Blue Archive: Down on My Luck, Cursed by Fate

The story has just begun. The arrival of sensei is too early, and there is still a long way to go before the end of the dragon fruit, so update quickly and cut the dragon fruit into pieces as quickly as possible\(`Δ')/

The characterization is very detailed, and the insertion of the protagonist is also very good. However, in the early stage, the protagonist is a bit too cowardly. If you consider his age, then it is acceptable. Later, when he really enters the stage of dominance, the writing is obviously improved. I see that although Kivotos Prison Dream has been knifed, he is too great. The timeline is one week, and the protagonist is a variable Prison Dream, which gives the subsequent protagonist a chance to awaken, so he will win.

After reading it for a while, I can summarize the problems of the book as the pacing is a little weird, a little OOC and a few plot twists (and some details), but overall it is good. Although the author says in the introduction that he is a newbie, the writing style is really amazing and the plot arrangement is okay. I personally quite like the protagonist Qian Yu Yu Meng. Although the prison Yu is still a protected person for more than 100 chapters, it is actually more of a matter of chapter division, which is excusable and reasonable in terms of the plot. And what Yu Meng really needs is psychological counseling instead of training him to become stronger, but his mental illness has already been engraved in his DNA (thanks to the two CSs of Dragon Fruit and Black Server). The whole story, especially the beginning, is mainly about torture, and the torture part is very well written, and the sense of despair is very fulfilling, but I personally think the part where Tang interacts with the characters is better written. Although it is painful for those who are following me to update irregularly, if it is worth waiting for this book, I also hope that the author's books and studies will prosper 👍

Ring Master rated your work as A+

Although I have only read a little bit, I can confirm that the author's writing is very good. Good luck to the authors who will review it in the future👍 @ Author, I think your book is very well written. I am the one who wrote it in B It is the best book I have read in A. The best thing is the description of the characters' emotions. For example, the black server used all means to do experiments and tortured Yu Meng crazily. These emotional descriptions are enough to make me empathize. There is also the quarrel between Hoshino and Meng-senpai when Yu Meng lost. I think this part is not very well written, not only the content and details, but also the emotional description of the characters. It's relatively concise. I think it's a little bit of a brushstroke (there may be some exaggeration). This paragraph is about Hoshino and Meng-senpai quarreling, and then Meng-senpai left. I feel like he went to Yu Meng, but you didn't write it, which was a bit too hasty, so except for this paragraph, my evaluation is very high. I hope the author will write better in the future, come on!

Update quickly, otherwise I will give you a low star rating, but the author's writing is also very good. Just don't stab the protagonist again. When can the protagonist meet Hoshino? When is the turn for the interaction between the protagonist and the teacher?

The characters are well drawn, and it made me want to strangle the dragon fruit even more.

Life is complicated. People come into this world and suffer hardships. Overcoming suffering will lead to great happiness. This book is written by Tiesheng, Yu Hua and others at the same time. The author should have read books like this

A masterpiece, with clear logic and good writing. That's why I didn't find out earlier

Compared with other books of the same type, this book is really good