Yandere Loves Song: Brother Can Only Be Mine

How should I put it, overall it's okay and edible. There are three kinds of characters in it, the unimportant one, Chef Shen, and the twisted Chef Shen? Then there is the fact that Shenji's character is currently too weak and even feels a little cowardly, or too opinionated, and his attitude towards those women is submissive. If it's not possible, I'll transform Emiya and take her away. I don't want anyone else [please taste it carefully]

I originally wanted to see the top Lingzi hacker Er Ye bravely break into Fuyuki to break the cup and fight with weapons, but it turned out to be Tao Wen from the harem, forget it, let's check it out first. It is indeed a peach story, it feels like everyone has an affair with the protagonist, and the character is a bit broken.

Suggestion: It is better to reduce or add some funny content every day, otherwise it will be difficult to say how many people will still read your book. The daily life in the original novel is funny and a bit silly, but the novel you wrote is very orthodox and ordinary day-to-day life. You have to understand that fate/fgo is not just a daily novel/anime/manga [smile]

The writing is considered level T0. Basically no errors or omissions. The disadvantage is that it is really routine. Currently, it is all about light and dark lines, and it needs a sufficiently exciting breaking point.

There is something [face covering] [OK] suitable for people who like to watch slow-paced daily life to relieve their boredom [like]

There are some bad sentences in some places, but overall it's good

It's interesting whether you should say it or not.

I'll give five stars to the model.

Author, are you still there?

The audience for fan fiction seems to be getting smaller and smaller, and there seems to be no movement in this IP.

Wow, I want to see the Shura Field explode.