[Cry Into a River fanfic | A rewritten tragic ending | Rebirth-like time loop | Redemption from fate | No bashing the original characters | Pian Pian dances free, the blue butterfly cannot be caged]
Only in his twilight years, when Fang Zhi You returned to Yangzhou, did an old friend, Wang Sheng, tell him the truth:
During those ten days after the city fell, the benefactor he had forgotten was named Lin Pian Pian.
She had saved him and waited for him. At the end of the blood and flames, she had left behind a blue butterfly sachet.
She had said:
“I want to punish him, so he’ll never be able to forget me.”
Guilt, demons of the mind, and the loneliness of old age weighed on Fang Zhi You all at once, and he threw himself into the Twenty-Four Bridges.
When he opened his eyes again, the River God had used the blue butterfly sachet to send him back to the past.
In the first life, he forgot her.
In the second, he tried to save her, but only ended up assuaging his own guilt.
In the third, he finally married her, but turned love into a cage.
Only in the fourth did he understand:
Lin Pian Pian didn’t need compensation or to be kept like a pet, and she certainly didn’t deserve to be imprisoned in anyone’s love.
She deserved a name of her own, an embroidery shop of her own, and a path of her own.
And what he had to learn wasn’t how to “save her,” but how to live alongside her as an equal.
From old dreams in Willow Lane to sharing a desk by the sunny window, from the blue butterfly sachet to a box tied with red cord, from sharing the seasons to the fall of Yangzhou.
This time, he would no longer cross the old bridge or wait for someone from the past.
This time, he would leave the old bridge behind and head straight for the returning tide.
[Reader’s Note]
This is a rewritten tragic ending for Cry Into a River: Ten Days After the City Fell. It respects the original characters and the emotional heart of the story, without forcing changes to their relationships or bashing the original characters.
I hope to give Lin Pian Pian a gentler ending that suits her better, while staying true to the direction of the original story.
The idea is good but the writing style is too immature. It should be the author's debut novel. There are a few things I have to say. First of all, the author should ask clearly what he wants to write, what is the biggest regret of the original plot, and to what extent he should write it. Think carefully before considering the plot. Otherwise, if you only act impulsively and exhaust the inspiration, you will be left with nothing. Secondly, you must reconstruct the character. Since it is a fanfic and the adaptation is unrestrained, you must redraw the character portrait. Make the plot logical, that is, talk less nonsense, tell less lies, and let Lin and Fang really "live" instead of puppets. Moreover, you need to accumulate more. There are countless articles on the same genre, and there are also excellent works. Love first, then learn. You can start with short stories, such as writing about Lin's daily life of taking care of Fang (when his madness improves), or Lin's day in Goulan. Don't be too ambitious. If there is still fate, I hope to see your more mature works, come on
Personally, I like this second novel very much. The writing is good and the plot arrangement surprised me. The author is still coding when he is approaching the college entrance examination. I admire and worry about it. I think I have only finished reading it in my freshman year, so I can guess some of the difficulties the author will encounter during this period. The two works "Hungry Death" and "Aihong" have become the other and only works that moved me again after "Dragon Clan". I also have the most difficult emotions for Pian Pian to calm down. The author's remarks at the end also made me feel quite emotional. If I think about it carefully, all of us who have not been young and frivolous will have old things that are finally sealed in the bottom of our hearts. I hope the author will have a smooth road ahead and no longer have to dwell on his memories.
I have read the latest chapter. The writing is good and the author is quite honest (I almost stopped reading when I was reading chapters 30-50). I hope the author will continue to work hard, write books better and better, and get admitted to the university of his choice 😘
The writing is pretty good, the character is relatively close to the original work, the plot is not obtrusive, the writing is okay, and it is quite interesting in some places. The shortcoming is that the plot jumps too fast in some places and is a bit abrupt. Also, please update quickly 😏
Drive low and go high, I won't comment on the second review, the third review is too thunderous 🤦, I guess it scared away many readers. There were too many repetitions in the middle, and it only started to work hard around chapter 60 or 70, but I guess there aren't many people left. The characters also fit the game relatively well, and the content after chapter 80 is really good. But I don't know if the author can go further. Come on
I feel that the author has been in love many times. We laymen often can only think of the happiness of marriage, but forget that there will always be a lot of friction in real life. This book is very well written.
Write to Pianpian that the ice cellar is not tight Only then did you know that you were exhausted from playing the game yourself and showing me
It's very similar to Lao Fang's character design, and the writing style is also bookish. It seems to be very good so far. Lao Fang's Rebirth is one of the best fics I've seen so far.
Wonderful book, ups and downs, excellent writing
Very nice, better than 🐔0