Traveling Through the Delta, Starting with a 16-Block Safe Box

You can see, it's pretty good Let's talk about the shortcomings: 1. It is said at the beginning that the protagonist has a girlfriend, but it is not mentioned in the middle. Why did you write it if you didn't mention it? If the protagonist is in a vegetative state in reality, wouldn't your boyfriend come and check it out? 2. There are too many typos and wrong sentences. 3. The female supporting role has too much plot, which makes it a bit annoying to watch, and the plot progress is also a bit slow. 4. Some plots can be more rigorous. The protagonist's roommates are all dead. Why is the female supporting character still alive? It is better to write it to death (conventional dam). A minion has only 7 drops of blood and some super hero robot. It is better to die directly and try again. 5. Some recurring data can be omitted. When I looked at it, I skipped a long list of data. Some important CNC data and changed data can be written, and the data can be condensed. 6. If you don't know how to write emotional dramas, don't write them. It's fine without a heroine. Summary: Overall, it's pretty good. Some mistakes are acceptable. I'm pushing it into a trap, but the number of words is a bit short. Please update it soon.

Okay, you have your own ideas. The Asara here is different from those past delta novels, a little darker. But I do think this is more true. It has a bit of Black Star flavor. The protagonist is the moderator who was created. They are at the bottom of the delta world and don't regard them as human beings. It's just a tool to gain profit.

The first part was well written, but the second part is where you write the emotional drama.

It's pretty cool, mainly because everything in the delta has an effect. I'm curious if other items work.

Another great book.

The protagonist has a bit of Down syndrome

Although it's a bit naive, the world view design is pretty good, you can take a look.

Come on, you write well.

Not bad, very pretty

Why is it so small?

I love reading this book

Nice book, very nice,

Come on, author, write quickly. If Ji Yaya is really controlled, I will give a bad review, with a heart

Good-looking, good-looking, good-looking, good-looking

It has its own outline and the main line is pretty good.

This book is better written in Delta and deserves to be recommended.