HP: When a Sinful, Corrupting Desire Enters the Harry Potter World

After watching a little bit so far, the ideas and settings are very attractive. However, there are a lot of long sentences and long paragraphs, which makes the reading experience very poor🥲 (it will discourage many readers). I suggest that my wife divide the long sentences into segments, chop them into pieces, refine the lengthy sentences, and cut off the redundant nonsense. Details are omitted. Appropriate (no need to narrate a running account), boldly leave blank (let readers think for themselves, and the meaning is still unfinished), three lines and five lines will be very comfortable to read; I hope the characters can be more vivid, because they are too paper-like and cannot be described. Come on, this idea is really attractive. I hope to optimize the reading experience (chopped sentences), establish the characters, and boldly use flashbacks, interpolation, dual perspectives and other techniques.