White Lightning: White Flash

Um, would the author mind if I mention it in every paragraph? I'm afraid I'll be disliked if I mention too much... The author is very courageous. This is the first White Flash fanfic I've seen. The author has many descriptive techniques, but some of them are repetitive (the most common one is "the ears will turn red at the occasional touch"). You can use other techniques, such as environmental description and psychological description. Too much repetition will cause reading fatigue for readers. Author, when you write about the competition, you mainly focus on their interaction. Although this is a frustrating point, it will also lead to "running out of words" halfway through the writing, and finally ending inexplicably. In this case, the article may not be comprehensive enough. Here you can appropriately describe the status of some other people to highlight the protagonist from the side. Ah, it's not good to mention too much, so let's do this for now, the author is great! 👍 OK, continue. The author's paragraphs are not divided well enough. Often a chapter is full of long paragraphs. In this case, readers have to read it word by word, but novels (including fan fiction) are all fast-paced, and not dividing them into good sections will greatly reduce the reader's desire to read or even give up. This is the biggest shortcoming of this article. If the author is not afraid of being tired, he can portray some other characters in more detail. There is no need to be critical of your writing. If you only write about the interactions of the four protagonists, the novel will only appear monotonous. Highlighting the protagonist's characteristics and points through other people's "eyes" can enrich the article. Let's just mention this for now and talk about my current thoughts after watching it (I only read Chapter 10, but I just couldn't bear it anymore, sorry [note]) Hairbands and hairbands appear many times! It must be a new assist! (Bushi) On two rainy days, we can see Wang Lu's different attitude and Pugui has grown up! (Glad. Jpg)💕

Regarding White Lightning, the main CPs are Zhang Ruoyi and Wang Lu

The little couple is very sweet. The writing is okay but there are too few punctuation marks.

Super invincible and beautiful