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Be sure not to stop updating! ! Tomato is the only seedling among mortals (in my case)! The contact with Han Li in the book is perfect. The only thing that allows Han Li to share the little green bottle is his family. Other than that, starting from any other point will make people feel fragmented (feeling of fragmentation: not in line with the character). All in all, a masterpiece of Tomato fandom! ! !

Not bad, but there are more than 100 pictures where the protagonist is acting without Han Li. Why can't we bond more with Han Li? If we meet a strong person together, we will run away, and if we meet a weak person together, we will kill him. Many authors don't know why readers like to read fanfics, such as Mortals' Cultivation of Immortality. Most of them are because they like the character Han Li. He runs away when he encounters strong people, kills when he encounters weak ones, and carefully takes every step to reach the Nascent Soul. Rather than the background story of a mortal's journey to immortality. So I hope the author will write more about cultivating with Han Li from weak to strong, using the prophet system and Han Li's little green bottle to develop and become stronger together. How cool it will be! Instead of using a new character to kill and grab resources in the mortal background story and only have his own role, it is better to read the original work again. Can fanfiction be of the same person? I think it's just multiple characters walking the path of the original work together with the protagonist of the original work. How cool it is to be like this! Everyone's suggestions

Most of what I have written so far is very good! There may be some small flaws in some cases. For example, the second level of Qi training conflicts with the ninth level. For example, if you pretend to be injured, there is no need to hurt yourself to the limit, and then you are attacked unconsciously. What if you are gone when you are unconscious? However, the theory of cultivation and the self-directed and self-acted heroic rescue of the beauty (contact with Han Laomo) are very good! I was poisoned by the plot in Blood Trial! . . .

Write well, don't be like those authors who have watched a TV series and haven't even read the original work. They write a lot of random books and read more than 20 books before opening them. Yours and White Moonlight are slightly better. You can refer to my book "Mortal Science Cultivation to Immortality". It is well written. Not bad, not bad. It's getting more and more interesting. Although the original work has a lot of regrets about the heroine, she doesn't want to be a stallion. She just has to choose one of Chen Qiaojing and Yuan Yao. The best choice is Yuan Yao. Chen is a family monk and it's hard to handle. The formation master sees it as In my opinion, the protagonist's own golden finger can completely replace this tool man. This woman is too shrewd, but very trustworthy, and can be accepted as a disciple. The heroine does not need to specialize in Taoism. The heroine is Tai Shui, and Han Li's wife has very few scenes. She is a cultivator of immortals. Just build your own road.

At this stage, it's excellent. Let's look at it later. Although it may not be regarded as the Five Spiritual Roots, the author has made a book on the Five Elements Exercises, which can be considered as early stage help and various foreshadowings. Many people don't like the Five Spiritual Roots, but this is a story about mortals cultivating immortals, and the protagonist has a golden finger, so he will definitely be able to transform into a god later on. Ahem, it would be nice if the author updates a little faster.

A very good mortal fanfic. The disadvantage is that the update is too slow. Even if the rating is calculated, the score will not be high. If you don't continue to recommend more at the same time, it will not be promoted. If the recommendation is not promoted, the retention of readers will be low. If the retention is low, the score will be low. It is a vicious circle. Those who retain will give it a five-point rating and a seven-point rating. Alas...

Dear fellow Taoists, I'm sorry, I received a modification notice of infringement blocking today, so I had to modify the content. Therefore, in order to avoid risks, we can only make significant changes to the content and characters. I hope it can pass the test this time, otherwise it may face the risk of being removed from the shelves.

It can be regarded as having the ability to see.

AⅠcultivation, boundless magic power

After watching the TV series version of Mortal, I found this fanfic just to review the plot of Mortal. There is no evil point and it makes sense to get acquainted with Han Li. Who is the heroine? There is a heroine in the original novel, so there is no need to make a mistake of not having a heroine. The plot arrangement is reasonable.

It looks good, but I don't know why the score is so low. I don't understand. I think it should be at least an 8 or higher.

Why is the rating so low? A rare piece of high-quality writing among mortals [Like] [Like] I've read Chapter 120, it's very well written. It's just that the progress is a bit slow and too detailed [face-covering]. Han Li hasn't entered Huangfeng Valley yet, and is still strolling around Tainan Xiaohui [face-covering] [face-covering]

I've finished reading the latest chapter. It's pretty good among the mortal fics I've read. Come on💪

It's pretty good, come on

It's so beautiful, come on👏

Not bad, I finished reading it in one sitting

Okay, very good

Not bad, I only read the first thirty or forty chapters I quite like the character of the protagonist. He does whatever it takes to achieve his goals, but he has his own bottom line and is kind-hearted by nature. The means he chooses may be dishonest, but he is firm enough and can be considered a well-intentioned means.

A good book is a book that motivates me to keep reading.

The author writes the book very rigorously and the plot setting is also very appropriate and fascinating. It is recommended to read. I hope everyone will read it [Flowing Kiss][Flowing Kiss][Flowing Kiss]

A very good book that is both basic and innovative.

It's very good. Come on, author. Please update more. There are some minor flaws but the flaws are not hidden. The author still has some ingenuity in the plot. I'm really impressed. Mortals can't see much of it, and it's been maliciously brushed with low scores. Please support the author more, but the author really needs to update more, otherwise the score will always be low and not many people will be able to see it.

It doesn't matter if it's brainless or stupid, it's a good piece of human fiction. The author writes slowly. In fact, mortals are quite capable of controlling the writing style and plot of fairy tales. He writes slowly. In fact, after finishing the human world, the spiritual world and the fairy world can be outlined in one stroke. The most interesting part of Mortals, from the formation of pills to the late stage of Nascent Soul, would be perfect enough if the plot is better written.

Very good, a good fan novel

It looks pretty good, and it suits my taste

Well written, one of the best among mortal fans

I saw the latest update in one go. There is nothing bad about it. It is pretty and logical. The frequency of artificial intelligence appearing is just right. The timeline is relatively accurate.

Not bad. The writing is smooth and vivid, and the emotions are delicate and rich.

Okay, okay, come on, come on

Why don't you go to Qidian and write, otherwise there won't be so many things.