"Eros Chocolate" is an original fanfic. The plot takes place after the second season of the Eros anime. The protagonists meet a young man with a mysterious life experience, and start a series of adventure stories with him and reveal his life experience step by step. They grow with each other and establish a deep bond.
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I definitely support my debut novel~
First of all, the first point is that your paragraphs should be separated. Basically, one paragraph of five or six lines, or one or two lines, and occasionally more than seven or eight lines. The writing is too compact, and I personally feel that it is not good for my senses. I don't know about others, but some people may like it and some may not.
The second point is that your punctuation marks and psychological description of the characters can also be divided into sections and layers. Then some details, character description, and image description. I can't give you much advice on this matter. It depends on your own writing style.
Let me give you some suggestions. If you want to express the psychological description or verbal description of the same thing, you can use different words to replace it. If you use the same words to replace it, it will be a bit cumbersome.
I believe that you have read the novels I wrote, and you have a rough idea of how to write better for the senses. Most of the description directions can only depend on your own writing style, but for some psychological descriptions and detailed descriptions, you can refer to my descriptions. And I emphasize again and again that it is divided into paragraphs. Paragraphing can make it look more refreshing, and sometimes it can be divided into several words. A paragraph of twenty or thirty words is basically good. Occasionally, a paragraph of seven or eight lines or fifty or sixty words is fine.
However, when text is written on a mobile phone with large widths of characters or paragraphs, it is not very good to the senses.
Let's talk about this first. I'll read a few more chapters when I have time later and then give my review.
I personally think it's pretty good [laughing][laughing][laughing]
Ye Tianzi, please keep working hard (˵¯͒¯͒˵)( ﹡ˆoˆ﹡ )
I definitely support my debut novel~
First of all, the first point is that your paragraphs should be separated. Basically, one paragraph of five or six lines, or one or two lines, and occasionally more than seven or eight lines. The writing is too compact, and I personally feel that it is not good for my senses. I don't know about others, but some people may like it and some may not. The second point is that your punctuation marks and psychological description of the characters can also be divided into sections and layers. Then some details, character description, and image description. I can't give you much advice on this matter. It depends on your own writing style. Let me give you some suggestions. If you want to express the psychological description or verbal description of the same thing, you can use different words to replace it. If you use the same words to replace it, it will be a bit cumbersome. I believe that you have read the novels I wrote, and you have a rough idea of how to write better for the senses. Most of the description directions can only depend on your own writing style, but for some psychological descriptions and detailed descriptions, you can refer to my descriptions. And I emphasize again and again that it is divided into paragraphs. Paragraphing can make it look more refreshing, and sometimes it can be divided into several words. A paragraph of twenty or thirty words is basically good. Occasionally, a paragraph of seven or eight lines or fifty or sixty words is fine. However, when text is written on a mobile phone with large widths of characters or paragraphs, it is not very good to the senses. Let's talk about this first. I'll read a few more chapters when I have time later and then give my review.
I personally think it's pretty good [laughing][laughing][laughing]
Ye Tianzi, please keep working hard (˵¯͒¯͒˵)( ﹡ˆoˆ﹡ )
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