Rebirth**********

It is a really cool article to keep this kind of crushing game [like], unlike other books that cheat from the beginning. If you still narrowly escape death, then the cheating will be in vain, right?

There are too many female supporting characters in Mortal, and it's hard to get over it. The main line should be to show off and accept the female characters. Did Fairy Shidie forget to collect it?

Don't catch Old Mo Han harvesting wool by himself. You must have your own main plot. Is there just a little chance in this huge world of immortality? Is it time to seriously design a copy yourself? Otherwise, what is the difference between the original work and the girl? [Cover face][eat melon] The writing is good, please put more thought into the fighting scenes [Chigua]

The writing is very good, but the level does not need to rise too fast. It gives people a feeling of speed and completion. It is not long and does not feel rushed. It is slightly stressed and slightly stressed. It is interesting to give the heroine more promotion. It is not good if the gap between the male and female protagonists is too big.

Keep working hard and don't end up unfinished... What impressed me most about this novel is "Brother Han, without spiritual roots, can't he really practice?" And "I got a bowl in the secret realm". That bowl has always attracted me.

The writing is already considered the first level of Tomato. Because they are the same person, the plot arrangement is more appropriate and it is not easy to make mistakes. I didn't give five stars before, but this time I give five stars to encourage it. I hope the writing of this book will get better and better

The plot is pretty good for the time being. It is indeed a good article. Suggestion 1: Don't always target the protagonist Han Lao Mo in the follow-up. In fact, Han Li's character is quite good. He does not kill innocent people indiscriminately and robs. He has sincerity and credibility in making transactions. He also values ​​friendship and friendship with those he recognizes. This kind of person is considered a good person in the world of immortality. There is no need to always target him. He can help each other and trade with each other. 2. The follow-up should not be so fast-paced. The cheats and levels should be written so quickly or exaggeratedly. Don't mess around with women, etc. Or you can create a separate event line yourself. Then the event lines of your own and Han Li's dual protagonists can intersect or intersect.

It's great. I love watching it. Maybe I'm a bitch, but I just like the emotional drama after the female character is redeemed. This is great.

It looks good and feels good. The author has read the original work.

I still like it very much after the update. It has also fulfilled my dream of cultivating immortals. I have invincible strength to find dozens of beautiful wives and enjoy the life of cultivating immortals.

It's good to watch, I especially like watching the protagonist's training.

Tomato's rare mortal fan fiction, well written [Like]

The role of a mortal cultivating immortality Nangong Wan, Chen Qiaoqian, Mo Caihuan, Mo Fengwu, Mo Yuzhu, Yan Ruyan, Yuan Yao, Zhong Weiniang, Zi Ling, Dong Xuan'er, Xing Ruyin, Xiaomei, Han Yunzhi, Ling Yuling, Mu Peiling, Wen Siyue, Mei Ning, Fan Jingmei, Zhuo Ruting, Zhou Yuan, Wen Qing,

666, I only discovered such a beautiful book now. Author, if you don't want your life, you'd better take them all for me, [Cool] [Laughs]

Personally, I feel that the gift given by the Advent Talisman is pretty good. There is a chance to reduce the consequences of being taken away from the spirit world. His character in the anime is relatively comprehensive. I don't know how it is in the novel, but if it's not good then I won't give it to you. After being given the Advent Talisman, his cultivation level should reach at least the Great Perfection of Divine Transformation. The chance of seizing a house is greatly reduced. I hope the author can handle this well. [Cover face]

Yes, it's rare to find a well-written fanfic about Mortal Cultivation of Immortality.

It's relatively consistent with the original work, but it's a little rusty. The rhythm is well written, and the system is okay. It makes up for some regrets. Was it a little too cruel to this old devil?

A very good book [Blowing Kisses]

It is recommended to change the title of Taoist Fairy to Xiaoyou After all, the world of immortality respects strength and the genius is the genius, not the strong one. Unable to discuss friendship with their peers And the most important thing is that you can change that you have dual spiritual roots and cover up your best vision.

Support the new author, he writes well.

It's very interesting, the plot is compact and not laggy, please update it quickly! Not enough!

It's good and looks good. I'll watch it after I gain weight.

Have you made a confession to Mr. Wangyu? I finally understand why the ratings are so bad, so I'll take a closer look at the original timeline. And character cultivation

Must praise! Sisters Nangong Wan, Xin Ruyin, Han Yunzhi, Wang Ning, Yuan Yao, etc. Are all in the harem, so they look great!

The real little emperor's uncle, who has reviewed each chapter chapter by chapter, please don't disturb the pure love warrior.

The emotional drama needs to be improved

It's worth five stars, but I'm afraid I'll give it to you [face covering]

It's a good book, but the combat power should not collapse too quickly, otherwise it will be boring. As long as you can suppress Old Demon Han all the time [laughing]

Although I haven't read The Mortal's Journey to Immortality, I think this book is pretty good, with only some flaws.

It feels good at the moment and I don't want to lick the protagonist. It's also refreshing to take in women. Hurry and collect them all, don't leave any of them to Old Mo Han.