Travel Through Time in Advance and Develop Two Heroines Since Childhood

Nb, isn't this exactly the world of immortality I imagined? It is not only cruel but also true. Some people may complain that it is not cruel enough and that it is not as good as other books. However, among the many books I have read, this one is already very well written. The previous dozens of photos show the protagonist Xiao Bai's struggle at the bottom, interspersed with the gradual change in his relationship with the two girls. The system settings give you the feeling of playing a game of cultivating immortals. Isn't this what we expect? (It's a bit fun to watch, because there is a system, which gives you the feeling of watching a genius rise, but the hardships are well described, not too brainless, and very real) I started reading it as soon as I put it on my bed in the morning. I watched it for a long time. If I hadn't finished reading it, I wouldn't have come here to read the comments. I'm really glad. Recommend. I think the author's setting is very good. It's appropriate in every aspect and not too much. I have been a book fan for seven years and only used Tomato in junior high school, so the account data is not very good, but it is really good.

Friends, I have to say that this book is really beautiful [crying] I have seen the latest 65 chapters so far, and would like to share your preferences for this article. First, let's talk about some of the more critical issues. The book has a system, which is a rebate system. A certain degree of rebate will be triggered by giving "valuable" props to the two apprentices, or by giving props to the disciples when they need them. It can be seen that the author has very good control over the level of rebates. It will not be like randomly giving a sword and then bursting out a holy weapon. This level of rebates is equivalent to giving a bowl of gruel to a hungry apprentice and getting back one pound of spiritual rice. Of course, the better the gift, the higher the level of rebates. Another function is to check the data, such as learning the fireball technique, and then what level the fireball technique has reached so far. So far, the protagonist has never given any particularly good things to his disciples, so nothing has been triggered that will greatly increase the protagonist's strength and lead to a surge in combat power. But at present, it seems that this is the author's back-up plan to facilitate the promotion of the protagonist's combat power in the future. Secondly, this book is a slow-burning book (emphasis!). How slow is it? The protagonist was at the fifth level of Qi training when he traveled through time. The latest 65 chapters are about to break through to the ninth level of Qi training. The strongest enemy currently appears in the mid-stage of foundation building. Therefore, those who want to see the invincible Long Aotian with explosive combat power should adjust their expectations. The last little problem is that the author doesn't seem to like to interact with readers, and typos in the article are unlikely to be corrected in time. ——————————————————————— Next is pure praise (*＾ー＾) The author did not let the protagonist hide his time-travel identity from his apprentice. And after hearing the news, the two apprentices still maintained a reasonable wariness. They did not believe it immediately like other stories. Instead, through the protagonist's daily behavior and various agreements completed later, the two little guys slowly let down their guard and were willing to believe and keep the protagonist's identity as a time traveler. It was well received. The author's ability to control the article is quite NB. The advancement of the characters' emotions, the focus of which is the improvement of the attitude of the protagonist's two apprentices towards the protagonist and the psychological growth of the protagonist, the time-traveler, is written in a very layered manner. Please go to the main text for details. Friends who like step-by-step and details should not miss it [laughs] Then there is the emotional line. At present, it seems that this article has multiple female protagonists (I really can't guarantee that it will be two female protagonists with two apprentices) (of course, it is also possible that there is no female protagonist, but currently the possibility is almost 0 [smile]). The two little guys began to realize that this "new master" was indeed full of brilliance, and slowly developed a good impression and dependence, and they had already begun to sneak away [laughing evilly]. It is hard to say whether they will develop into yanderes in the future, but the possibility is not small, because one of them has the possessiveness or desire to conquer that makes the protagonist kneel on the ground and wash her feet~ (Kouya! I want to see Shura Field!) ——————————————————————— All in all, this is a new book with great potential, and you won't lose money by investing in it✧٩(ˊωˋ*)و✧

The writing is good, and it fits the Tomato genre. It's slow-burning and similar to traditional fantasy, which is a bit refreshing. It's not a mindless novel, it's about crushing all the ideas and leveling up, but it's still too poor and not capable enough, so I can understand why the two female protagonists are not allowed to level up. The most important thing is that the writing is good, the characters are well created, and it is okay to be overly emotional. Excellent work, five stars

Putting aside the typos and minor inconsistencies in the plot, everything is good. The plot is just right, neither fast nor slow, and the daily emotional enhancement also makes up for the previous problems. The whole road looks good. It would be even better if the previous problems could be corrected.

I'm currently reading Chapter 65, Nothing poisonous Bringing a baby to practice, Make progress little by little, build good relationships little by little Not bad for killing time I hope the author will not let the plot go astray in the future.

A very delicate family relationship and a realistic approach to immortality. There is no such thing as an invincible battle. But there is slow growth, both for the male protagonist and the two little girls. The pace is slow. The two little girls gradually became close to the male protagonist from their initial fear. Currently, we are in this realistic world of immortality, relying on each other. Now I am mainly writing about the growth of the male protagonist, and the process of slowly becoming closer to the two little girls from fear. Very delicate writing. Digging holes will also be filled. As readers, we are not only watching the male protagonist raise two little girls, we are also "raising the male protagonist". Looking forward to the follow-up content. Come on, author! You are the best person I have ever written about this subject in Tomato! (｡･ω･｡)ﾉ♡

It's quite interesting, there are no big problems so far, the protagonist confessed his identity in advance. It's a pity that there aren't many more chapters, looking forward to the follow-up

Why did he die suddenly?

No, why is it gone [crying]

Overall, it's pretty good. Normally, if there is a counterattack system, wouldn't everyone try out exercises, spiritual stones, spells, etc.? ? I just felt a little comfortable for a long time. As a result, before Chapter 30, I gave a few things that mortals could use without adding strength. I gave him a spiritual stone to increase strength. As a result, I later forgot that I was immersed in practicing there...

Isn't it why it was removed from the shelves? The author is very [stunned]

The writing style is very comfortable, and the slow pace is rare. There are no exaggerated descriptions, no superficial gimmicks, and some are just a steady flow. I sincerely hope that it will get better and better.

What do you mean? Why did it suddenly disappear?

There's nothing poisonous about it, it just has some glitches, but it doesn't feel like it's useful.

It's uncomfortable 😭 Why is it so dead? I think it's very interesting and I want to keep watching it!

I love watching it, and it gives me a sense of plain happiness. (Having said that, can the protagonist become stronger soon? It's unsafe if he is too weak)

Good looking good looking Could you please mention the protagonist's cultivation level a little bit?) I feel a little aggrieved because I don't have the strength to cultivate in the world of immortality. The two little apprentices are so interesting. I hope the favorability will exceed 0 as soon as possible.

Yes, there are no poisonous points. The second step is to cultivate steadily. It is not like other novels where you can achieve golden elixir after a few pictures. The characters have distinct personalities. I look forward to subsequent updates [Blow Kiss]

The plot is written slowly, but this is an excellent point, because it can extend the plot, and it can be said that the plot is quite good. In addition, although the protagonist has a system, he is too poor in the early stage, so it is not considered to be a fighting force! The rebate system is not very useful at all. This is a good book. I hope it gets better and better!

It's good to read. It has been updated to chapter 67. It's non-toxic and candid. It has intrigues in the world of immortality and the warmth and harmony of the daily relationship between master and disciple. It's very interesting.

The plot is very good, my daughter watched it for the first time [laughing]

Where is the book? Why did it get downloaded? [Cover face] [Cover face] [Cover face]

Okay, okay, looking forward to the follow-up

What if it's not my book? Entered the dark room? [What] [What] [What]

It's well written, but after looking at the author's previous books, I'm worried about whether this book can be finished [Thinking]

I hope there will be more interaction and daily life between master and disciple, and the number of fights in practice will be appropriately reduced. Brother, brother, keep writing? Copy? You are not copying the original text, you may have borrowed the theme and outline, which is normal... There are a thousand Hamlets in the eyes of a thousand people. Your books must be different and have their own characteristics. Although I have not read the one you mentioned, we can also change the outline later, and the plot can also be designed by ourselves... Take your time, don't stop immediately!

Just read Chapter 38 and be moved😭Wow

The author's writing style is pretty good among Tomatoes, and the characters are also well drawn.

Very possible. The details are well described. But if you can correct the typos as soon as possible, it will feel good when you read it.

It looks good, I enjoyed watching it [adoration][adoration][adoration][shy], the author will update it quickly