviting her to take a bath. This magical logic of being able to forgive after being betrayed or hurt is really terrible [face covering] All in all, my feeling after watching this is: I can't tell the difference! I really can't tell the difference! I will soon be able to play the role of Brother Huozi in real life [crying] I hope the author can solve it...

Can the author please make a male version? I've already thought of the name. Beng Tie: The three Danhengs asked me to be their lover [Like][Like][Like][Like][Like]

In fact, it is not easy to write yandere novels well. Although the core is extreme possessiveness, in order to write tension, you have to grasp the balance between paranoia and fragility, make the twisted logic self-consistent without appearing artificial, and let the character still have layers under extreme behavior, otherwise it will easily become thin, crazy for the sake of madness, and lose that kind of complex tension. @ I think it's okay, but what is the general world view? High martial arts? Super powers? I haven't seen it for a long time. Now that I see it, I don't understand what you want to express at all. Do you want to write about the yandere's possessiveness and madness towards the protagonist? Or is it the irresistible feeling that a yandere has for the protagonist? Or is it the happy ending where the protagonist hugs each other? Is it just to satisfy your own fantasy? Or to make up for some regrets? These are the issues I think: The first few chapters are occasionally repetitive. Without the police, the law is just like a decoration. Of course, there is basically no such thing as law in yandere novels. I just want to complain. And the protagonist's feelings towards people are ridiculously messy. Someone betrays you, and you still believe him? I'm afraid the protagonist is stupid. The student union actually has more power than the principal? No matter how old you are, you are still in school. How can you be older than the principal? If you want to say that it was the protagonist's own idea, is the protagonist stupid? How did he think that the student union has more power than the principal? You don't need to go to the student union to drop out of school, the principal is just a decoration? Can you, a student union, take care of other people's withdrawal from school? The protagonist is too weak and cannot resist. If the protagonist is too weak, it will affect the readers' viewing experience. No one wants to watch a protagonist who is too weak. You can make the protagonist stronger even if you practice martial arts or something. Just to interrupt, where did the protagonist's time travel come from? Is it because of some summons, or is it simply a matter of time travel? The above are all personal opinions, please do not insult me, because the above are only personal and objective opinions. There may be some things I said that are not correct. I welcome corrections.

Changes to a hundred, the writing is excellent, and there is almost no description of women's clothing, women's bodies and female degeneration. Although the characters are OOC, it is still very enjoyable to read. There are various Shura fields, tsk tsk, but they do not reflect the characteristics of the transformation novel. It can be regarded as a pure harem novel. This setting is not allowed to touch the tomatoes, and the lily harem must die. It is either a break or a small dark room, tsk tsk, the author is really brave~ but I approve of this writing style!

Sure enough, the Shura Field is the most interesting. It is rare to see this kind of Shura Field plot nowadays. As for the shortcomings of the novel, some reviews have already made it very clear, so I won't go into details. In short, good luck to the author.

I feel that the author's writing in the first part is extreme, but the second part is pretty good. Overall, it's pretty good.

The writing is good, but why does the previous plot repeat itself every few chapters?

I just want to know where Dan Heng, Sunday, Bai E, and the Earth Beast Loyalist are?

It's hard to imagine Xing turning into a social terror

[Love] Super super super super beautiful😋👍

Why don't the author change the point of view change [face covering] to make people look confused?

It's okay, but some plots don't match up to the previous ones.

You are so good at writing this kind of thing, not bad

The author's writing is very beautiful

Very beautiful, highly recommended [almost crying][grieved][grieved]

Mine is pretty good-looking.

Really, very beautiful!

Good-looking, good-looking, good-looking

Great book! A peerless book!

Very good, but there are real and fake Liuying