I Have Become the Old God of Dusk, You Let Me Go Through the Plot

The Juche world view is of a high standard. Although some details are borrowed from the setting, it is already very good for a new writer. The handling of character details is also okay, except that the guy named Wang does have a somewhat abrupt change in stance, but the character creation including Mo Lingtong and other characters is well done. However, I have two personal suggestions. One is that the villains who have appeared so far basically have no names or personal characters outside of the plot (it can be understood as extras between the main plot, depending on the importance of the character, which can range from a few dozen to 200 words. It is helpful for the three-dimensional image of the character and the rationality of the plot logic). Even if the villain's power is forcibly increased by numerical values, it still gives people an unreal plastic feel, and you can tell at a glance that they are minions. On the one hand, there is no immersive tension, and on the other hand, there is insufficient feedback on the protagonist's spiritual growth and image creation. Second, there are too few characters. Not only the protagonists, but also the supporting characters must be described. The description here is not to set off the protagonists, but to serve the world view. The cognitive world that the author gives readers must be a relatively more comprehensive middle-level perspective, not just the perspective of the protagonists. It can neither be limited to the surroundings of the protagonist, nor clearly reveal clues, so it can attract readers more. In short, the author's writing skills are still profound, and his works are innovative and rarely make people's eyes shine. It ranks high among the works I have read. That's it for now. Finally, I would like to remind the author to make an update (^~^)

The overall outline is quite good, and it can be considered a relatively good article. However, there are still some bugs that need to be fixed overall! 1. The protagonist's "Stealing Star" talent completely disappeared in the middle and late stages of the martial arts test! Especially when hitting that crab! All of his teammates' skills are built around his own abilities! But the protagonist's core talent is gone and he becomes an ordinary warrior! It can be said that the protagonist's talents will be reduced when used across levels, but we cannot forget that he has this ability! This part of the fighting content needs to be revised overall. 2. Regarding the portrayal of Wang Teng, we can see that the author wants to portray him as a dandy who loves honor but can still stand up in the face of major right and wrong. But there was no foreshadowing of his good side, so his change of stance was a bit too sudden. Of course there is a good side 1. At least the character background and character arc of each character are well and cleverly displayed. 2. The abilities and design are relatively innovative and are no longer the traditional medieval Western background. Combined with modern technology, you have your own setting! Come on come on! ! !

To be honest, I thought it was a short story at first, but after looking at it, the quality is actually very high. It is already a high-quality novel on Tomato, and the writing style is close to God-killing. In fact, there is still room for improvement. For example, the villain can be made more contradictory, and the plot can be more difficult to guess.

The logic is reasonable and smooth, the subject matter is creative and has a basic template. It avoids the boredom of traditional cool writing while retaining the sense of coolness. The protagonist's outlook on life is fine, and the non-protagonist characters are also well-shaped, and there is no starting point for a character collapse. The only shortcoming may be that I personally think that the relationship between the male and female protagonists progresses slowly, but it is not a big problem in male videos.

Not bad, Gaowu is above average, the male and female protagonists' emotional and main storylines are very clear and stable.

Nice! The character descriptions are spot on, and although the plot and content are cliche, they are well written. There are some parts where you show off and slap people in the face, which have pros and cons. Overall, it's fine grain.

The protagonist is humorous and has a wife at the beginning. Updates are a bit slow, but you can watch it.

I love watching the daily lives of my childhood sweethearts!

Very good, not bad👍Come on, author (ง•̀_•́)ง

I saw the latest chapter, and I feel like it's about to end. I feel like the following content is about a sudden power reaching its peak, and then sweeping away everything, and finally becoming a god.

The writing is awesome, the WOC writing is so awesome, the plot and characters are all very well written, the writing is completely good, but there is just a little too little, please keep updating the author! ! !

It's a very good book. The main character is not a virgin, but has a sinister character with a hint of fun. I like it very much.

The creativity is very good and the plot is smooth. After reading dozens of chapters, it is a bit unpalatable, but I still leave a five-star review.

Good-looking, really good-looking

It's very well written, cheers to the author [blowing kisses]

He probably won't survive

It's ok. The writing is okay. You can still go into the bookshelf and look for it.

The plot is really good and exciting! [Praise]

The world view of this book is not small, and the author has written very well so far.

Hee hee😄 (I don't know what to write, so just write hee hee.) Hee hee😄

It's pretty, just don't stop it

Nice! Really nice

It looks good, I love watching it, I still watch it

The world view is very big and detailed. I hope it doesn't end badly.

Just be a pig, just play, hehe, just love to slap in the face, it's no longer popular to be a pig and eat a tiger [laughing evilly] Come and watch, everyone

Disposable if you like to read stories with a single female protagonist, fake harem stories, where you can change into a harem at any time, rely on the female supporting character to drive the plot, and you will be next to the female supporting character everywhere you go.

Although this book has been cut, I still look forward to the new book [Sending my heart][Sending my heart]

It's pretty good-looking, at least better than some numerical monsters, and not like that low-quality routine text.

I think this is a very nice book

It's so beautiful. I beg the author to make more articles. This is one of the best articles I've ever read on Tomato [crying] Please update as soon as possible, I'm already out of books😭 I wanted to recommend a book, but I couldn't find it