When the ripples of breath resounded through the sea of stars, and when the golden light of the avatar tore through the void—the bloodline of the Joestar family reawakened in the collapsing universe.
Joania Joestar, the last descendant of the Joestar family in the parallel world, assumes the mission of being the son of nature. In a tragic decisive battle with DIO of Paradise, Joania burned her life and released the power of the origin of life in the universe. Although she destroyed DIO of Paradise, she herself died heroically in the battle. However, his final dance was so brilliant that it unexpectedly attracted the supreme being hidden in the shadow of the universe - the [Joy] Star God Aha who destroyed the universe. "How interesting! What a gorgeous disappearance! Let's do it again, Let this drama never end!" With a pure "fun" mentality, Aha casually kneaded Joania's soul into a "seed" and threw it into a new stage with completely different rules and dangers: the Collapse Star Railway.
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It is a good point to prepare a substitute group later. In addition, the update speed is too slow. I hope there will be more updates soon.
Although I also prefer this kind of plot that is not that different, I think you can delete as many brackets as possible. For example, if you want to express an attitude or something, you can write how the protagonist reacts to this attitude. Psychological description. You can describe his psychological activities in the next paragraph without brackets. When reacting, you can say how he is talking, such as how shy he is, how he talks, etc. This will be better. Mental activities don't require parentheses. You can write on and off and you can count the number of words, so why not do it? Wouldn't it be better to describe it directly, and think about the next action or reaction to make it more coherent. These brackets affect the perception too much. It would be good if you can improve it more. If you want to write about the expressions of multiple people, you can write the shift of perspective one by one, such as who is who and how. Such an antonym, a slight psychological description, seems to be what he thought of. Of course, I haven't written it, and I don't know. I have read it more, and it may be that I don't feel pain when I stand and talk, but as I said, this is just a small suggestion [eat melon] [eat melon] [eat melon] [eat melon] [eat melon]
It is a good point to prepare a substitute group later. In addition, the update speed is too slow. I hope there will be more updates soon.