[Virtual online game + high charm + three female protagonists + Pokémon killer + relaxed writing style + a little slow start in the early stage]
"Brother, do you want to come and sit at my house? My house is quite big..."
In front of Jun Mo, the sweet-looking girl in a pleated skirt lowered her head slightly, her cheeks were slightly flushed, and her fingers were holding the hem of her skirt unnaturally.
He glanced at the blood-red "Danger" line in the system and skillfully issued the good guy card again.
"I'm sorry, you are a good person, but we are not suitable."
…
In the 22nd century, neural access systems have matured, fully immersive virtual online games have emerged, and Pokémon-themed "Elf Age" has become a phenomenon-level masterpiece.
Jun Mo silently looked at his talent [Non-Chief], then looked at the SSS-level talent [Succubus] that he got because of his appearance, and fell into deep hesitation.
Can anyone tell me that this water cannon that has been missing suddenly got hit?
Oh, it turned out to be because I took off my mask.
This book is also known as "Succubi must protect themselves outside", "The Battle between Luck and Charm" and "The Redemption Journey of Socially Horrible Pokémon"
Reader comments
Stop looking. Give up the trap quickly
From Chapter 4 to Chapter 13, this book is all about combat. You may be in a good fighting environment, but it's not exciting at all. I'll hit you all, and you hit me. You can't tell what he's trying to do after he fights back and forth.
It's really watery to the extreme, and I have no desire to read it at all. And if the author wants to write this kind of elf novel, the one you choose must attract the reader's attention. You, the author, have your own ideas, but I, the reader, don't buy your account. Do you understand?
Avoid poisonous spots
It's a bit shabby, I didn't level up in the early stages, and I feel like the elves don't have any emotions. Maybe it's because it's a game, and Togepi is really numb. When I switch to other books, I feel like I have to think about conquering myself first. Unexpectedly, I still think about handing in the mission first (it feels almost like poaching, anyway, they are selling others, catching one by one [laughs])
The rhythm was not handled well.
Someone has already mentioned the most basic chapter, but I won't mention it. The first few chapters set the stage and then engage in long continuous battles. It's really not enjoyable - especially the 6V6 of other teams.
This can be used as a reference for Pokémon fans with good results. Basically, there is no such thing as the opening chapter.
The following are specific reasons
1. The selling points are inconsistent: The opening chapter raises expectations for the protagonist's charm value - it is no problem to establish bonds in the title test, which is really cool.
But following the charm value setting, what people expect is that the Pokémon will stick to each other, the intimacy will increase, and the innate nurturing body-but you wrote about a battle.
What is the purpose of setting the charm value to be full?
Battle
But what do you want to see first when you read the title and introduction of the book?
Bond.
The sense of expectation was gone. The author obviously wanted to write a battle that would be cool and exciting.
But the most attractive part of Goldfinger lies in the interaction between the protagonist and the elves and other people. This part was not well written during the battle.
This is a matter of foreshadowing and rhythm control
The foreshadowing was not done well, the hooks were not laid in the places that should have been written to catch expectations, and the places that wanted to make readers happy were too late.
It's cool that the protagonist gets the title of Fighter; it's cool that the protagonist turns on the bond form, but it's not written out.
It's cool to get the title, but what's so cool about being the protagonist?
After fighting a 6V6 that was unbearable, I got a fighting person who did not match the "charming" characteristics.
Has the protagonist displayed these characteristics before?
I have to join in the battle, but I can't write the essence of the battle.
Too anxious.
New writers, please read it. If there is anything bad to say, scold me. I listen to the advice the most (｡ì _ í｡)
Good reviews. [Blowing kiss]
Okay, okay. But the section at the power plant was a bit too long, so I skipped it. It's still quite ok.
It's a simple elf battle story without any emotional lines. If you like to watch elf battles, you can read it. The two stars are deducted because I personally don't like it. The lack of emotional lines has nothing to do with the quality of the book.
Well, it feels okay, but unfortunately I am a Swampert fan. I didn't choose Swampert, what a pity.
The water is too much, and eight or nine chapters can be written about one battle. The protagonist can even appear as zero for several consecutive chapters.
The plot is okay, but the writing is average
You can take a look at the trends without clicking on them
Stop looking. Give up the trap quickly From Chapter 4 to Chapter 13, this book is all about combat. You may be in a good fighting environment, but it's not exciting at all. I'll hit you all, and you hit me. You can't tell what he's trying to do after he fights back and forth. It's really watery to the extreme, and I have no desire to read it at all. And if the author wants to write this kind of elf novel, the one you choose must attract the reader's attention. You, the author, have your own ideas, but I, the reader, don't buy your account. Do you understand? Avoid poisonous spots
It's a bit shabby, I didn't level up in the early stages, and I feel like the elves don't have any emotions. Maybe it's because it's a game, and Togepi is really numb. When I switch to other books, I feel like I have to think about conquering myself first. Unexpectedly, I still think about handing in the mission first (it feels almost like poaching, anyway, they are selling others, catching one by one [laughs])
The rhythm was not handled well. Someone has already mentioned the most basic chapter, but I won't mention it. The first few chapters set the stage and then engage in long continuous battles. It's really not enjoyable - especially the 6V6 of other teams. This can be used as a reference for Pokémon fans with good results. Basically, there is no such thing as the opening chapter. The following are specific reasons 1. The selling points are inconsistent: The opening chapter raises expectations for the protagonist's charm value - it is no problem to establish bonds in the title test, which is really cool. But following the charm value setting, what people expect is that the Pokémon will stick to each other, the intimacy will increase, and the innate nurturing body-but you wrote about a battle. What is the purpose of setting the charm value to be full? Battle But what do you want to see first when you read the title and introduction of the book? Bond. The sense of expectation was gone. The author obviously wanted to write a battle that would be cool and exciting. But the most attractive part of Goldfinger lies in the interaction between the protagonist and the elves and other people. This part was not well written during the battle. This is a matter of foreshadowing and rhythm control The foreshadowing was not done well, the hooks were not laid in the places that should have been written to catch expectations, and the places that wanted to make readers happy were too late. It's cool that the protagonist gets the title of Fighter; it's cool that the protagonist turns on the bond form, but it's not written out. It's cool to get the title, but what's so cool about being the protagonist? After fighting a 6V6 that was unbearable, I got a fighting person who did not match the "charming" characteristics. Has the protagonist displayed these characteristics before? I have to join in the battle, but I can't write the essence of the battle. Too anxious.
New writers, please read it. If there is anything bad to say, scold me. I listen to the advice the most (｡ì _ í｡)
Good reviews. [Blowing kiss]
Okay, okay. But the section at the power plant was a bit too long, so I skipped it. It's still quite ok.
It's a simple elf battle story without any emotional lines. If you like to watch elf battles, you can read it. The two stars are deducted because I personally don't like it. The lack of emotional lines has nothing to do with the quality of the book.
Well, it feels okay, but unfortunately I am a Swampert fan. I didn't choose Swampert, what a pity.
The water is too much, and eight or nine chapters can be written about one battle. The protagonist can even appear as zero for several consecutive chapters.
The plot is okay, but the writing is average
You can take a look at the trends without clicking on them