JoJo’s Bizarre Adventure: Waves Across the Starry Sky

Although I also prefer this kind of plot that is not that different, I think you can delete as many brackets as possible. For example, if you want to express an attitude or something, you can write how the protagonist reacts to this attitude. Psychological description. You can describe his psychological activities in the next paragraph without brackets. When reacting, you can say how he is talking, such as how shy he is, how he talks, etc. This will be better. Mental activities don't require parentheses. You can write on and off and you can count the number of words, so why not do it? Wouldn't it be better to describe it directly, and think about the next action or reaction to make it more coherent. These brackets affect the perception too much. It would be good if you can improve it more. If you want to write about the expressions of multiple people, you can write the shift of perspective one by one, such as who is who and how. Such an antonym, a slight psychological description, seems to be what he thought of. Of course, I haven't written it, and I don't know. I have read it more, and it may be that I don't feel pain when I stand and talk, but as I said, this is just a small suggestion 🍉 🍉 🍉 🍉 🍉

It is a good point to prepare a substitute group later. In addition, the update speed is too slow. I hope there will be more updates soon.