My Little Pony: Traveler in Another World

The description of appearance and environment is large and beautifully written. The content is very natural and vivid, and the characters are described in detail, but I hope others can discover as soon as possible that the protagonist is an Alicorn with wings.

Parts of it are written like AI 😅 but very beautiful [laughing crookedly]

The writing is very good, just like other My Little Pony fanfics that I've read that I'm quite satisfied with, but there's nothing toxic about it. The daily writing is also very good, but it is a pity that some parts are not emotional enough. For example, the protagonist reveals his identity as an Alicorn and says it calmly. Then there is no surprise or anything like that, just a few sentences of description. For example, after the exposure, other people want to see the wings and so on. There is also something that I personally dislike. There is no suffering. You create suffering yourself. The light group was deliberately put in by the will of the world, and it was euphemistically called a test. In fact, to be honest, this kind of thing is not very good. Another fanfic I read was actually two people, one of whom was a thief and an awesome boss. Then in order to test the protagonist, they put all kinds of hardships on the protagonist. To be honest, this is really true, oh, I am happy. In fact, I personally feel that the villain of the original drama is about the same. There is no need to make it more difficult for yourself. In addition, I personally think that you still need to give a princess title. I have read twenty or thirty fan fiction books. Some of them are looking for princess titles with that meaning. Of course, there are also some that are not looking for meaning and are simply called princess. In addition, I really want to give the protagonist the title of princess. If I want to find a meaning, my personal recommendation is such as Hope. , Etc., Similar to qualities such as 6m, such as loyalty, kindness, etc., Or some more illusory ones, such as hope or something, because this type of princess title is relatively relaxed and more in line with the protagonist's character. In other words, the meaning of the protagonist's title will not affect the protagonist himself. The protagonist's surname is Bai. In fact, what does Bai mean? It is light, the white light of hope, or purity and innocence

Great, the author's writing style has been improving all the time, and his updated attitude is also great. He has great potential. I give him a four-star support book. I hope the author will not stop making progress. ૮₍◜ෆ◝.₎ა

The writing is very good. After all, the modifications in the first 20 chapters will be a bit tiring after reading more. Later, the author listened to suggestions and reduced some, but the paragraphs are still a bit long. It has been improved after 48 chapters. The overall is still very good. I hope the author will continue to work hard, but after all, students still need to pay attention to the balance between work and rest [Learned]

It's pretty good.. I was a little tired from reading too many descriptions in the beginning. I changed it later.. The whole thing is very warm.. The protagonist is very powerful in combat.

The author's literary level reminds me of my Chinese teacher in junior high school 🤦

Come on, author, keep it up 🤭🤭🤭

The content is okay, but it looks very tired and doesn't look like a web article. I saw that the author said that he is already revising it, and I hope he can revise the previous ones as well.

Some descriptions could be a little more concise. One shield was described in 200 words.