HP, Immortal Love, a Bigger Picture
I want to read a book like "Is It Normal for a Professor at Hogwarts to Be the Dark Lord?" I often see HP fans who are either heartthrobs or wearing magic shells to play Otome Yumeno. No matter how much I like them, I'm tired of aesthetics. Can we open up the pattern?
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Give me some advice. It doesn't have to be the main line. You can write about daily life or small conflicts, or do some small crafts to relieve the tension of the main plot. From what I've seen so far, it feels like the protagonist is in a very tense mental state. Also, I think what the protagonist actually said should at least be understandable to readers. That is to say, find a few key nodes, and then when you talk about them, you can talk about them as settings. This way you don't have to make up cool-sounding words every time. For example, in the drama Chuunibyou also wants to fall in love, you can say some relatively specific words every time you talk about the setting. Then these words can be used as some memory points to attract people to read. Now my feeling is that every time I fight, I mutter something. Or if you want to make it more reasonable, you can create a unique border to make it sound cooler. It feels like magic chanting. Then use some fancy terms. For example, a certain demon, a certain abyss, something like obeying the call. However, the main shortcoming is that the plot is too rushed and the protagonist is too tense. Just like every time when Hermione encountered difficulties and wanted to sue the teacher, the protagonist would say that there was insufficient evidence to gain credibility. In this way, the protagonist will take everything on himself in the end. Made me nervous. I think we can write about some daily life or let Lao Deng give some small tricks to the protagonist, so as to provide some additional experience for the protagonist, and then supplement all aspects of the character's personality traits.
How can I put it this way? It felt like AI to me, which was a bit hard to watch. The writing was very cold and felt like a robot. The plot was okay.
Who is the single woman? It's like Hermione is the heroine, but she also looks a bit like Ron and Hermione [face covering]
The plot is not bad, but the cheat method for the protagonist to obtain the path is a bit abrupt, but overall it is still good, keep up the good work