The Dark and Dead House Cannot Be a Magical Girl

It's barely a good book, and it looks pretty good. The only thing that makes me uncomfortable is the male body (the male body will change into the appearance of a magical girl, and is currently a handsome boy like a girl). I went to get a short haircut. Imagine your brother (such as Cai Xukun) suddenly had his hair completely cut. The shaved look feels quite inconsistent. I am an old reader of this kind of novel (sexual transformation), otherwise I would not have more than a thousand fans. I am not the only one who thinks so about the hair problem. I hope the author can improve it and your book can become better. Come on (*≧▽≦) How should I put it? The plot about Ji Yuting (the little girl who was kidnapped together with the protagonist) may be the downfall of this book. As a supporting character, her length is too long and she is also quite depressing. Taking up so many words, I hope she can play a bigger role later. If it is to promote the development of the plot, the update speed can be faster. After all, many readers including me have been following it for a week and basically can't see the protagonist. Some of them are contrary to Tiangang.

It's very interesting. Since the forced transformation didn't go back for 3 hours, let's extend it a little longer and go back after more than 10 hours. In this way, the protagonist has to set aside 10 hours every day to transform. It's hard to tell from the back. The supporting character in the front almost has more scenes than the protagonist. Who is the protagonist? The male-to-female protagonist is a story about a magical girl. The little girl is the protagonist. It's a coming-of-age story about an abuser in the early stage and a darkening in the later stage.

Generally speaking, it's okay. However, from Chapter 50 to Chapter 55, the protagonist does not appear. The subsequent appearances are basically guest appearances. From Chapter 60, the role of the protagonist gradually increases. I think it is not necessary to write so many things about Ji Yuting and Ji Xinxue, but it may make readers If you don't understand who the protagonist is, it may just be to explain the background, but you also need to understand the priorities. This part can be omitted. If not, the protagonist must appear at least once in each chapter. Moreover, this part is relatively boring (personal feeling), and not many people can persist in reading it. I personally guess that between chapters 50 and 60 is one of the reasons why most readers abandon the book. The protagonist has too few roles and the plot is dark, making readers confused about who the protagonist is. If the plot cannot be skipped, they should speed up and finish this part. All in all, this book is pretty good [Thinking][Thinking][Thinking]

There is still room for improvement in the first few chapters. From chapter 10 onwards, we get to the part that everyone loves to read. I won't reveal too much, but as a 10-year old bookworm, I can confirm that this book is indeed quite good. Although I don't know why the rating is so low, if it is rated normally, it is basically It is about 9 to 9.3. I also hope that the author will not abandon this book and continue writing. After all, the current rating of this book is really scary. I am a little afraid that it will suddenly be discontinued one day. There are indeed not many good books that meet our appetite. Please give it a boost, author. Although the pace is marked as fast, the progress of the relationship is a bit ridiculously fast. I just brushed it off in one stroke, and it even felt a bit frivolous and uncomfortable. Let's wait and see.

It looks good. It would be even better if it was 100. I can accept it as long as it's not a change of marriage [laughs]

Miss you prison dream @ [crying]

Not bad, forced to transform for 6-8 hours every day? Then it seems that I will transform at night when I sleep.

Different from the introduction, the plot is a little slow, and the role of the male protagonist cannot be seen until more than 50 chapters. The burden of repaying kindness is not as toxic as the lack of any action at present. Later, the protagonist becomes smarter and can see that he has to pay more to repay the kindness.

I finally found it. There are so few books of this type that I can't even read them. Come on, author [I'm about to cry]

The pace could be faster, there are already 60 chapters, and the time has not passed a few days, and there are no scenes where the protagonist's battle escalates. They are basically encounters and dealing with messes, and it is easy to lose interest after watching it for a while. Come on [blow a kiss]

There are flaws, but overall it is very good. The writing style, originality, and lack of routines really poked me. The author is of good quality, but evenly adding points to the two themes "fighting and love" seems a bit weak. I suggest that future new books focus on emotional themes that I am better at. When writing about battles, combat should also be weakened and used as an auxiliary emotional line.

It's beautiful, it's the nth nature of a magical girl, I hope it will continue to be updated

Apart from the too-Mother-like reading at the beginning, the rest of the book is quite enjoyable. But here I have a question, is the method that can turn everyone into a magical girl available to everyone, or is the protagonist just a special case?

I said before that I didn't want to hide it from my parents and relatives, but later I just hid it from my sister. It's a logical contradiction, but it's not bad.

Come on, author, the part about the witch can be reduced.

The writing is pretty good and is recognized by peers! If the author keeps at it, he will get better. If he has fewer words, he will get poor grades. If he has too many words, he will get good grades, okay? The narrative is a bit messy. I suggest you sort it out before writing.

Okay, I like this kind of thing

How to obtain abstract magic heart

Oh my god! Even a big boy likes to watch this stuff. It's a pity to abandon it and I must hide it🤔

Don't worry, brother 😭😭😭, I just like to watch this kind of super family fun where no one in the family is normal.

A very good Lily novel, but it's a pity that I haven't reached my favorite part yet. The anticipation is high, the narrative is told from different perspectives, and it's full of surprises. The little girl's experiences, despair, and collapse. I'm really looking forward to the protagonist's rescue and growth. Author⛽

Novel setting, family reunion (gathering of experts) There are two or three minor flaws in the first 50 chapters, but they are already very good. It is recommended to change the fast pace to a slow pace Support the author

It looks good, please keep writing!

It's good-looking, but a bit lacking.

Very exciting and beautiful

Emm,,, it's pretty good, isn't it?˗ˋˏ( ´͈ ᗜ `͈ )ˎˊ˗

It might be better to focus more on the protagonist

In fact, not getting married can be changed to becoming a hundred. [Laughing][laughing]

It's okay, but did the Yue Lan episode at the beginning borrow from the plot at the beginning of Zhan Ji's swan song? There is a familiar feeling

It's okay, but the beginning part is not handled very well.