Dou Er************

Not bad The previous description of the character is a bit old-fashioned and feels very stiff. Later on, the protagonist's character gradually became more comfortable, but Xiao gave me a feeling that was sometimes okay and sometimes weird. Hmm, I want to describe his competitiveness, I think this is a bit inappropriate? In some places, it can be seen that they are joking like brothers, but I feel that the emotional transition is not very delicate, so I have this feeling. Also, there are a lot of foreshadowings, and I don't want to say much about whether to fill them in or not. In fact, I suggest that there be a little less in the God chapter, which is suspected of being fake hahahaha. Then there was something awkward about Xiao having a prison play with the protagonist? It feels a bit red-eyed, but this kind of crazy writing doesn't have that exciting flavor. If someone with a high IQ guessed that Xu Xu Tuzhi would feel very emotional! But in just a few chapters, I won't say much more until the content has been laid out. I didn't expect the protagonist to be so crazy later on. So is it the main perspective 1 or perspective 0 or mutual attack? Then I felt that the third person in the trio could be given some growth scenes. Or does he really want to become a tool man? I hope he has his own growth line. It does not necessarily have to be unfolded from his perspective. At least the growth can be seen. The writing in Douluo series Tomato is so nourishing that it is enough for me to finish it. If some of the encounter plots are just briefly mentioned, I feel that there is no need to write them or there is no need to write them so hastily. For example, the grilled fish at the beginning was really sloppy. Although I know it may be to promote the plot. But "gone" and "um" were just such a brief encounter that felt like it ended abruptly. I thought Hyh and I would meet Yaya and the others first or something and then leave quietly. Now it seems that the protagonist is actually a very kind person. He actually gave medical expenses to the beggar who robbed him... I hope to fill in the foreshadowing later. Alas, but online fan fiction is not a way of making a living for love, so I will say less. Moreover, the need for improvement is the growth process of every fan girl, and growing up on the works you like is a very happy process. Come on

I like it very much. This is my first time watching Douluo. The main characters are all self-created and the characters are really good. I am very interested in it. Damn it, you are stuck in a very good place, your heart is jumping into your throat. So far, there are no big problems. I basically follow the original work and see if there will be any changes later. Damn, do you dare to update 100 chapters? Show me, this place is so urgent [crying]

It's good to read (｡･ω･｡)ﾉ♡ Jing Yunzhe's martial arts spirit is awesome, and his writing style is very good. I like Jing Yunzhe's life experience very much. I haven't read such refreshing writing in a long time. And the setting of the past and present life is too poignant to me [Sending my heart] And the contrast between Jing Yunzhe and "Cute" Hahaha is so cute [I am bt] The only drawback is that there are too few, please give me more [Sending my heart] [Sending my heart] [Sending my heart]

Beautiful, highly recommended! Author, I will always support you! This is the first time I've seen a peerless Tang Sect fan who writes so delicately! Because I am a bisexual man, I am afraid that I will be locked up in a dark room by Tomato, so I will not give it full marks! In short, highly recommended!

It's quite satisfying to see a Douluo fanfic of this quality in 🍅. The plot also has its own innovations. It's not a nanny story, and it doesn't follow the protagonist. There are quite a lot of foreshadowings. In the early stage, I was filled with anger when I saw Xiao. Later, I felt that the child was quite cute [full]. All in all, he was quite good-looking. I especially liked the mirror [shy]. However, I saw that many authors in the same genre had stopped updating. Will the author finish this book?

Is it possible to do double updates? It's not enough to watch. Please, it's really good to watch. I'm really looking forward to the subsequent plot [Adoration] [Adoration] [Flowing Kiss] [Love] [Love] Updated, updated. Damn, you haven't updated it for 4 days. I look at Tomato every day and there's nothing [crying][crying][crying]

Why does it feel a bit like Shuangnan, right? [Thinking][Thinking][Admiration] It's pretty good, but I'm afraid of being blocked and giving a bad review, so I'll give it a try.

The best Douluo series I have ever seen. The plot progress is not laggy, and the original plot has not been changed much. The plot is also very well drawn and fascinating! ! ! ! The author will update a lot! [Smile][smile][admiration][admiration][blowing kiss][blowing kiss]

The plot is silky smooth, there are many foreshadowings, and the writing is super good. I like it [admiration] [sending my heart] At the author's request, 5 stars were changed to 1 star

It's good-looking. It's different from other Douluo fan fiction. It has some new ideas, but there are too few.

This book is really beautiful. I want to read it, but many books don't want to read halfway through. It's really good that he kept me reading this book. His plots are all intertwined, and there is an impulse that makes people want to keep watching. The logic is also very smooth, and the ending makes it difficult for people to guess the meaning of his book. [Laughing] This may be a new book, so the rating is still so low, but I believe it will definitely be very high in the future [Sending my heart]

I really love it, the author is great, [flying kiss] [flying kiss] I have started to post, I hope you can continue to update [shy] [shy] [flying kiss] [flying kiss] [flying kiss] [flying kiss] [send heart] [send heart] [send heart] [send heart] [send heart] [send heart] [send heart] The author writes very well! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! !

It's so beautiful. The author describes it very carefully. I hope it doesn't end badly.

Most of them are 5 stars, why are they rated so low?

Good-looking, more, more [love][love][love][love][love][adoration][adoration][adoration]

The teacher's writing style is really good. Even the original works cannot compare to this one. Oh my god.

Does anyone know who is one [Sending Hearts]

Looks good, looks good, the little couple is so sweet

It's super beautiful and highly recommended. Can the teacher update it more [Adoration] [Blow kiss]

Beautiful writing style and ideas are online Okay, I stopped updating, but I really like the dual male protagonists in this genre. Do you have any recommendations? This kind of hand-in-hand fighting is really cool.

Very nice! Jing Wuhun is really awesome!

Very good looking. The writing is very, very good.

It's possible, but I can't find it. They said they wanted to score points

Obviously Routh's writing is so beautiful, why is the score so low＼(`Δ')／

Such a beautiful book will never get such a low rating. Are you afraid of being banned?

Big cheers for the author [blowing kiss][blowing kiss][blowing kiss]

It looks great, good luck to the author!

It's so beautiful and the story line is very complete.

Well written and engaging content

I didn't understand some parts, but I really want to keep reading this book. It's very interesting.