The Hell Train Conductor's Journal of the Future

Would normal people laugh at themselves in the diary from God's perspective? Without notes and trial and error, you don't even know when you will die, and you still think you are smart! 🤮

The protagonist is the kind of person who drinks water and mocks those who dig wells.

Well, the genre is okay. That's right, are you too harsh on your future self? Without that notebook, that's how you die. The way the protagonist is written makes people feel bad.

It's okay, but it's too wordy and full of Future Brother. 🤦 Soliloquies and psychological descriptions take up a lot of space.

Would a normal person laugh at themselves in the diary from the perspective of God? There is no trial and error in notes, the protagonist is just a man on the roadside, picking up the bowl to eat, really putting down the bowl and scolding the mother

It looks good, but why does the author always like to write that the protagonist has a sense of superiority to Brother Future? Forget it, he still mocks his future in three sentences. Without notes, he is Brother Future, and he doesn't understand what he is doing by mocking himself 🙂🙂 The book is indeed good to read, but the author can write less plots that mock his own future and survive well 🙂🙂

Hello, author, I don't know if you can see the message. I would like to give you a little suggestion. In fact, you can set the diary as a weird prop or sequence prop. This diary will be a book of yesterday in the hands of the future protagonist, which will automatically record the future protagonist's exploration record yesterday. The cost of using the diary is that the death of the protagonist will devour the protagonist's soul. However, when the protagonist got this diary, he discovered the cost of using this diary. At the moment of death, the diary was sent back to the current time of the protagonist through high-tech means. Line, so that the diary does not swallow the soul of the future protagonist, and the content in the diary is real, and then the current self can save the future self based on the diary content. This forms a cause and effect Bolun, allowing today's me to see tomorrow's me doing today's The story line of the incident forms a story of future exploration and present remedy, so that you can change your own death in the future through changes in the present, making the story and world view fuller. I hope this suggestion will be helpful to you. The setting of the book is good, but the beginning is too boring! Come on! Message from old bookworm

The world view is relatively clear, the characterization is well done, and the content is relatively substantial, involving parts of Lobe Brain Company and Yueji. If you want to read about Yueji but are not a Yueji fan, you can check this out.

He always makes great moves no matter what happens. He has a unique sense of superiority over his future self. He often picks up a bowl and scolds his mother. He keeps scolding himself for dying after trying to figure out the rules for the present in the future. I really don't know how the author wrote a particularly annoying protagonist. I give this theme one more point.

The plot and setting are quite good, including the connection between several small dungeons, which are very smooth. However, the author is a bit inferior in character creation. The protagonist's communication with other characters or talking to himself is not very natural. Especially the psychological activities and some words and deeds of the supporting characters are a bit rigid. It's cliche. In addition, the protagonist obviously has to recruit a bunch of subordinates in the system, and the subsequent dungeons also have to be played with a group of teammates. The impression brought by this kind of character creation will be very poor. The author should either think more about it, or use his strengths and avoid weaknesses, and have more solo shows for the protagonist. In short, the overall situation is not bad.