A Scrap Collector Ties a Portal to Daxia and Ventures into Another World

Brother, you have too many words in this paragraph. You need to break up the sentences properly otherwise it will be crowded and tiring. Although I listened, there is no need to write too specific. It can be a little concise. This is not writing a script. Compared with novels, it is a bit too trivial. In the end, it is to write less speeches from senior officials🤦. Of course, brother, your writing is okay. It can be seen that it was just written. Just don't use its general modifiers when using AI, such as "unquestionable" and "sharp as an eagle". All the books on the eighth floor are like this. They listen more than sheep and want to beat people [OK]

I don't know if I should say it's too watery or should I say it's written in detail🤦 There are many things that should be omitted. It is much better to be simple and clear than to follow a running account. A lot of the information in brackets can be deleted, and many specific arrangements can be briefly mentioned. Now I am really writing down everything in detail, I wish I could write down all the trivial things! For example, the remaining seconds need to be written in the format of 00:00:00. I lose it and it hurts my eyes to see it. I read it quickly now, and to be honest, although it is very detailed, I have no impression at all. Because it is too detailed, I don't want to read it carefully. On the contrary, the more detailed you write, the less readers will know what you have written!

The author's writing is interesting and good😊 but some chapters are too wordy. It's a bit annoying to have to write several chapters when you can clearly explain it in just a few sentences <(`^´)>

Just read over thirty chapters. This book could be renamed A Guide to Discovering Another World. The character work arrangements are meticulous and the division of labor is clear, just like a script for a live video. Compared with some novels that hide the protagonist at every turn, fearing that the protagonist will be harmed by the slightest threat, the country's protection of the protagonist in this book is more humane and more in line with the image of a country.

The prefix narrative is too long, and the content of twenty or thirty chapters has been expanded to more than one hundred chapters. I'm no longer interested in reading it, it's like a running account

It's too watery. Starting from Chapter 24, the protagonist and the country go on an adventure in a different world. There's so much nonsense in front of it. Personally I don't think it looks good

You are writing a novel, not a thesis. The questions that fill the screen are so specific that you have filled at least a dozen chapters with water.

Although the subject matter is very interesting, the writing is too detailed and can't be read. It's not friendly especially for people who listen to books. I'd better encourage it.

So thin, I didn't know for a moment whether it was the word "water" or something else.

So wordy, so speechless