Traveling through the world of immortality is bound to the "resurrection must lead to death" system! He was smashed to death by crane dung, criticized for being fat by flying swords, and even the corpse was broadcast live to watch. The cold Master actually hid the crane control remote control to suppress his laughter? I'm crazy!
Reader comments
Regarding this book, I make the following suggestions (only personal opinions)
1. The overall story in the article is too compact. Although the stories are exciting enough, if they are all put together one by one at the same time, it will easily make readers tired and lose interest in reading (this word should not be used in this way, regardless)
A small smile is pleasant, but laughing all the time is scary
For example: there are some funny sayings. If you buy a pure version of the book, you may not read it, but if someone suddenly says it in some ordinary life, you will definitely laugh.
The same goes for the article (I think the front part needs to be changed a lot, after all, it is a book, not a paragraph, and a plot that is always exaggerated will only make people boring)
If possible, you don't need to delete all the previous ones. It would be better if you write more about ordinary things and intersperse them with them!
2: There are some new ideas in this article, such as using brackets to supplement and polish sentences, which may be greatly "carried forward" (but it is not recommended to use too many in one chapter) and become a major feature of this book!
3: There are many sentences in this article that are... Ornate words?
A good article definitely needs good words and good sentences, but sometimes plain sentences can better understand deep emotions.
4: The main body of the article is not clear enough. According to my experience in reading articles, most good articles have a main body, whether obvious or not.
For example: In "Till Death Do Us Part", the article is written around "the protagonist kills his wife"
In "Journey to the West", it is written around "obtaining the true scripture"
"Immortality Will Be Invincible" is written around "Ximen Heiniu and the protagonist's immortal life"
But this article doesn't feel like writing an article, it's written for the sake of writing a joke
But it doesn't matter, we can re-write the outline of the topic. We can use "cultivating immortals to seek immortality" or just write about the people and things the protagonist encounters in cultivating immortals to enrich the storyline√
5: No
6: I hope the author can work hard on writing and become a great book king. The road to starting a book is long, but we will always be with you!
7: Come on, Xiaokui, I'm waiting for you (｡･ω･｡)ﾉ♡
Regarding this book, I make the following suggestions (only personal opinions) 1. The overall story in the article is too compact. Although the stories are exciting enough, if they are all put together one by one at the same time, it will easily make readers tired and lose interest in reading (this word should not be used in this way, regardless) A small smile is pleasant, but laughing all the time is scary For example: there are some funny sayings. If you buy a pure version of the book, you may not read it, but if someone suddenly says it in some ordinary life, you will definitely laugh. The same goes for the article (I think the front part needs to be changed a lot, after all, it is a book, not a paragraph, and a plot that is always exaggerated will only make people boring) If possible, you don't need to delete all the previous ones. It would be better if you write more about ordinary things and intersperse them with them! 2: There are some new ideas in this article, such as using brackets to supplement and polish sentences, which may be greatly "carried forward" (but it is not recommended to use too many in one chapter) and become a major feature of this book! 3: There are many sentences in this article that are... Ornate words? A good article definitely needs good words and good sentences, but sometimes plain sentences can better understand deep emotions. 4: The main body of the article is not clear enough. According to my experience in reading articles, most good articles have a main body, whether obvious or not. For example: In "Till Death Do Us Part", the article is written around "the protagonist kills his wife" In "Journey to the West", it is written around "obtaining the true scripture" "Immortality Will Be Invincible" is written around "Ximen Heiniu and the protagonist's immortal life" But this article doesn't feel like writing an article, it's written for the sake of writing a joke But it doesn't matter, we can re-write the outline of the topic. We can use "cultivating immortals to seek immortality" or just write about the people and things the protagonist encounters in cultivating immortals to enrich the storyline√ 5: No 6: I hope the author can work hard on writing and become a great book king. The road to starting a book is long, but we will always be with you! 7: Come on, Xiaokui, I'm waiting for you (｡･ω･｡)ﾉ♡