As soon as Jiang Jinyue passed through the book, he had the system in hand, the Nascent Soul stage cultivation level, and was the elder of the first sect in the world of immortality. The sect leader cared for him well, and he had a lot of genius treasures if he wanted. With such a great start, Jiang Jinyue didn't know how to lose!
But the reality is so cruel. The system is not the golden finger but the farmer who urged her to complete the task!
Jiang Jinyue: "Woooooo~"
However, the farmer still has a trace of conscience and promises that as long as he maintains the correct direction of the original heroine and is eventually killed by the heroine, he will get a resurrection card.
The reward was very tempting, but Jiang Jinyue really couldn't do the bad things that the vicious female counterpart in the original novel did, so she had to secretly add some personal opinions. Unexpectedly, the plot was like a wild horse running like a girl, and she couldn't pull it back.
Even the heroine was in a state of collapse. Unexpectedly, she turned into Shirogiri Kuro and wanted to attack her?
Jiang Jinyue: Don't come over here! ! !
Reader comments
It's like weird-tasting candy. It's okay if the author takes out a separate paragraph. It looks pretty good and the writing style is okay, but the overall look is very awkward and incoherent. This makes it hard to be immersed in the book while watching it, and the mood is easily broken. When I read it, I felt like I was seeing flowers in a fog. What I saw was not a progressive story, but ideas strung together one after another. In addition, the emotional foreshadowing is well done. The process of superimposing pressure little by little looks quite enjoyable, but after the superposition, the climax of the release feels a bit heavy-handed, which makes people feel very suffocated. The lack of the Riddler or information (the perspective of the author and the reader does not match) deepens this point.
Ah, the above are all my humble opinions, don't take them too seriously. Then you want to ask me if I recommend watching it? Then I personally recommend reading it, it's like this strange-flavored candy [lick the screen] The author's astringency that comes out of the article is really delicious [blowing kiss]
OK, it's also a comment. In the book, Jiang Jinyue is like a succubus, starting with Xiao Yun, then Jiang Xi, and then Liu Qingyan [laughing and crying] Ye Luoshi is really miserable, he is still a sensitive character, Jiang Jinyue has done that (just one step away from becoming a real person), and he still daydreams about who Ye Luoshi will be with in the future, even if his emotions are slow, he will not be like this [laughing] Don't use Jiang as always thinking that she is a straight woman, think about it yourself.
It's similar to the bro's point of view above. After all, the author is a high school student. It's really not easy to create a plot. The emotional jumps between characters are normal. It's easy to run out of words to create a Shura field.
Of course, I can say that this is actually because I don't like this kind of writing. The author doesn't need to take it to heart, just think of me as complaining [laughing evilly] (If the author is unhappy, I will apologize [thinking])
The writing style is really good. If a high school student can write this, you must be a great writer [crying]
Human evolution does not take me with it
How should I put it? In the beginning, the relationship progress between the two protagonists changed too fast like riding a rocket. There was no transition. There are also some places where the plot jumps and connections feel weird, but it's not a big problem [Like]
Another thing is to watch the plot of "The Queen of Ten Thousand Females", where the protagonist is forcibly kissed by a supporting character. I saw that the author said that the female supporting character is like this. If they don't kiss, it feels inconsistent with the character. If possible, you can actually use some beautifying and dislocation or white space to write it, and don't be so direct [face covering]. After all, some people are not into this kind of plot, but I don't feel this way, because I already had psychological expectations after reading the comments before reading the book [laughter]
There are no problems in other aspects. Finally, cheers for the author [Like]
So pretty, so pretty, so pretty, so pretty, so pretty, so pretty, so pretty, so pretty, so pretty! Big cheers for the author [blowing kiss][blowing kiss][blowing kiss][blowing kiss]
I have to say it's really good. [Smile] I read half of it, and the more I read, the more confused I get. [Exploration] At first, people thought it was just an ordinary system to travel through books. When I saw Restart the World, what kind of experiment, I was completely confused [Smile] It is difficult to expand the world view of the whole book. If you can't construct this hidden world view well, it will make people confused. But I have already written it down, and I believe the author can write it well [Shy]
It's like weird-tasting candy. It's okay if the author takes out a separate paragraph. It looks pretty good and the writing style is okay, but the overall look is very awkward and incoherent. This makes it hard to be immersed in the book while watching it, and the mood is easily broken. When I read it, I felt like I was seeing flowers in a fog. What I saw was not a progressive story, but ideas strung together one after another. In addition, the emotional foreshadowing is well done. The process of superimposing pressure little by little looks quite enjoyable, but after the superposition, the climax of the release feels a bit heavy-handed, which makes people feel very suffocated. The lack of the Riddler or information (the perspective of the author and the reader does not match) deepens this point. Ah, the above are all my humble opinions, don't take them too seriously. Then you want to ask me if I recommend watching it? Then I personally recommend reading it, it's like this strange-flavored candy [lick the screen] The author's astringency that comes out of the article is really delicious [blowing kiss]
OK, it's also a comment. In the book, Jiang Jinyue is like a succubus, starting with Xiao Yun, then Jiang Xi, and then Liu Qingyan [laughing and crying] Ye Luoshi is really miserable, he is still a sensitive character, Jiang Jinyue has done that (just one step away from becoming a real person), and he still daydreams about who Ye Luoshi will be with in the future, even if his emotions are slow, he will not be like this [laughing] Don't use Jiang as always thinking that she is a straight woman, think about it yourself. It's similar to the bro's point of view above. After all, the author is a high school student. It's really not easy to create a plot. The emotional jumps between characters are normal. It's easy to run out of words to create a Shura field. Of course, I can say that this is actually because I don't like this kind of writing. The author doesn't need to take it to heart, just think of me as complaining [laughing evilly] (If the author is unhappy, I will apologize [thinking]) The writing style is really good. If a high school student can write this, you must be a great writer [crying] Human evolution does not take me with it
How should I put it? In the beginning, the relationship progress between the two protagonists changed too fast like riding a rocket. There was no transition. There are also some places where the plot jumps and connections feel weird, but it's not a big problem [Like] Another thing is to watch the plot of "The Queen of Ten Thousand Females", where the protagonist is forcibly kissed by a supporting character. I saw that the author said that the female supporting character is like this. If they don't kiss, it feels inconsistent with the character. If possible, you can actually use some beautifying and dislocation or white space to write it, and don't be so direct [face covering]. After all, some people are not into this kind of plot, but I don't feel this way, because I already had psychological expectations after reading the comments before reading the book [laughter] There are no problems in other aspects. Finally, cheers for the author [Like]
So pretty, so pretty, so pretty, so pretty, so pretty, so pretty, so pretty, so pretty, so pretty! Big cheers for the author [blowing kiss][blowing kiss][blowing kiss][blowing kiss]
I have to say it's really good. [Smile] I read half of it, and the more I read, the more confused I get. [Exploration] At first, people thought it was just an ordinary system to travel through books. When I saw Restart the World, what kind of experiment, I was completely confused [Smile] It is difficult to expand the world view of the whole book. If you can't construct this hidden world view well, it will make people confused. But I have already written it down, and I believe the author can write it well [Shy]
Nice! Bookshelf+1
Pretty good [smile]
Pleasant to the eye, supportive
How can I put it, I feel like I missed something.