Spiritual Energy Returns, and I Become a Dragon Girl

After reading dozens of chapters, I think there are two small problems that need to be paid attention to. The first is that the paragraphing is not very good. The paragraphs written are either very long or very short. It is recommended to change it to a paragraph of about 3 to 5 rows, so that it looks smoother. The second is the aspect of character description. The character description is too simple. Only one aspect is described at a time. For example, when the character is moving, he only moves, and when he talks, he only talks. Moreover, I have basically not seen any descriptions of expressions and expressions at present, which look too stiff. When describing a scene, you can write from several aspects, such as action and language, expression and language, etc., And the characters will be richer. Of course, this is just my humble opinion. If you think what I said is wrong, then I am wrong. Finally, for this book, I also hope that the author can write better and better, after all, the subject matter is also very suitable to my taste.

Except for the dialogue that sometimes has some problems, everything else is good. There should be typos or other minor issues in the dialogue. If there are a few correct words, it will be more fluent to read. It will be a good article. The system and world view are all mentioned, and it will not seem abrupt. I beg the author to correct the typos in the dialogue [blowing kisses]. I have only read a dozen chapters and I have seen too many dialogue problems. I hope the author will be aware of it and correct it. If possible, he will also correct the previous ones. If it is really not possible, it will be fine if there are few future chapters without such problems.

A book about a loli girl that satisfies [admiration] or transforms. The author writes it well.

The name Yang Lin has a psychological impact on me, that is, there is a person named Yang Lin in my English book. Also, in the story, the word "said" should be added after someone speaks, otherwise you won't be able to hear clearly who is speaking during a real person reading.

I always feel a little panicked, but I have no evidence 😏😏😏

Can the author stop updating? Every time I see something good, I stop updating 😢😢😢

It's a bit abstract, but it's okay 🍉

I hope it won't break down, I think it's very promising [laughs evilly]

Not bad, who is the male protagonist?

Except for some problems with the character dialogue and a lot of typos, I think it's good and I hope it can be corrected [Chigua]