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The emotional line develops a little quickly, and the way of setting up connections and establishing relationships is a bit stiff and immature (but considering the author's qualifications, it is not too much). The protagonist often relies on Zhuo Zhao to torture the soul when handling cases, and basically writes the process based on the answers, which weakens Ming Ke's reasoning color (although this book is about daily emotions, reasoning is a major feature of Ming Ke after all, although the weak reasoning color belongs to most Ke Wen is a common problem with emotional names, and senior Ke fans usually know who the murderer is, but I still hope that the author can add some reasoning in the future to form an "emotion + reasoning" model). The time and rhythm of the story line are well grasped. Disrupting and rearranging the time line of the original work can be regarded as a writing method with a personal style. If it can be arranged well, it can also be regarded as an excellent creativity. The identity setting of the protagonist can be said to be extremely excellent or even unrealistic, but the outrageous identity setting can be regarded as a characteristic of Ming Ke, and this book is probably half a good book, so it is not a fault. The extremely excellent character setting also ensures that the protagonist will not be easy to do when describing the story. For behaviors that go beyond the setting, the protagonist's set abilities are mainly reflected in academic research, so other abilities can be appropriately weakened, and the protagonist should not be made into an all-round character of the "both... And... And..." Type. Although it is fun in the short term, the long-term perception is relatively poor. As for the ending, I don't want to see a victory-type ending like the winery being completely overthrown. A black organization with activities covering the whole world cannot be brought down by just a few people or organizations from several countries. The limit is already the limit if the core members of the Japanese station such as Gin and Vodka are arrested or forced to evacuate. According to the "Book of Mountains and Seas", "" is a kind of auspicious beast, with almost the same appearance and ability. A bird with three heads and six tails can help people avoid evil and bring good fortune. However, as for "the incarnation of death, devouring souls", it is most likely set by the author. The upper limit of his ability and future potential are higher, but why not add some restrictions and disadvantages appropriately, and then indirectly limit the upper limit of the protagonist? Make the protagonist look more normal and human. I have basically finished reading the chapters currently updated through offline viewing mode. For now, as a newly released book, the current rating is relatively low, but there are no major flaws and there is a lot of room for improvement in the future. If the story line and writing techniques are more perfect in the future, and the ratings and data also go up, then both the author and the readers will be happy. If this book fails, consider it an immature attempt. Get your mood in order, organize your thoughts, and try to write a better work. It is difficult for most people to make money writing novels in Tomato. Many people persist because of their love and hope for the future. Keep this love and hope, and find out the direction that suits you little by little. You don't need to deliberately compare yourself with people who are much better than you. You can feel sincerely happy about your current achievements. Even if this achievement is insignificant to others, it is your own success and a precious gift to you.

It's a good read. Overall, the logic and plot are pretty good. Except for a few typos, I feel that the author of other book friends' comments has not changed it, which affects the perception a bit. I hope it can be changed. I'll give it five stars. Come on.

A good cover still has a great impact on the work.

For a Conan fanfic on Tomato, this score is reasonable for this book. Some people may think that it is suspected of being "white text". But why doesn't the author always have bright spots elsewhere?

There is a complete emotional line, and the emotional changes are well connected. It's beautiful.

Very beautiful, very beautiful, I recommend it

It's okay. Compared with the youth bunny girl, the adolescent synthesis is replaced by the setting of the agent of death, which is like opening a cheat for the protagonist.

Ahhhhhh, not enough

Everything else is good, but the author is too short and weak. Why did he only update so much?

When will Shiho be able to walk around openly [what] Still very beautiful

Agreed, nothing to say

Very good, good luck to the author

Just two words. . . Awesome

Very good, keep writing.

Very good-looking, come on @xiyiwowo [love] [love] [love]

It's okay, let's see what follows👀

This book is very beautiful

It really suits my taste

Okay, it's pretty good (´∀｀*)

This book is really good

Good-looking, good-looking, good-looking

Is it six o'clock? Good, good, good, good, good, good, good, good, good, good, good, good, good, good, good, good, good, good, good, good, good, good, good, good, good, good, good, good, good, good, good, good, good

Good-looking, good-looking, good-looking, good-looking

The emotional line is relatively complete and it still looks good. I suggest you change the cover.

A veteran Ke fan said that he loves to read it. The writing style is a bit iffy, but the advantages outweigh the shortcomings. It is a masterpiece worth reading.

Except for a few typos, this is the best of the best, with a large space for intensive reading [currently in progress]

Very good Haihara Aifun. I really like this kind of Miyano Shiho.

It's good but a bit lacking. It can be said to be one of the best Conan fanfics in Tomatoes in my opinion.

It's really good. It looks good in daily life. I like it. 😆

It's very beautiful, but I don't know why no one has commented and there are a few comments [send heart][send heart][send heart][send heart][send heart][send heart][send heart]