I Went Viral Across the Stars After Writing a Story

The article is very well written in Chinese, but the relationship between the heroine and his two brothers is a bit puzzling. The heroine is not even as good as the heroines in her novels. Why do you feel inexplicably weak when faced with the teasing of those two brothers? What are you feeling guilty about? What? [Laughing awkwardly][laughing awkwardly]

I really like the Chinese version, but the heroine's real life is very strange. I prefer Yan Ansui. The author is great. Just concentrate on writing the Chinese version. Don't write about the heroine's real-life emotions. Trust me, your data will be better this way. ദ്ദി(˵ •̀ ᴗ - ˵ ) ✧

⚠️Mary Sue does not mean hugging and hugging strangers you meet for the first time many times The real-life plot is embarrassing and bloody, and the emotional line develops inexplicably. The Chinese language of the text is okay, Sui Sui is quite enjoyable so far, but the proportion of the plot is very small. It describes the awkward and bloody relationship between the heroine and her two brothers who are not related by blood.

I feel that the plot line is better than the emotional line

It's okay, the heroine is okay, but the description of the brothers is very strange, especially the brother. The scene where he appears is directly replaced by the strange dungeon plot (maybe it's a sequelae of my recent reading of the article). He also teases the heroine, which is uncertain. I understand that the heroine is afraid. There is another one. Although it is a bit inexplicable, the description after that is still a bit cute. Now I am really interested in this book, so I skipped a few chapters, and it feels much better afterward.

Can you give the author some advice? It's just that everyone is attracted by the introduction. Things that are not in the introduction (such as the two writer brothers) will be briefly mentioned, okay? You can have a love line, but it's best not to write too much. Everyone comes here for the introduction. I personally prefer to read the Chinese version and the comments from StarCraft readers. It would be best if there is no love line. To be honest, when I read the descriptions of the two brothers, I felt very strange, really strange. I always felt that the eldest brother had ulterior motives, and the second brother, how should I say, was a bit oily. , The two brothers have no sense of distance at all, they are always so close, and I can't stand the heroine's embarrassment. I really want to jump when I see those two brothers. I have a feeling that the author wants to write a love line (brother and sister or ambiguous line), but to be honest, it's weird. Otherwise, the author, you should stay in your comfort zone (the text is in Chinese, readers' comments) and focus on the direction of the heroine's career line.

There are very few fragments in the novel, and they basically describe the heroine and the two brothers.

I feel that the author may have been misled by someone, misjudged the relationship between people, and the distance between people. There is no ordinary acquaintance, no communication at all, and then you can hug and hug each other for the first time, very intimate behavior, and then you have not noticed that there is a problem in this aspect. I have read Chapter 20 and this problem has not been solved. This is the real problem of the heroine in the book, which is completely unacceptable. But the heroine, things other than reality (emotional line?), Career line are very good.

I thought the career would account for more, but it turned out that most of it was the description of the characters' emotions.

The real-life parts are bafflingly written. I feel like you should write well in Chinese! Write less about the real life part. Why do the two brothers feel like they are pseudo-human beings when they write it?