Honkai: Star Rail: The Art of Being a Cat

Finally, I saw a story that purely tells the story of Kiana and the others. Don't stop updating. Seeing such a cute Qi Bao being loved by everyone will be very touching. Qi Chu cried hard [almost cried]

To put it nicely, the writing is too detailed, but to put it badly, it's unnecessary to take off your pants and fart. There are too many descriptions, rhetoric, and adjectives, and many meanings are repeated. Is it necessary? If there are too many words but not enough, it will feel cluttered. A meaningless action or scene has to be decorated with dozens or hundreds of words, giving the impression that it is not a novel but a composition. All kinds of piling up are flashy and unrealistic. There are thousands of words in one chapter and less than 200 dialogues, which are all meaningless descriptions. I read the first 11 or 2 chapters slowly and skipped through them, and there were some mistakes in details. Wrong, the number of words in one sentence is wrong. I just finished writing the previous paragraph and wrote the next paragraph again. I almost thought the author had studied in a female channel. It felt like he could only describe the hair follicles of the characters while chatting. There were some things that were unclear about priority. The main perspective was Kiana and the others before the time travel. They were basically on the train crew behind them.

It's hard to stretch. There are too many AIs. It's not something but something that can appear 7, 8 or even a dozen times in a chapter. Just try it every one or two sentences. It will be much better if you polish it yourself. The idea is good, but AI is really difficult to stretch [face covering] [face covering]

The subject matter is very good and the opening chapter is also very good. The backend is too watery, it's nonsense literature, it greatly affects the viewing experience, there is too much nonsense. I can't keep watching even if I want to [cover face][cover face][cover face]

She was fast on her feet - not "trained" fast, but "instinct" fast. Her body suddenly dwarfed - not a fall, but a slide The crushed ice shattered under the impact of the metal stick, but not "into powder" - but "into sharp, blade-like fragments." The knees of the Void Trample are bent. Not a "bent" bend, but a "joint-pierced" bend. I'm exhausted from reading the middle three pages of Chapter 11. Brother, there are five paragraphs in total. This sentence pattern is used four times, and it's not just in this one place. From the beginning to the present, there are several places like this in every chapter. The more I read, the more awkward and uncomfortable I am [face covering]

It's quite interesting, but the original plot can be written a little shorter. A lot of the content is almost the direction of the original plot. There is no need to write it in such detail [face covering]

At first glance, Ding Zhen determined that it was an AI article. He did not proofread and polish it himself, and frequently used the description method "not but". It was like a primary school student and a junior high school student who had no words when writing an essay. He probably wrote a plot description himself and then asked the AI ​​to write ten thousand words. Moreover, there is too much written about the original plot. There are three chapters in a row that are purely about the original plot of the game, and they are all nearly 10,000 words long. Why don't I go through the main plot again when looking at the plot of the game? Everyone came in to see Kiana Mei Bronya, not to read the game text.

It was still fine before I came to Star Iron. After I came to Star Iron, was it written in AI? Isn't it a big change?

How to say it? The author should really upgrade the AI ​​or polish it by hand. The ever-present gorgeous and even greasy vocabulary still affects the perception too much, but I have to say that it is indeed well written and the setting can be said to be well grasped. At least the combat power of the Yusan family is well controlled. It is a good story. However, the piling up of vocabulary affects the perception. Is the author considering writing a few chapters by hand to see the effect?

There are some clouds and wordiness in many places. There is also a problem with the settings. The image and character of the Kiana trio are exactly as they were just after the finale of the first part. Especially Bronya and Mei Yi, they can't see the maturity and stability after eight years, which is too awkward.