Why Did the Disciple I Picked up Become Crooked?

This book is considered a first work, and it will give both of them an ending regardless of whether anyone reads it. As for things that cannot be posted in Tomato, if anyone wants to see the specific content, I will post them to another place. If you have any questions or want to discuss anything, leave a comment and I will basically read it and reply. Thank you again for reading! ! ! (However, this book review is quite difficult to find. I clicked through it all before I found it.) There are still 35 book reviews left to get a rating! Come on! ! !

The setting is very interesting to me, but I feel that the author rarely reads fairy tales. The more I read the word "master", the more awkward it becomes, but I can still accept it. The writing becomes better as time goes by. It can be regarded as witnessing the growth process of an author. Overall, it is highly recommended. Chapter 107 Please translate [crazy]

It's a pretty good first game for a newcomer. It uses its strengths and avoids its weaknesses, and has a good grasp of the environment and details. Personally, I quite like Chapter 181. It's the most obvious chapter where the two people have different personalities but try to get along. The author's progress is also quite obvious. He started to know the layout around chapter 40 and matured around chapter 60. In the later stage, the scene where I had to force my apprentice to grow up was too fast, and the plot was not buffered enough. I personally think it would be better to add a section where the master and apprentice get along with each other on the way to the Demon Suppression Pass. The early stage was a bit too fast, and the little apprentice's childhood (before adulthood) life was directly passed through. Therefore, in my personal opinion, the little apprentice's love for Yi is very sudden. I can only say that the young apprentice's physical love for Yi is really gifted (this is how I felt about their relationship in the early stage) [The sudden feeling is specifically a doubt: Why is it not love but love? . There are very few direct descriptions of the Demon King's battle, and it feels like a plot has been chopped off. Overall, it's pretty good. I would like to encourage you with the five-star praise. After all, you can clearly feel the author's intentions and knowledge.

Although the introduction is a bit weak, the plot is still very interesting [shy] and has a very relaxed and happy atmosphere I really like the senior sister in the article. Her character is very interesting. Mainly when I watch the senior sister teasing her junior brothers and sisters, I think of when I am teasing my younger sister [laughing] [laughing] [laughing] It's really funny.

The plot is very interesting, I like it, and the characters also touched my heart [send my heart], author, I will always follow you [please update]

It's so beautiful and reading this book always brings me a sense of calm and comfort. This is a feeling that other books don't have. It's really 👍 👀❤️👍👏

Good Book No One [Crying] Although it is a bit sadistic, it is really good to read, and the characters of the two heroines are quite novel among dual heroines.

What do you have to say? That's just beautiful. I hope I can write such a sweet book in the future. After reading it, continue reading the next one. When you finish speaking, you, the author, are also saying it to yourself. The road ahead is long and the journey is long. Come on.

Love the plot very much

Looks good! ! ! ! I really like the characters of the protagonists! ! I also like the supporting characters very much! ! ! ! !

I obviously finished reading it, but I didn't comment. No wonder the rating is so low It's a good-looking and bland novel. Who wouldn't love the love story between the master and his apprentice?

It's pretty good-looking, a little bit sadistic, but otherwise quite sweet.

Nice! The characters are very poignant, although a bit sadistic, but I like it very much and look forward to the author's new book.

I want to see Master rework [Adoration][Admiration][Admiration]

It's so good, I watched it in bed at night.

If you like the book Beauty Master's Thousand Layers of Routines for Medical Treatment, you might also like this book. I can't stand this type of book and I think the author's writing is okay.

Excellent work, very happy.

I like both the character setting and the plot very much [like] [like] like like like

Beautiful, I like it very much. The plot is good, but the background has been used by someone else. So some people feel uncomfortable watching it. Anyway, I quite like it.

A great book. You are a great author. I look forward to your next book. [Like][Like][Like]

As a first work, it is very well written.

After watching it for a while, I felt it was pretty good. The heroine is quite cute.

The final time travel is very sudden (even at the end it is short), and the setting is not new, but the flaws are not hidden, the writing is very good and beautiful.