Harry Potter: Heloilia's Private Diary

I really like Heloria! A traveler from another world who is close to nature and one with nature. It also shaped Snape's friendship with the Malfoy family, the Malfoy family's emphasis on family ties, and Voldemort's fanaticism in pursuing immortality and being a superior. The only thing I'm slightly confused about is that Heloria values ​​her friends very much, but James and Sirius' behavior towards Snape can be called bullying. Why didn't Heloria respond? But overall it is a very good book, and I look forward to more updates from the author! [Blowing kiss][blowing kiss]

Author, you really succeeded in creating the character of Heloria. The string of words seemed to come alive, making me feel the warmth of his flesh and blood. I feel it. Malfoy's love for Lucius and the Malfoy family's principle of putting family first. Heloria, I seem to feel his gentleness like the breeze. Tolerance and kindness that embraces all things. Beautiful clean soul. Instead of facing the courage to start a new trip from scratch. He made me feel like I could touch his tenderness and his soul through the screen. Let me empathize with him. Severus Snape's conflicting feelings were successfully portrayed. Damn, you write really well. [Love] [Love] [Love] I really love it, okay? Big.

The characters are not OOC, the original character is a rational and strong little sun with a very charming personality, and the original plot is very exciting. In the early days, some parts of the writing were a little bit idiosyncratic in Chinese language. Later, it got better and better, and it is rare to find a good teaching style.

Looks good! There are really not many teachers who write about Severus nowadays╯▂╰

It's great, and it's tied immediately. The main character is cute and doesn't make any of the characters bad. God knows how difficult it is to find a book that teaches CP, is Gryffindor-friendly, and doesn't slander the protagonist group [crying][crying][crying]

This is the first book I have read where the main character meets a Sri Lankan teacher in his youth. Fortunately, I found a very valuable author. Your writing is really beautiful. I feel very distressed when I see the way Sijiao looks after Voldemort's death in every timeline. Although there is a happy ending in the end, I just hope that it will be earlier, and earlier, not to let Sijiao follow Voldemort, so that he does not have to bear so many responsibilities, and does not have to live with guilt in the future. He is the youngest and most talented potion master. He should not be bound by so many things. He will have many like-minded friends and shine in the field he is good at. Your writing is really great. It fulfilled a small wish of mine. I hope to write more stories about them in the future [Sending my heart] [Sending my heart] So pretty.

Ouch, ouch, I like this book so much, why is it so unscientific to score it so low! No one dislikes Heloria, he is really pure and beautiful I really like his relationship with Severus. He supports everything about Severus, including Severus' love for dark magic and his desire to join the Death Eaters in the first place... I really love everything about him. The whole story direction is also super interesting, and the plot is very compact. Unlike those who keep following the original plot, please read HP fandom, of course you have to read the new story. And the author's writing is excellent! Cooking is super delicious! All members are non-ooc! Don't miss it! !

HP is a fan of the same generation. It has many unique insights and thoughts of the author. The writing style is also good and it is very novel to read. However, there are also some points that need to be paid attention to compared with most non-Mary Sue hp fan fiction. Readers who can accept it are still recommended to read: There are many private settings that are different from the world view of Harry Potter, as well as a small amount of bloody elements. Because it is a story about one's own generation, there are many plots that are not found in the original work. Therefore, some of the characters and plot settings are different from, or even opposite to, what the general public thinks. There is Tom Abu cp. The male protagonist is beautiful and powerful, a bit like a virgin (perhaps the characteristics of an immortal species?), Very philanthropic, and has a relatively dedicated personality. The full text does not criticize all the characters, but it is pro-Snake Yard and Xiaotang (Lowling actually wrote Snake Yard as the villain hhh). Lao Fu's strength is stronger than the original work, but also worse than the original work [laughing and crying]. There are also some small bugs, such as the lack of traces of minors outside the school, which is treated as a private device. Personally, I feel that this book may have more polarizing tastes, and it is more suitable for those who do not research the original work. The emotional line is written very tenderly [laughing]

I especially like the portrayal of the Malfoy family in this book. The family values ​​friendship and family ties, and is willing to take risks for the friends they consider to be friends. And Voldemort is not just a crazy villain. Each character is particularly full-bodied, and Snape's explanation of Lily's feelings is from a very objective perspective (a projection of beauty). He is a super unique HP fan, Mrs. Confession!

The protagonist is very gentle and supports all Snape's ideas, which is really good. Snape's emotional description is also quite detailed, which is really good. However, I saw that in the first half of the chapter, the protagonist clearly witnessed the sequelae of Voldemort's "clearing bloodline impurities", but did not delve into the reasons. I think this is a bit contrary to the previous description of his "curiosity and exploration of knowledge" (an inaccurate expression). But when it was his turn to split his soul, he clearly realized that splitting his soul was a "painful" thing, but he insisted on splitting it. He clearly noticed that he was very weak after the split, but he had no intention of delving into it at all. He was just waiting for "self-healing", which felt inconsistent with his previous behavior of always being willing to treat and study.