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Although it's not to my liking, I still want to mention that the character of the protagonist is okay. It looks like a middle school student who is casual and can handle everything, but it's very artificial. As for the plot, it follows the main plot and there's not much to say. I can only say that it's innovative but not much, and it's a bit old. In Tomato's Collapse, now there are only simulated haircuts and online writing; a lot of jokes and the main theme is madness; otherwise, we can just start on Omphalos, end reincarnation and enter the sea of ​​​​stars, and then take the main line. After reading those documents that can make money, the main plot needs to be overhauled, so that the novelty has the desire to read it to the end, and it must be written as original. After all, the plot of the game is disgusting. As for the things the protagonist does, you don't need to read further to know what he is going to do. Anyway, the plot analysis It's all done badly. As long as it fits the background, it's done. No matter what the plot is, even if you use AI to help you come up with ideas and then enrich the story yourself, that's one way. Even if you write a unit drama (like The Pleasant Goat and the Bear), it's not a bad idea. It's my own humble opinion. It's good to have your own ideas. All I can say is, come on, I'll run away. Anyway, if this one doesn't work, just cut out the next one, Tomato, the possibilities are endless [Like]

In fact, there is no need to always write that the protagonist is very calm, and there is no need for the protagonist to show off to his friends [face covering]

I recommended what I saw today. I updated it just after I finished reading it. It's pretty good. So far, it seems to be running smoothly, without any bad points. The author has also listened to the advice (I saw the comments on the changes). The protagonist's three views are also good, and he is not very mature just after time travel. He grows up slowly. The emotional line with March is quite natural. At least I don't feel abrupt and awkward. I don't know if there are multiple female protagonists, but I hope the author can describe the characters' personalities well. In addition, I actually feel that the combat power of the Shinigami is not able to keep up with Bentie. After all, the messengers have exploded in star level (the author must have known this). I hope it can be strengthened, or the protagonist can use his own Zanpakutō, such as one black and one white after the swastika, a concept slash, and a causal ablation (to solve the erosion of nothingness). The main thing is to build your own main system combat power panel. The above is just my personal opinion, cheers to the author

The fan fiction I have seen so far all blindly follows the plot and adds some settings on top of it. But I felt comfortable reading this book by the author. I did not blindly follow the plot, but created based on the plot, such as the section in the Lower City. Originally, I read the fanfic to appreciate the male protagonist's idealistic and unrealistic story, but the author's description made me begin to understand the story itself, and I couldn't help but become addicted. In summary, the male protagonist's character is very vivid, and the author's writing style also makes me very comfortable, at least for now. I hope the author can create more exciting stories. Five stars for following.

It's good to watch [like], I didn't get the power to start a harem, start a harem, every second, from the very beginning, to the confusion in another world, after gaining the power, from the star to Pella, the step-by-step mental growth, thinking about power, without excessive delay, the writing is very good [like][like][like]

(Come on! Damn, I will be one of the veterans when it becomes popular.) I have to say that the protagonist's character and behavior are unique among Bengtie fans. He doesn't go crazy and doesn't use swords. It's a good book. By the way, I want a single heroine in March! ! ! ! ! !

This is a fanfic that suits my taste. The writing is very good and not laggy. The character of the protagonist is also in line with the changes of ordinary people after time travel. The second chapter also has a hint of goodwill towards the world. The character positioning on the train is also very unique, which makes people interested in continuing reading [Blow kiss]

I can't read enough, I feel like I'm just reading books

The author is working very hard to describe the story in his imagination, but I don't know why. I think the author cares too much about the relationship between the characters, which leads to the protagonist being shaped very strangely. In fact, when writing a novel, some things do not need to be written in such detail. Storytelling is the focus of the novel.

Non-toxic, safe to eat It doesn't have a strong combat power, and the system's presence is not too strong. It doesn't matter if there are hooks. Most of the time, it's quite comfortable to watch. It's relatively detailed in a series of stories that follow the main plot. It's not a running story. Read it slowly and don't skip it unless necessary.

Come on, it's quite beautiful. It would be a pity if it breaks.

Sit down and keep talking, don't stop updating. What should I watch if you stop updating?

Pretending is natural, I just love being a mysterious person

Yeah, it's okay, but the heroine is March?

I didn't expect to see fanfics about the God of Death.

I hope the author will stick to his own ideas and not be disturbed by outside voices, come on! Author, I like this book very much. People like me who have never seen Death like this book very much.

I don't think it's toxic at the moment, it's a pretty good fan

Overall, it's pretty good. Any messages I want to leave to the author have been left in the comment section at the end of Chapter 52. I really hope the author can read my message. Still quite optimistic about this book, good luck to the author! ദ്ദി˶>𖥦<)✧

The character description is very good, the plot is logical, and it is quite comfortable to watch.

Very good and not brainless, the characters are well created and there are no big bad points.

He's in the second grade and he doesn't have any youth problems. Not bad, not bad. It's a good product.

Not bad, so far ^ω^

Come on! Humans who write books!

Very nice and very comfortable

Come on, author, please don't put too much pressure on me

It looks good, but why is there no one?

The novel is very well written. It's just that the word count is a bit short

It's good-looking but not enough [laughs]

It's rare to see the God of Death these days. Come on, author.

It was awkward at first, but it gradually got better. It's okay, come on.