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Reader comments
As a new author, the writing is already very good, but there are still many areas that can be improved.
1. Although the writing is readable and the layout of the article is good, the narrative is a bit slow and unclear. The author writes about a long period of daily life at the beginning. At this stage, the protagonist has no clear goal, the main line is not clear, and the world view is not introduced in detail. So the early reading is quite vague. Personally, I think that at the beginning of the book, try not to write about ordinary daily life. You should either give a general introduction to the world view, or draw out the main line and create contradictions to achieve the effect of attracting reading interest. Also, we need to study more on the creation and arrangement of the characters. Tabitha died at the beginning, and the description of Tabitha probably does not exceed 2,000 words, so what is the point of arranging this person? And how much resonance can a relatively blank person resonate with readers?
2. I suggest the author revise the introduction and cover of this book. The introduction also does not introduce the main content of the book, making people have no idea what is written. The introduction is the business card of a book. Regardless of the content of the book, the introduction is always the first thing readers see. Also, the cover uses a picture of Elhaysen, and the title of the book mentions the concept of the Great Sage. It is difficult not to think that this is a fanfic of Genshin Impact. But when I clicked in and took a look, it had nothing to do with Genshin Impact. It's easy to be dissatisfied (I thought it was a Genshin Impact fanfic at first). You can consider changing it
I'm not a very experienced reader, so I can only make these suggestions. I hope the author writes better and better.
As a new author, the writing is already very good, but there are still many areas that can be improved. 1. Although the writing is readable and the layout of the article is good, the narrative is a bit slow and unclear. The author writes about a long period of daily life at the beginning. At this stage, the protagonist has no clear goal, the main line is not clear, and the world view is not introduced in detail. So the early reading is quite vague. Personally, I think that at the beginning of the book, try not to write about ordinary daily life. You should either give a general introduction to the world view, or draw out the main line and create contradictions to achieve the effect of attracting reading interest. Also, we need to study more on the creation and arrangement of the characters. Tabitha died at the beginning, and the description of Tabitha probably does not exceed 2,000 words, so what is the point of arranging this person? And how much resonance can a relatively blank person resonate with readers? 2. I suggest the author revise the introduction and cover of this book. The introduction also does not introduce the main content of the book, making people have no idea what is written. The introduction is the business card of a book. Regardless of the content of the book, the introduction is always the first thing readers see. Also, the cover uses a picture of Elhaysen, and the title of the book mentions the concept of the Great Sage. It is difficult not to think that this is a fanfic of Genshin Impact. But when I clicked in and took a look, it had nothing to do with Genshin Impact. It's easy to be dissatisfied (I thought it was a Genshin Impact fanfic at first). You can consider changing it I'm not a very experienced reader, so I can only make these suggestions. I hope the author writes better and better.