Leave a comment or ask me for an update, and I'll deliver! Writing ten thousand words a day leaves my head spinning!
I'm planning to cut and reset the story, with major revisions!
I can't bring myself to revise it. I'm sorry, the middle section was terribly written.
"Son of a loser" was rusted poison etched into Kazama's very bones. He once stole a fragment of the Ring of Light, only to find it painfully bright and hot to the touch. After wrecking the stall of someone who mocked him, he collapsed atop a garbage heap, numb and lost.
When someone called him "useless," he roared, "What else can a loser’s son be?" As though accepting his fate were the safest choice.
Then he met someone just as battered as he was, yet still standing tall. One word from Gaelgu, "Your storm only needs one last defiant cry!" awakened his sleeping will.
When the summit where his father's generation had failed called to him once more, Kazama stood before a world-ending storm that devoured all things and transformed into a Giant of Light.
Amidst thunder and lightning, the planet's contempt and curses were finally ripped apart and swept away by the pure storm surging in the opposite direction. "Can you hear it? This is a loser's furious counterattack!"
Very good, especially suitable for Olympic fans
Reminds me of that sentence, do you believe in light?
Interesting setting, distinctive characters, and full of personality
The climax is so soul-stirring that it makes people gasp in admiration.
The writing is beautiful and moving, the character settings are reasonable and logical, and the plot settings are brilliant and dazzling.
The plot has ups and downs and is full of surprises