Days of Leisure in Swallowed Star

The writing is quite good and beautiful. I just hope that some settings such as the heroine eating cream all over her face can be changed, otherwise she will appear to be careless about personal hygiene and sloppy. There are also too many adjectives such as milk cat, and there are also places where the heroine accidentally falls down on important occasions and looks a bit like a 3-year-old child who has not grown up. After all, the heroine is now over 17 years old and is still the God of War. I hope the subsequent plot can be written less. I feel that in the later stage, I can write that the heroine slowly grows up and becomes reliable in important things (although what I am writing now is that the heroine is reliable in important things, but it is not obvious, it still feels very childish). In private, she is cute, childish and lazy, etc. (I have no malice, I am just giving a suggestion)

Well, you can see it, but it's not good that the protagonist can hear his voice.

What's going on? Why has it been removed from the shelves?

Although some story passages are not connected delicately enough, the overall viewing experience is still acceptable. It does not destroy the protagonist's story line or force the plot. I personally like it very much. The heroine's character is also very good. I saw that the male protagonist is Ming Yu in the introduction, and I am looking forward to it [you taste it carefully] [you taste it carefully] [you taste it carefully] So why was it taken off the shelves?

This is my first time reading a heroine version of a fanfic. It's so cute and well-written. It's really rare to be able to write battle scenes so interestingly. Come on, update, great!

This is for the few Devouring fanfics that I like. I hope everyone will give the author more five stars.

Weird, why do I show that it has been removed from the shelves [face covering] [face covering], don't scare me.

? ? ? ? ? Why was it taken off the shelves? ? ? ?

It's hard to find a book that's so appetizing, but why is it suddenly off the shelf? [Crying] [Crying] [Crying] What's going on?

It's a good book. Although the protagonist grows up quickly, there are many shadows of ordinary people. It makes people feel happy without feeling too fake. However, the protagonist is very frustrated during a lot of training, and he is very good in daily life. Overall five points, not many flaws.