Help! I Fell over After Seducing the Affectionate Male Protagonist

Damn, the writing style is nothing to say, it's really delicate, but maybe it's because it's the first time I've written a quick-travel novel, and the plot arrangement is a little inappropriate. Although I said Qianqian in the first plane because I think the little maid is very interesting, and she occasionally teases her, but it's not for teasing the little maid. The plot gives people a feeling of being overshadowed (nothing else, it just feels too much [shy]), and in the first plane, I was actually quite looking forward to the tension in the hero's heart after he regained his memory, and I'm a bit regretful that I didn't see it [grievance] But overall, apart from a few minor flaws, the first plane is perfect. I hope I can gain experience in future planes and continue to create. Moreover, Dada is really very patient. He also listens carefully to the opinions of readers, and then gives the intention of writing or changes, etc. Dada, he is really a very good host. [Adoration] So gentle. Finally, my dear, I was really attracted by Sesese. I hope Sesese will come more intensely in the future! I can tolerate it [note] (Thinking: Damn, the last chapter of the first plane is really exciting! There are more than 7,000 words, awesome [please update]) Like like [shy]

I feel that the change could be to make Xiaocui's performance smaller, but not too detailed (too much space). When she ran back to the house, why did she fall down (probably, it was very tortuous). The previous one was too heavy, saying that the heroine was teasing her but she didn't feel it, and then she asked for leave for three days. She acted too much. The original heroine could also be reduced and changed to the heroine's task progress. The original heroine can know that she chose the heroine to help, rather than saying that the heroine crossed her legs. Otherwise, it would feel like the heroine broke up people who liked each other, and then the hero got married before he could regain his memory??? It was mentioned earlier that the hero was treated for amnesia. It has been a long time, so how will this plot develop later? (I feel that if the heroine has reached the task progress and the original heroine knows the situation and gives up the hero, you can write a short paragraph about the original heroine's target, but I hope it won't be too much) Then the original heroine and the hero explained it clearly to both families. Wouldn't it be better if both parents were married to the heroine again (just a suggestion). This kind of logical plot is worthy of your writing!!!! I really like the ambiguous interaction between the male and female protagonists. It's so delicate. It would be nice if the logic could be changed again. [Sending my heart] [Adoration] Can the author add a thousand or two thousand chapters? It's not enough!

I don't like the "too sweet" type of heroine, so I couldn't stand a lot of fast-wearing movies. I came across this book by chance, with the intention of giving it a try, and it got better and better as I read it. This article is considered semi-immersive. The heroine is not silly and sweet, and the rhythm of some of the emotions is a little faster, but it is within the acceptable range. I can't say that this novel is 100% perfect, but it is better than many fast-paced novels. At least there is no idea that I can't catch up with now. The most important thing is that the author is really diligent. The update speed and word count make me realize the author's intention and sincerity. Come on, I hope to write better and better, and I also look forward to the following stories [shy]

It's good to watch. I like the second world more. But some of the heroine's behaviors in the beginning are a bit uncomfortable (such as walking to a deserted place, changing her expression and talking to herself (from other people's perspective)). I would prefer the immersive style. The author is too deliberate in describing the traces of the heroine's acting. For example, there is calculation and shrewdness in her eyes. This description is very uncomfortable to watch. As an ace (who has traveled through many worlds), she cannot even control her emotions. Some of the descriptions are a bit exaggerated. It will be uncomfortable to read too much. Also, when she was with Shen Yan'an in the lower realm, she had spirit stones. Why didn't she try to practice? (No description) Can Shen Yan'an still come up later? Wouldn't he die of old age again if he comes up?

I have been reading Tomato for a while, and I feel that the author's writing style is really good, and the stories he writes are of high quality. He is also very popular with fans, and he often posts updates ~ making me catch up on updates in the middle of the night ~ I must leave a trace to prove that I like it very much ❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️

It's quite interesting. The first world is actually quite well written. However, Xiao Cui's description is a bit too much. In addition, some important plots are not explained clearly, which makes the story a little unsmooth. But overall, the shortcomings are not hidden. After all, this is the author's first story. I believe that the subsequent stories will become better and better.

Boss, it smells so good. Please don't be tired and don't rest. Hahaha. Do you dare to update 300 chapters in one day? It scares me. [Shy][Shy][Shy][Shy][Shy][Shy][Shy]

It's beautiful. The author wrote it very carefully. I read it all in one go! ! ! Can't stop! ! ! ! ! ! Have meat to eat [adoration] [adoration] [shy] [shy] [shy] [shy] [shy] [shy] [love] [love] [love]

It's super, super good-looking. You are my god, the author. It's so interesting to write. I love the second world. I love it. Reminder [send heart] [send heart] [send heart] [send heart] [send heart] [send heart] [send heart] [send heart]

It's good to read, and the author often releases updates. I've never seen such a hard-working author, and I never imagined that there would be more. There's no need to worry that there are only two chapters, because there may be twelve chapters. It's so enjoyable to read.

There are too few authors who update so quickly. Like the author😄👍🏻

Opening the cover of the novel, there are 80,000 big yellow girls added to the bookshelf. There are not many comments in it, and there are no comments about immersive reading. I think the reviews of this book should be very exciting. When it is finished, I will go back and see what comments the Dahuang girls have posted.

It's a good read. I like to read this kind of fast-travel novel. The writing style is very good, and the relationship between the male and female protagonists is very sincere. But again, good books should be read as early as possible. When I read it later, I found that a lot has been deleted. It feels a little illogical and the progress is too fast [crying] [crying]

I have read Chapter 53 so far, and I feel pretty good so far. The setting of the plot is very interesting, but there are some flaws in the description. It feels a bit verbose, and the description of one thing is a bit long. But I think this book is quite good, very good. The characters of the male and female protagonists are both very well-drawn. The female protagonist is very scheming and intelligent, and she also manages to control the male protagonist very well [blowing kiss]

I feel that Da Da's writing is really to my liking. Da Da doesn't care what they say and just writes according to my own ideas. God knows how refreshing it feels for boarders to read a small world in one go when they go home during the holidays [Adoration] I love you to death Da Da. The storyline is also very attractive. I haven't seen such a good-looking article in a long time.

It's good to watch, but if you mind that the male protagonist was unclean in his previous life, please leave immediately.

It's super good-looking. If you don't watch it, you will regret it. I really like the plot of the world of cultivating immortals. I love the fight scene between the senior brother and the junior brother. I actually prefer the first senior brother and hope that the senior brother can take over! The author hurriedly adds more updates. It's not enough to read. I'm stuck every time.

It's so beautiful. I like it so much. The author is very diligent [sending my heart][sending my heart][sending my heart]

The author's story is well written, but there are too many descriptions and the plot advances too slowly.

World 2 is pretty good, haha. Please write more about worlds with multiple male protagonists. Come on [laughing evilly][like][like]

Well, I was very happy to write a story that I had conceived a long time ago. This book has been changed a lot, not only deleted, but also modified the best setting, well, especially the first plane. Therefore, the first plane cannot be seen, because the essence has been completely changed. Then the second plane and the third plane are slightly better, and not too much has been deleted. The fourth plane has a lot of persistence reactions and a lot of dialects. Well, I can't quite understand them. You can read them or not. There is no need to look at the fifth plane. Because at that time, the book did not receive traffic later, and there was another reason. Well, I only wrote a little bit of the beginning, and I didn't want to waste this setting, so I didn't write it.

It's super beautiful, I finished reading it in one sitting [shy][shy][shy]

This book is well written, but the rating is too low. It could be at least 8.5 Or above. I hope the rating will get higher and higher.

Not bad, choose the world to see according to your own preferences! At present, the characters of the three worlds feel similar (the part after the happy ending is super good-looking), and I look forward to writing a world of royal sisters or evenly matched worlds. By the way, I took a look at the catalog. I haven't seen the first world, so I don't know what it is like. Hope it gets better and better [send heart]

I have a stream of consciousness, it's nice to look at [eat melon] [eat melon] [eat melon] There are so many words in each chapter, I really like it [adoration][adoration][laughing]

The plot is quite interesting. Can the author do more 1v1? [Almost crying][Almost crying]

It's good to watch, it's good to read, I read it very smoothly and I finished it straight away. I'm looking forward to the end.

It's a good read, keep it up and look forward to the next one

(Ah! Scream! Twisted and crawling!) It's good to watch, I love watching it, and I want to watch it again! ! !

Super super super super super super super beautiful, the writing is very good, the plot is exquisite [shy][shy][shy]